Can anyone rate my OC?

[Midnight Starfall 179]

Hello everypony.
 
Before I post my OC as a character sheet, I wanted some feedback on her. Constructive criticism is welcome.
 
Name: Skyla Midnight Starfall
Age: Mare
Gender: Female
Species: Pegasus
Appearance: http://tinypic.com/view.php?pic=160artl&s=8#.U6za_7EraxB
Cutie Mark: A shooting star with a blue trail

Personality: Skyla is outgoing, she isn't afraid to share what's on her mind but, she is reckless and never thinks before saying. She likes to help other ponies and tries to be kind to everyone. She is very curious, which tends to get her into trouble, and she is also soft-hearted. If she offends or hurts anyone, she'll do everything she can to make things right.

 

Backstory: Skyla was born and raised in Ponyville by her two loving parents, Moonglow, a unicorn and her mom and Lunar Starfall, a pegasus and her dad. Her parents always supported her and helped her out. She was an only filly, so she was used to being alone. The other school ponies never really noticed her, except her 2 close friends.

 

Skyla did pretty well in all of her classes. She was always curious and willing to learn something new. Her favorite subject was astronomy. She loved looking at the stars at night and studying different types of stars and finding constellations.

 

 Even with her good grades, she was very athletic. She was never the best, but she tried. She never cared about winning or losing, she just wanted to have fun. She loved flying the most of all. Skyla always pushed her limits and made herself fly faster. She always flies at night, that's when she can look at the stars and fly at the same time.

 

Skyla earned her cutie mark one day when she was gazing at the stars. She couldn't fly at at the time, but she really wanted to. She ran back and got a running start, flapping her wings as fast as she could. She got two inches of the ground, and she was flying fast, at least for a filly. For the first time she flew, and she looked up at the stars and saw a shooting star for the first time. After a couple of seconds, she made a hard landing, landing on her stomach. Her parents went out to see what was wrong, and found her on her stomach, breathing hard and a big grin on her face. She looked at her flank and saw her cutie mark finally appeared. She got up and jumped for joy. It was one of the happiest moment of her life.

 

To this day, she resides in Ponyville, working a job as an astronomer, studying the stars and and constellations. Every night, she takes a flight, remembering the time she got her cutie mark and reminding herself of how much she loves the stars and the night.

 

Thanks!

~Midnight Starfall

[PonyFan101 30]

Ooh! Nice, detailed back story. I rarely hear of inter "species" couples, referring to her parents. Her like of athleticism is fairly typical of pegasai, i believe. Here obsession with stars isn't extremely unique, as i feel most pegasai love these sorts of things. Her high intelligence can be rare, although she isn't exactly a "book worm" whoops! To rephase that, a love of intellegence and learning is somewhat rare, not intelligence in general. 

 

Overall a great character, one that blows mine away (obsessed with dragobs)

[Midnight Starfall 179]

Ooh! Nice, detailed back story. I rarely hear of inter "species" couples, referring to her parents. Her like of athleticism is fairly typical of pegasai, i believe. Here obsession with stars isn't extremely unique, as i feel most pegasai love these sorts of things. Her high intelligence can be rare, although she isn't exactly a "book worm" whoops! To rephase that, a love of intellegence and learning is somewhat rare, not intelligence in general. 

 

Overall a great character, one that blows mine away (obsessed with dragobs)

 

Thanks for the feedback! I'm glad you like my OC! I tried to make her unique yet not a Mary Sue.

[PonyFan101 30]

And you did a very good job!  She is quite believable, but i dont see her as a mary sue.

[Cyan Blue 946]

If you want me to be completely honest. The apperance is alright, it's not bad. It's just not great IMO.

 

The backstory is nothing I haven't seen before. I would add a little more, spark, you know (lol). But, not too Mary Sue-ish.

 

Just constructive criticism, please don't be offended!

[88888888888888888888 129]

Suggestion; maybe remove the boots? Usually princesses wear those types of boots.

