ooc Bangcolt Arena! (Fighting/Sol) (OOC)

[P-Jay 1,987]

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Sweet Celestia can I please fight Eclipse?! 

sure! go for it!! who'll be fighting him?

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Sweet Celestia

Sweet Celestia of Equestria!

[Steel Accord 6,660]

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Considering he's supposed to be some kind of dark god, in addition to everything that's wrong with OC's!   . . . Ezekiel please. 

[P-Jay 1,987]

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Considering he's supposed to be some kind of dark god, in addition to everything that's wrong with OC's!   . . . Ezekiel please. 

i try.

[Steel Accord 6,660]

i try.

 

Oh thank Christ he's supposed to be bad. I mean that doesn't make it less painful to read his page but it dulls that pain at least that he's intentionally a caricature.

Edited April 20, 2015 by Steel Accord

[P-Jay 1,987]

I thank Christ he's supposed to be bad. I mean that doesn't make it less painful to read his page but it dulls that pain at least that he's intentionally a caricature.

i really didnt put any thought at all into him, i just needed a villain. came up with a name, based almost everything of said name, and that was it.

[Steel Accord 6,660]

I agree with Steel on both posts he quoted. Though I wonder, Steel do you think Lektra would make more sense as a guest star or something? She would stand out too much in the background, but I didn't design her  to be a main character per se. Canon wise. The lightning bolt burns on her legs are optional, really.

 

Well let me read her page first and let me tell you what I think.

[P-Jay 1,987]

But man, Eclipse is overpowered. I think even Celestia would have a hard time against him.

it took luna teleporting him to the moon, and celestia making the moon collide with the sun before he could teleport back to take him out. the moon and sun were already in position (eclipse)...his own doing was his downfall.

[Steel Accord 6,660]

@@bronislav84,

 

Okay let me grade this systematically.

 

Appearance:

 

Okay the wings and the (optional) lighting marks? A little much. (Although "Rainbow Power" Lektra and the bolts would be perfect.) Apart from that though, that's actually not a bad design. Color scheme isn't eye searing, the frazzled hair of the inventor works, and the tool belt and googles says a lot about her character before she even says anything.

 

Even the robot assistance channels the pet archetype like Tank, Opal, etc.

 

Personality:

 

Nicely rounded actually. She's inventive, passionate, but her zaniness can turn other ponies off. Like Pinkie only with science instead of parties.

 

Backstory:

 

I would only say that she seems a little out of place in Equestria as it exists now. Jump the timeframe up a few decades though and she's fit like a sock! 

 

Hell I could easily imagine her in a post-cyberpunk story! Her parents own a megacorporation and she tries to get away from that world but if she doesn't use her expertise, her parents could loose everything they've built to somepony with for less scruples than they have; this is stuff ripe with potential!

[Mars Orbit 729]

Im back with new name and new avatar.(I kept some red because it looked cool)

[Steel Accord 6,660]

it took luna teleporting him to the moon, and celestia making the moon collide with the sun before he could teleport back to take him out. the moon and sun were already in position (eclipse)...his own doing was his downfall.

 

Yeah all that praise I just gave Lektra? Opposite for him. You wanted to make an evil guy with the name Eclipse? Okay.

 

Planet sized manta ray who blocks out the suns of planets, lets them freeze over, and then feeds on them like a snow cone. There! Pulled that completely out of my plot!

Im back with new name and new avatar.(I kept some red because it looked cool)

 

Hmmm the eyes are a little off putting but that's actually not bad.

[Vae Victis 742]

If there is still any space, I think I'd like to join in with a couple of OC's.

 

Here is the first one:

http://mlpforums.com/page/roleplay-characters/_/naga-the-rakshasa-r8043

 

Summary:

 

 

A seemingly young monk from the mountains of Eiquet. He is almost never serious and is a jokester. Naga almost never takes a fight seriously and can come off as a major buffoon. However, beneath all of this lies a deadly, quick, and fierce warrior with powerful spiritual channeling techniques that would take decades for one to master, along with masterful martial arts skills that seem to be honed by years of experience. Is Naga really what he says he is? And if he is more... then what is he really? Watch out for those hookswords!

