drama Moving on up - Preread

[Stargazer Nights 226]

Hey guys, I just finished the very very short introduction piece of a fanfiction I'm attempting to write based somewhat off of the situation created in "University Days" with Vinyl and Octavia at Manehatten University.

 

I titled it "Moving on Up", and I would like some feedback on how it reads so far, to see if I should even put effort into continuing it. It can be found here. So yeah, thanks in advance, and I hope you guys like it so far!