Count to a million

[Fishy Stick 7,550]

38,716

 

Alright then 

[Deae Rising Shine~ 54,870]

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because of that, I try to notput important things during those scenes, so even the ones, who not read that part can still follow the story^^

[Fishy Stick 7,550]

38,718

 

You writing is definitely getting better. 

[Deae Rising Shine~ 54,870]

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Why thanky(You will understand thanky soon^^)

[Fishy Stick 7,550]

38,720

 

I already understand Thanky. You made up a contraction! 

[Deae Rising Shine~ 54,870]

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how far are you already?

[Fishy Stick 7,550]

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Finished    I read pretty fast.

[gameangel147 5,915]

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I can read fast, but my OCD tends to slow me down. 

[Deae Rising Shine~ 54,870]

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and how do you like it so far?

[Fishy Stick 7,550]

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The writing style is good, your grammars not to bad. No offense but you've definitely improved from Chapter 1.

 

Do you have OCD Game?

Edited April 17, 2014 by The Snapp

[Deae Rising Shine~ 54,870]

38.726

 

what is this OCD?

[Fishy Stick 7,550]

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Obsessive compulsory disorder. Mental illness.

[Deae Rising Shine~ 54,870]

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oh ...

[Fishy Stick 7,550]

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Very hard to get rid of it has the power to ruin lives.

[Deae Rising Shine~ 54,870]

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*Hug gameangel*

[Fishy Stick 7,550]

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The style I'm typing in is my essay style!

[gameangel147 5,915]

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*hugs back*

 

Thanks guys, but it isn't too severe.  It just gets annoying at times.

[Fishy Stick 7,550]

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That's good that it's not severe

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[gameangel147 5,915]

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And it actually varies from time to time.  But yeah it can get in the way sometimes. 

 

And I am really surprised by how much you improved Rising?  Did you study or something?

Edited April 17, 2014 by gameangel147

[Fishy Stick 7,550]

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[Deae Rising Shine~ 54,870]

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Uhm, no, just write like usual. Did I really improve so much?

[Fishy Stick 7,550]

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Indubitably!

[gameangel147 5,915]

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Yep.  At least gammatically, it is a lot easier to read.

 

I can't say anything about story elements yet,

Edited April 17, 2014 by gameangel147

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thanky all^^