critique wanted I can't find what is wrong (other than the obvious) with my sketch

[MoltenKitten 341]

I decided to try to make a pony on my pc for practice and this is as far as I got before I realized it is horrid

Now I know the eyes need fixing but something else is also making me freak out but I can't tell what. Help me find out. Also help me fix the whole thing and finish it.

[StormLantern the 1st 427]

I'm no artist, but here's what I think.

 

The ears need to be moved upward and made larger, and the eyes either need to be larger or they need to be further back.

 

Examples:

http://vignette2.wikia.nocookie.net/mlp/images/4/46/Double_Diamond_ID_S5E2.png/revision/latest?cb=20150410093859

http://vignette1.wikia.nocookie.net/mlp/images/b/bd/Trouble_Shoes_ID_S5E6.png/revision/latest?cb=20150502191527

On Double Diamond, the eartips are slightly above the crown of his head(though not above his mane), and there is only a small gap between his eyes and his ears

On Trouble Shoes, the ears are quite a bit higher than the crown, and there is almost no space between his eyes and ears.

 

The only other thing I see is that you've left the chest unfinished to the point where the legs have nowhere to attach.

 

Edit: Might also be that the legs are too long. Not sure.

 

Hope this helps!

Edited November 17, 2015 by Storm Lantern

[LordSwinton 759]

I'm not sure what is part of your style and design but the ears are too small and the muzzle is too boxy, the back/rump area is too flat, chest is not round/big enough, legs too long, eyes too circular, should be more oval 

[Noonenew12 89]

I think the main thing that stands out to me are the eyes. They need to be more oval rather than a perfect circle. There's quite a few MLP eye reference guides on deviant art which are incredibly useful.

 

The main thing here is to keep at it