ooc Shifted: The Three Essences of Heart (OOC)

[Klopp 2,050]

 

 

Before she could finish, a massive claw burst through the floor, clamped onto the nurse and dragged her underground. A repulsive crunch echoed through the hole. There was no doubt, she was dead. 

 

It seems you misunderstood Arylett's post. The nurse that got attacked by the snapper was in the same room that Rascal's character was in, not the room Granite and Brownie are currently in. You wouldn't have been able to see that happen as it's in a different part of the hospital, and certainly wouldn't be able to jump into the new hole. 

[Convergence 83]

Oh my bad. I did misread that. Damn. Going to have to rewrite my post. Sorry was confused.

 

Edit: fixed. I really need to read closer, I read Arylett's post like 5 times and still missed the fact that that was a different room :/

Edited February 5, 2014 by Golden Shield

[valete 195]

This wHOLE thing is ridiculous!

 

HAHAHA just kidding! 

 

I hope Patrol Officer Pierce hasn't been forgotten yet. :3

[Rainbow Eclipse 3,927]

Can I please join? Human-to-pony transformations are always interesting for me. How many OCs are allowed per person?

Edited February 8, 2014 by Red Pegasus

[Arylett Charnoa 4,919]

This wHOLE thing is ridiculous!

 

HAHAHA just kidding! 

 

I hope Patrol Officer Pierce hasn't been forgotten yet. :3

Of course he hasn't been forgotten!

 

Can I please join? Human-to-pony transformations are always interesting for me. How many OCs are allowed per person?

You may join if the character you submit is accepted.

 

Only one is allowed. Based on the characters in your signature though, I would say that they wouldn't really qualify for the quality expected in this roleplay. A backstory is required. As is significantly more detail. (at least one paragraph per section, for Personality AND Backstory). 

 

---

 

Now, everyone, why you no post? I'm waiting for a few more reactions before I really move things along, but nothing's happenin'. So like, if more people don't post soon, I'll just have to move things along without you. 

[Rainbow Eclipse 3,927]

You may join if the character you submit is accepted.

 

Only one is allowed. Based on the characters in your signature though, I would say that they wouldn't really qualify for the quality expected in this roleplay. A backstory is required. As is significantly more detail. (at least one paragraph per section, for Personality AND Backstory).

Is 'Depends on RP' good enough?

[Arylett Charnoa 4,919]

Is 'Depends on RP' good enough?

No. You will need to provide a general description of what happened to your character prior to the beginning of the RP. In this RP specifically, you will need to have a unique backstory pertaining to their life as a human and how they encountered the crack that sucked them into the land of ponies.

 

Also, I said that generally a paragraph would probably be best. "Depends on the RP" is much less than a paragraph. 

Edited February 8, 2014 by Arylett Dawnsborough

[Rainbow Eclipse 3,927]

(post redacted)

Edited June 30, 2014 by Blue Eclipse

[Klopp 2,050]

@, 

 

No, it's not good enough.

 

The main reason is we know nothing about your character. Her personality is a complete mystery to anyone who reads that. Plus what you have here is not even a backstory. There is no development, you just jump straight to when she falls into the crack, and all we learn about her is she is willing to throw her jewelry at any random mugger.

 

What does she do? In what kind of place does she live? What is her relationship with her family? Does she have any friends? What is/was her job, or did she not even have one? What was she on her way to do when she was attacked by the random mugger? Most of these questions, and many more, should be answered in regards to any characters backstory.

 

All your ponies lack any sort of character development, which is essential to a good OC. Without character development, you don't really have a character at all.

[Rainbow Eclipse 3,927]

All your ponies lack any sort of character development

http://static2.wikia.nocookie.net/__cb20120425024239/mlp/images/6/65/Twilight_saddened_S2E25.png

[Flow 1,629]

Well, there's a free slot,

 

I'll think about whether I should join this or not (Yay, someone that's returning from the other Shfted RP's! Maybe?!?). If I do, then I think I should use my earth pony OC because there's a pony with the same name as my favorite OC, well can't help it.

