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[Cannon and rarity 38]

I'm making a new fan fic and I need ideas so here is my description for it: Trixie wake up a year after an incident almost killing her but what she doesn't know is a few weeks later an apoclypse started with very few survivors will her and her friends survive? And who will die?

[Chigens and Kay 3,831]

I'm making a new fan fic and I need ideas so here is my description for it: Trixie wake up a year after an incident almost killing her but what she doesn't know is a few weeks later an apoclypse started with very few survivors will her and her friends survive? And who will die?

 

Hey there.

 

As this seems to be looking for feedback / ideas, I've moved it on over to Creative Resources.

[Cannon and rarity 38]

Hey there.

 

As this seems to be looking for feedback / ideas, I've moved it on over to Creative Resources.

This website is officially the msot confusing website in the world how come this place is literally called fan fictions and there are so many people who did the same exact things

[yisetab28 89]

This website is officially the msot confusing website in the world how come this place is literally called fan fictions and there are so many people who did the same exact things

 

Nah, putting your stuff here is fine. Care to give me the link to the fic? I might be able to help.

[Cannon and rarity 38]

Nah, putting your stuff here is fine. Care to give me the link to the fic? I might be able to help.

I actually haven't gotten chapter one done so it's impossible to see until I put 1,000 words and get accepted

[yisetab28 89]

I actually haven't gotten chapter one done so it's impossible to see until I put 1,000 words and get accepted

 

Ok then, here are a few tips and questions you need to get right for the story:

 

Why did Trixie survive? Why her and not other more able ponies? Why did she fall asleep for more than 1 year?

 

How do we know that an apocalyptic event will strike a few weeks later?  Why did you use "started" (a past tense verb) to describe an event in the future? Well unless you want to do something about time travel, that would justify it but still, it's a confusing grammar.

 

Why did those other ponies survive? Who are they?

 

What is the cataclysm that happened 1 year earlier?

 

Those are some questions I would ask myself when reading your fanfic. You need to remember to take everything into account, not leave a single detail behind.

[Cannon and rarity 38]

Ok then, here are a few tips and questions you need to get right for the story:

 

Why did Trixie survive? Why her and not other more able ponies? Why did she fall asleep for more than 1 year?

 

How do we know that an apocalyptic event will strike a few weeks later?  Why did you use "started" (a past tense verb) to describe an event in the future? Well unless you want to do something about time travel, that would justify it but still, it's a confusing grammar.

 

Why did those other ponies survive? Who are they?

 

What is the cataclysm that happened 1 year earlier?

 

Those are some questions I would ask myself when reading your fanfic. You need to remember to take everything into account, not leave a single detail behind.

Why trixy?: I just feel she need more love

Why did she fall asleep for over a year: uhhhhhhh PINKIE PIE

How did we know it started weeks later?: people told her

Why using started: again uhhh pinkie pie

Why did other people survive who are they?: because apoclypse stuff and lots of people like: dr hooves,big Mac,applebloom,spitfire,flash century,Fluttershy and a lot more

What happend a year earlier?: I'm gonna make a prequel all about it

 

Any more questions?

[yisetab28 89]

Why trixy?: I just feel she need more love

Why did she fall asleep for over a year: uhhhhhhh PINKIE PIE

How did we know it started weeks later?: people told her

Why using started: again uhhh pinkie pie

Why did other people survive who are they?: because apoclypse stuff and lots of people like: dr hooves,big Mac,applebloom,spitfire,flash century,Fluttershy and a lot more

What happend a year earlier?: I'm gonna make a prequel all about it

 

Any more questions?

 

Although Pinkie Pie is undoubtedly awesome, she is not a good explanation if you are writing a serious fanfic.

Also, why did AJ and other ponies who would know how to handle stuff didn't survive, but a girl who brags and lies for a living does?