 

If you want her with accessories, I would suggest glasses or something.

Alert; stereotype here, but you said she has good grades, so y'know, glasses. ( I have glasses myself, so ^^ )

 

 

Please don't be offended D:

[Midnight Starfall 179]

I'm not offended at all guys! I appreciate the honesty and constructive criticism. I'll probably add some flight goggles or something, and the yellow boots are her hooves. What do you guys suggest I add to the backstory?

[mars 4,862]

 

 

yellow boots are her hooves

 

Is there any special reason for this? It does make your OC look a bit... odd. I suppose, is the word. Her colors are quite clashing- black and white mane, dark purple, and yellow hooves. 

Her personality is fine. I personally don't mind it. She's not Mary-Sueish, and I like that she has both negative and positive qualities. Many people lean towards one side.

 

I think her story is cute too.

[Midnight Starfall 179]

 

 

Is there any special reason for this? It does make your OC look a bit... odd. I suppose, is the word. Her colors are quite clashing- black and white mane, dark purple, and yellow hooves. 

Her personality is fine. I personally don't mind it. She's not Mary-Sueish, and I like that she has both negative and positive qualities. Many people lean towards one side.

 

I think her story is cute too.

 

 

There's not really a special reason, I guess I thought it made her look cool.   I know I need to work on the color pallete, have any suggestions?

So I tried to update my OC on Pony Creator. I didn't want to upload it to an image host since this is just testing some colors. Here's the pony code for it: 2S2S000010530063FEA99E002010600BAUN1837000000001W16756E2FEFF4D1E107F3FCC004CB2

 

Let me know what you guys think.

[Salacberry 90]

I think Skyla's backstory is fine, and you did a good job making her seem believable.

 

As for the colours, I like the night sky theme you've incorporated into her design. I'm not sure about the yellow though- it clashes a bit with the rest of her colour scheme. The black and white mane on the original image looks a bit harsh as well, but I like the blue-purple  you used in the second one. I think maybe that colour combined with a lighter greyish purple or blue would work well and still convey the night theme you're going for.

 

I hope I helped a bit! Good luck with your OC, she's going well so far.

[Midnight Starfall 179]

I think Skyla's backstory is fine, and you did a good job making her seem believable.

 

As for the colours, I like the night sky theme you've incorporated into her design. I'm not sure about the yellow though- it clashes a bit with the rest of her colour scheme. The black and white mane on the original image looks a bit harsh as well, but I like the blue-purple  you used in the second one. I think maybe that colour combined with a lighter greyish purple or blue would work well and still convey the night theme you're going for.

 

I hope I helped a bit! Good luck with your OC, she's going well so far.

 

Thanks! From your suggestion, I edited the mane and tail with that color. Do you think it looks okay?

Code: 2S2S000010530063FEA99E002010600BAUN1837000000001W16756E27E3F961E107F3FCC004CB2

[Salacberry 90]

Thanks! From your suggestion, I edited the mane and tail with that color. Do you think it looks okay?

Code: 2S2S000010530063FEA99E002010600BAUN1837000000001W16756E27E3F961E107F3FCC004CB2

 

No problem! And yes, that looks good!

[Midnight Starfall 179]

Thanks for all of your feedback everyone! I think I have a pretty good OC now!

[mars 4,862]

Thanks! From your suggestion, I edited the mane and tail with that color. Do you think it looks okay?

Code: 2S2S000010530063FEA99E002010600BAUN1837000000001W16756E27E3F961E107F3FCC004CB2

Looks great now! Congrats!

[Midnight Starfall 179]

Looks great now! Congrats!

 

Thanks! And thanks for helping me!

[Aurelion Star 434]

cool back story for midnight

and her design is magnefico

great job

[Snow Frostflame 3,568]

nice your oc look very nice very original as well

[Aurelion Star 434]

yes I agree with her 
really awesome