Looking for some thoughts on a WIP of mine (beta, cover art, etc.) ... ?

[Nick Graham 0]

Several weeks ago, I was watching one of my favorite anime: a series of OVAs called Karas. Think of what might happen when you cross Batman with the Mighty Morphin' Power Rangers. Mix with a lot of blood and add plenty of dazzling animation, and you pretty much have Karas right there.

 

Somewhere down the line, I started wondering what MLP would look like if it was made in the art style of Karas. Then, I started wondering if anybrony on dA or FiMFiction or any other place had beaten me to the punch.

 

Nothing. No My Little Karas, nothing.

 

And that was when I realized I could be onto something promising here.

 

Last week, I started laying the groundwork for what is possibly the first-ever crossover with Karas and FiM. (Well, I dunno about a crossover--the way I have it thus far, its like Karas with ponies, but eventually I want to put enough elements of my own in it to where it can hopefully be something close to a stand-alone work of fanfiction instead of some rip-off of a fantastic work of animation.) Anyway, at the time of posting, I've got two rough chapters and a modified screenshot from the OVA that I probably won't be using as the cover art for very much longer (because I can't hardly draw for *squee*), but in the interest of completeness, I'll be posting it here too.

 

Here's a synopsis of the story:

 

One moment, a routine disturbance turned horribly wrong for the pony called The Mysterious Mare-Do-Well. The next, she found herself in what she had once believed were old mares’ tales—a ship that could navigate the stars, sailing a river far larger than any in all Equestria.

 

She learned that this river, the great Eridanus, was a bridge between worlds—and that some primeval force threatened the existence of not only Eridanus, but all of Equestria.

 

As Manehattan prepares for its famous Nightmare Night celebration, whispers are traveling the streets—tales of ponies disappearing into thin air, and rumors of vicious creatures, neither equine nor beast, that can walk among ponykind without suspicion.

 

Now, the Mare-Do-Well must wield a magic as old as Eridanus itself to defeat this ancient evil. But is her newfound power worth turning her back on a promise she made long ago?

 

 

And attached is the poor, poor excuse for cover art I've been rolling with:

 

 

TL;DR I am in unfamiliar territory; is anybrony willing to offer me some suggestions here?