And just "I feel she needed love" does not justify why she survived. In my fanfic, most of those who are still there in the war are there because they were the best, the ones who knew how to fight and survive, and no one, no one survived because of love. In a post-apocalyptic world such as the one you are writing, only the best survive, and I doubt Trixie has any real life experience.

 

I highly recommend you go on Springhole and read some of the tutorials there.

[Cannon and rarity 38]

Although Pinkie Pie is undoubtedly awesome, she is not a good explanation if you are writing a serious fanfic.

Also, why did AJ and other ponies who would know how to handle stuff didn't survive, but a girl who brags and lies for a living does?

And just "I feel she needed love" does not justify why she survived. In my fanfic, most of those who are still there in the war are there because they were the best, the ones who knew how to fight and survive, and no one, no one survived because of love. In a post-apocalyptic world such as the one you are writing, only the best survive, and I doubt Trixie has any real life experience.

 

I highly recommend you go on Springhole and read some of the tutorials there.

Everyone has there fails you know applejack survived for 11 months straight but then died and I did that to make surviving harder and more tense and when I put pinkie pie those two times

1st time: pinkie pie knocked her out

2nd time: I'll change it soon

And I will soon

Edited April 22, 2015 by Cannon and rarity

[Queen Sparkle 104]

Why trixy?: I just feel she need more love

Why did she fall asleep for over a year: uhhhhhhh PINKIE PIE

How did we know it started weeks later?: people told her

Why using started: again uhhh pinkie pie

Why did other people survive who are they?: because apoclypse stuff and lots of people like: dr hooves,big Mac,applebloom,spitfire,flash century,Fluttershy and a lot more

What happend a year earlier?: I'm gonna make a prequel all about it

Any more questions?

Well most writers try to plan out a series of events that happens I mean you could say this which I often say if explaining needs done "It will be either in this story, a prequel, or a sequel."

[yisetab28 89]

Everyone has there fails you know applejack survived for 11 months straight but then died and I did that to make surviving harder and more tense and when I put pinkie pie those two times

1st time: pinkie pie knocked her out

2nd time: I'll change it soon

And I will soon

 

How do we know that she survived for 11 months? Why 11 months? Why did she die there?

 

AND DON'T YOU DARE SAY PINKIE PIE

[Cannon and rarity 38]

We know that because that's why people make prequels for BACKROUND infomation

Oh and why 1 months?: becuase when Trixy finds Big Mac he talks about applejack dieing and is still sad about it because it wasn't too long ago

[yisetab28 89]

We know that because that's why people make prequels for BACKROUND infomation

Oh and why 1 months?: becuase when Trixy finds Big Mac he talks about applejack dieing and is still sad about it because it wasn't too long ago

 

First, not to offend you but you really must work on your grammar, I can barely understand anything.

 

Second, try to write a long enough intro about the setting: where the story is, when it happens, why is happens, stuff like that before actually introducing the characters. In "Symphony of Steel" (my fanfic here :http://www.fimfiction.net/story/256918/the-30th-tiger), I spend something like 5 paragraph describing the setting before actual action, and the characters are only mentionned in the 3rd paragraph. Be precise. Tell us where and when, but not what or who. We need to know what happened to understand the story. Don't be afraid to stretch it out, you could have a whole intro chapter if you think it's adequate.

 

Finally, some tutorials about apocalyptic stuff and describing from the excellent website Springhole. Read the tutorials there, they help. A lot.

 

http://www.springhole.net/writing/apocalyptic-cataclysmic-plot-scenario.htm

http://www.springhole.net/writing/build-better-post-apocalyptic-and-or-dystopian-settings.htm

http://www.springhole.net/writing/pitch-your-story.htm

 

Have fun and good writing.

[Cannon and rarity 38]

Alright then (rainbows and unicorns to get 20 characters)

[yisetab28 89]

Alright then (rainbows and unicorns to get 20 characters)

 

Also, if you can't get it submitted now, could you attach a .txt file of your draft so that I can see it?