writing Chernobyl, a poem

[Dusty Soul 2,611]

Chernobyl

 

As the fumes filled the
air

No one seemed to care

They all didn't know what

was going on

As they piled them in

buses to leave their lawns

No one understood

Though the misconception

still stands

That they actually cared

about the people dying

When reactor 4 was melting

When radiation pierced the

skies

Did those people need to

die

And as those fumes filled

the air

No one seemed to care

 

 

 

They took them away, but
were too late

The radiation had spread

to decide their fate

Swollen bodies, and

cancers becoming

All to real

The fumes filled the air

no one seemed to care

 

 

 

Who can we blame

Was it the people

Was it the government

was it the people in the

highest sectors

wishing away the people

beneath them

hooping one day they'd be

dead and gone

Hoping to rid the life

that was

Maybe they didn't mean it

Yeah

I can see it

We blame the government
for everything

what about this

The fumes continued to fly

in the sky

The rescue workers all got

caught

in the invisible cloud

that they had fought

Cancerous radiation

poisoning at it's finest

losing the battle

finally ready to

lie down and

die

And as the fumes filled

the air

no one seemed to care

 

I wrote this for my geography class.  I think it's pretty good.

Edited February 1, 2013 by Dusty Soul

[Oran Schvoletski 49]

That was actually really interesting. Nice poem in my opinion, but then again I don't write many poems so not much to compare it to. Still, better than the stuff I have written.

[Jack Durango 119]

Well, yes, no one actually meant for it to happen. I don't know about government conspiracy theories around it.

 

Decent poem, I say.

 

Though there are a few spelling mistakes, so you might wanna go back and fix those. Unless they were intentional. Or unintentionally intentional. /Mindfck

[Harmonic Revelations 8,835]

Pretty good poem over all. If I could point out one thing, the formatting you picked was fairly odd and hard to follow, especially the spacing.

[Dusty Soul 2,611]

Well, yes, no one actually meant for it to happen. I don't know about government conspiracy theories around it.

 

Decent poem, I say.

 

Though there are a few spelling mistakes, so you might wanna go back and fix those. Unless they were intentional. Or unintentionally intentional. /Mindfck

Well, the thing is the government didn't evacuate the area until the day after. (at least in theory)  The radiation had already fallen, I will go back and fix the spelling mistakes, thanks.

 

 

Pretty good poem over all. If I could point out one thing, the formatting you picked was fairly odd and hard to follow, especially the spacing.

Yeah, I know.  I had the thing all spaced out very nicely and the thing went to hell when I put submit new topic... I'm in the process of fixing it though.

Edited February 1, 2013 by Dusty Soul

[Fridge 382]

I really like this poem, I will freely admit that when it comes to prose I'm no expert but something about this struck a chord won't me. I do like that you've included a bit about the supposed cover up not many people know about that.

[Sonata18 105]

great job!  I love reading about the Chernobyl disaster.  It's so fascinating.  The pictures of pripyat and the abandoned amusement park there are crazy.  

[Dusty Soul 2,611]

I really like this poem, I will freely admit that when it comes to prose I'm no expert but something about this struck a chord won't me. I do like that you've included a bit about the supposed cover up not many people know about that.

Thank you, yeah, I do believe it to be true, Chernobyl is one of those things I like reading about.  Ever since we studied it in class I've been researching it, and that's one of the things I came across.

[Fridge 382]

Thank you, yeah, I do believe it to be true, Chernobyl is one of those things I like reading about.  Ever since we studied it in class I've been researching it, and that's one of the things I came across.

Your quite welcome

 

I got interested in it after playing Stalker, even went there on my travels (well Pripyat actually). It's quite an interesting thing to read about, especially when you take in the historical context of the time. Some of the off the wall conspiracy theories are amusing to read... I vaguely remember one about the towers you see around being used in a mind control experiment (told you it's off the wall).

 

But it is true they never told the firefighters etc about the radiation.

Edited February 1, 2013 by Fridge