 

 

http://mlpforums.com/page/roleplay-characters/_/lorec-krin-r6942

 

Summary:

 

An absolute beast of a minotaur, standing a full head over most of his brethren with plenty of muscle from years and years of training and battle. Lorec is a " keeper " of an organization known as the Divine Retribution Order, being the third strongest out of the organization's five leaders. Lorec is the keeper of earth, and wields a mighty zweihander in battle. This zweihander contains within it the power of a being known as " the ursa king ", a sentient, semi-divine being said to have been quite powerful in life, now granting his champion the power to call upon the earth as their weapon. Lorec is very quiet and fairly serious. He has a strict honor code and hides scars from previous battles... and failures... with a tunic and bandages around his arms. Lorec fights predominantly with his fists as a brawler, only drawing his sword and calling upon the powers of Viruden ( the being in the sword) when the one he is fighting is worthy. Before a battle, Lorec prays to a being known as Nülvak in ancestral veneration, as in his culture, it is believed that great warriors become warrior gods.... also known... as stormbringers. ( you know what I'm talking about, Peyton )

[Steel Accord 6,660]

@@bronislav84,

 

One last thing. The first name could use some work. I mean most pony names come from phrases or plays on words. "Lektra" seems a little odd for their world. From her personality, something like "Spark Bolt" would seem a little better.

 

Keep in mind, everything I'm saying is meant to be suggestion, I'm not mandating anypony if they don't want to change their OCs.

 

Just for example "Steel Accord" comes from the samurai adage "the pen and sword in equal accord." Swords are made of steel so . . . Steel Accord!

[Mars Orbit 729]

Hmmm the eyes are a little off putting but that's actually not bad.

Yes partial victory

[P-Jay 1,987]

i...found...ezekeil's profile.

 

http://mlpforums.com/page/roleplay-characters/_/ezekiel-fallout-equestria-r8072

[Mars Orbit 729]

Eyes were an accident

[Steel Accord 6,660]

@,

 

I'm still interested but I actually have some homework I need to get to. Gotta graduate before I can be a writer for real after all. 

[P-Jay 1,987]

i...found...ezekeil's profile.

 

http://mlpforums.com...equestria-r8072

[Mars Orbit 729]

Before I nerf green I wanna fight Lorec

[P-Jay 1,987]

Before I nerf green I wanna fight Lorec

who?

[Steel Accord 6,660]

 

 

Man why does everyone think Rainbow with the burns? I designed her in Season 3 when it wasn't even a thing yet lol. Believe me when I say this, Rainbow she would have way more stuff than that. It's really closer to scars or burns than a good thing. Like "I got hit by lighting and didn't quite walk away unscathed" kind of thing. In fact every gray part is burns. Her hair got affected too.

 

I actually like her design though, and I like how she got her cutie mark by being struck by lighting. That kicks the crap out of the Mane Six's stories! They would require some explanation, maybe a down grade in appearance, but I say keep them. 

 

 

 

It's not necessarily apparent, but she only has wings when Sparky turns into the backpack. Hence the arrow, but I realize not everyone will immediately get that.

 

Hmmm Rarity got wings temporarily too. I guess I would just suggest the wing design being less pegasus like. That's a nitpick though.

 

 

 

I try to make her fit with Canon, but I admit it's a bit higher than what we've seen. I implement her inventions without computers or electronic circuitry, so it's designed for a world where magic is common. But yea it's canon derived, not strictly canon. I gotta do some changes for Empire as a result.

 

Just a suggestion. Overall, for whatever my opinion is worth, I approve of this OC. 

 

i...found...ezekeil's profile.

 

http://mlpforums.com...equestria-r8072

 

 

I know. I posted it before.

[P-Jay 1,987]

okay, so who all has what OCs? i wanna update my first post.

[Mars Orbit 729]

Why is it every time I post something at least 8 people post while I write

Edited April 20, 2015 by Mars orbit

[Steel Accord 6,660]

okay, so who all has what OCs? i wanna update my first post.

 

Steel Accord and Ezkiel. 

 

Undecided challenger.

Edited April 20, 2015 by Steel Accord

[Vae Victis 742]

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They are talking about Lorec, my minotaur OC. I just put in an app and I'm just waiting for your approval ^__^

[P-Jay 1,987]

bro, everyone's approved. as long as they up hold da rules.