writing Gravity Well (Lyrics)

[Viscra Maelstrom 3,718]

i wrote lyrics today. after a long time of not doing so, i think it was fun practice.

 

 

it's set to the tune of this song:

 

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=sFu6zyix6IY

 

copy-pasta from dA:

 

"It might be a bit confusing to follow up with, but essentially the lyrics are set to the tune of the song. Not entirely, though, as it's blended with standard singing and rapping rhythms. If I were a good vocalist (dunno if I am or not, I haven't tested that out fully), I would try and sing this to give you all a better understanding of how the lyrics go as.

But I like the lyrics, anyway. Took me about 30 minutes or so to write. It's been a while since I wrote lyrics to a song, so this was good practice."

 

tell me what you think of it, please.