dark Night Wolfe, Son of Discord

[Wolf Smith 12]

Hello everyone. I would like to introduce myself as a new writer. I will say I'm not the best and I do get hate about my stories almost everyday.

 

So anyways I have 2 fics that I have up on FIMfiction, which I'm beginning to hate(For reasons).

 

Anyways when you do go look at the stories I will say chapter 1 of both are not my best, but the rest seem ok. Just please help a new writer.

 

First let me say this: My OC is an alicorn, let me stop you right there, he is in no way OP or Mary Sue and I made sure of that.

 

And don't just say the story suck, tell me why.

 

Story 1: http://www.fimfiction.net/story/144080/night-wolfe-son-of-discord

 

Story 2: http://www.fimfiction.net/story/150051/my-oc-in-my-world

 

Please do help me

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You just need to practise some more that's all. If you keep it up you could write something really great.

[Wolf Smith 12]

You just need to practise some more that's all. If you keep it up you could write something really great.

*hugs* Thank you for helping me..almost done with chapter 7. I'm scared cause I'm bringing in Twilight into the main story. So thank you.