Doctor Whooves: Lyra's Switcheroo Mistake (Advice needed)

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Hi, everyone, theMareBrony here. On my last topic was about me wanting some cover art for a certain fanfiction I screwed up cause I don't know how to cope with MLP Forums. 

 

Anyway, a moderator over at fimfiction.net decided that it was best for me to share this story in a google doc file if I want feedback before I publish it so I hope it doesn't break any of the MLP Forum rules (sounds weird, I know.) 

 

Here is the link: 

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1gxeVyhgGcEWr0NFHAbgj5xxREI_mFsY4NLFOP0g3PnE/edit?usp=sharing

 

I think the biggest flaw for the chapter of this fanfiction is that it didn't exactly flow as I thought it would in my head and I started to make the Master a little out of character, I wanted him to enter the TARDIS and see that the Doctor only just got a new companion. Maybe the Doctor tries to kick him out or something? I don't know but I want ideas to run for at least 1,000 words. Golden and Derpy were his last companions which is why the Master said "companions." 

 

The storyline of this fanfiction is that Lyra gets angry over the two fighting for freedom or conquering, 

however she accidently makes a spell that switches the time lords around. If you haven't seen my 

request for cover art, go over there to see the references of those characters. I only cope with 

scripts which is why I'm struggling with this story right now. 

 

If anyone can give me advice or ideas for this fanfiction, please let me know. 

Thanks in advance. (Don't give me too spoilery ideas though.)