Story I'm Writing.

[Primarch Fulgrim 163]

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/260759/liberty-unto-death-warhammer-40k-my-little-pony-crossover-short

 

Story that I'm writing. Don't have to know much about the Warhammer 40k universe to read. Tell me anything about it and if I should continue and finish it. 

~Thanks

[nolongerabout 403]

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/260759/liberty-unto-death-warhammer-40k-my-little-pony-crossover-short

 

Story that I'm writing. Don't have to know much about the Warhammer 40k universe to read. Tell me anything about it and if I should continue and finish it. 

~Thanks

 

I know a little bit about warhammer 40k, and to be honest this is really not a bad story. First chapter really sets the scene, and highlights the bleakness of their situation. Character seem well built, with enough backstory, even though he is probably going to end up as cannon fodder (Like the rest of the imperial guard). Second chapter is obviously a bit short, but I'm sure that'll be improved. It's a great premise, I think. The whole "twelve hours to live" idiom helps to build suspense without having to write it into the story.

 

I couldn't find any spelling mistakes; and the few grammatical errors don't really damage the piece badly. Keep writing, it can only get better from here.

 

You've earned a like, mate.

[Primarch Fulgrim 163]

I know a little bit about warhammer 40k, and to be honest this is really not a bad story. First chapter really sets the scene, and highlights the bleakness of their situation. Character seem well built, with enough backstory, even though he is probably going to end up as cannon fodder (Like the rest of the imperial guard). Second chapter is obviously a bit short, but I'm sure that'll be improved. It's a great premise, I think. The whole "twelve hours to live" idiom helps to build suspense without having to write it into the story.

 

I couldn't find any spelling mistakes; and the few grammatical errors don't really damage the piece badly. Keep writing, it can only get better from here.

 

You've earned a like, mate.

Thanks! I'm adding onto the 2nd chapter now and hope to get started on the third.

[Kivil 1,721]

I know nothing about Warhammer 40k, but since I read your fan fic I want to know! Continue forth my friend!!!!

Edited June 14, 2015 by ~Opportunistic Arty~

[Primarch Fulgrim 163]

Thanks for the support guys! Spread the word, I want to see what other people think about this!

[Primarch Fulgrim 163]

Adding some more to the story! Tune in for more action in the 41st Millennium!

[Odyssey 5,717]

Hello ! As this has to do with showing off a piece of work, I have moved this thread from Creative Resources to the Fan Fiction sub-forum.