Edited February 16, 2014 by Flow

[valete 195]

Well, there's a free slot,

 

I'll think about whether I should join this or not (Yay, someone that's returning from the other Shfted RP's! Maybe?!?). If I do, then I think I should use my earth pony OC because there's a pony with the same name as my favorite OC, well can't help it.

 

I was slightly anticipating this when I first made Flo... but the name just seemed really fitting and everything afasjkghdf;gfd

 

I'm really sorry about this. I should have been more considerate. 

[Flow 1,629]

I was slightly anticipating this when I first made Flo... but the name just seemed really fitting and everything afasjkghdf;gfd

 

I'm really sorry about this. I should have been more considerate. 

 

It's nothing, it doesn't bother me at all. Besides the OC I'll be using feels much more suitable for this RP. Oh yeah and I feel as if I should balance the earth ponies out and bring the number to four.

Edited February 16, 2014 by Flow

[valete 195]

It's nothing, it doesn't bother me at all. Besides the OC I'll be using feels much more suitable for this RP. Oh yeah and I feel as if I should balance the earth ponies out and bring the number to four.

 

I'm glad to hear that it doesn't bother you. 

 

I'll be looking forward to RP-ing with you! 

[Flow 1,629]

I'm glad to hear that it doesn't bother you. 

 

I'll be looking forward to RP-ing with you! 

 

Glad to hear that, yeah now I feel eager to RP in this, till then I'll wait for Ary or Kloop for approval.

[Arylett Charnoa 4,919]

Ah, I'm sorry to say to you, Flow, and everyone else... but Klopp and I have lost all our interest in this roleplay and we've decided it'd be best to close it up. I know I said I'd stay with it to the best of my ability, but if something no longer entertains me, then I just can't force myself to be a part of it. This RP just never really went anywhere and I don't feel like I have the energy to try to force it to. 

 

Shifted is officially CLOSED for good.

[Scribblegroove 565]

AWW JEEZ I completely forgot about this RP :c. I had so much stuff going on and I didn't get any notifications! Damn, I should've posted a long time ago... It's just so sad that this group of roleplayers seems really good, and the setting interesting. I don't know why it keeps shutting down like this :c Very sorry Arylett for being a douche and not post for about 2 weeks...

[Flow 1,629]

That's just sad, hearing this just now made me think as if this Shifted RP lasted way shorter than the other two before it.

[valete 195]

 

 

Shifted is officially CLOSED for good.

 

 

Well, it was fun while it lasted. 

 

I just want to say that this RP was great (well, at least for me), and that I wouldn't have asked for a better first RP. Although being slightly short-lived, this RP was of awesome quality in terms of the initial plot and the subsequent posts that made this RP come alive.

 

Actually, I was kind of wondering myself about how I could follow on with the story-line if my OC didn't jump in the hole, but I guess I don't have that problem anymore.

 

Sure enough though, I'll be looking out for any new RP's that you or Klopp might be starting! 

 

You know you're in good hands when former RP mods are GM-ing the RP you're in. Hahaha!

[Wolfe 71]

@Arylett Dawnsborough

 

I'll just put in my bit of criticism about this RP.

 

When the RP started, I really liked it. It was the fact that it was an RP that I was previously in being rebooted. I was disappointed when the first one ended due to inactivity, I believe. I really wanted to continue it, but factors got in the way. Nothing we could do about it.

 

What really killed me about continuing the RP was when you made the big quote from Kingdom Hearts. While others saw that as cool, I was really disappointed and frustrated about it. Not only was it a direct quote from the game, which I feel like is lazy in itself, but you kinda stuck yourself into a deeper problem by doing so. By setting up the foreboding scenario with the direct quote, you set yourself up to create a scenario later in the RP that must accomplish on what you directly quoted right now.

 

If you couldn't come up with something to match on the quote, you'd most likely be quoting AGAIN from Kingdom Hearts. As such, the story isn't your own, but rather a blend of your ideas and Kingdom Hearts plot points. After seeing that quote, I really couldn't post until a week later. Seeing that was such a killjoy for me. I understood you and Klopp are doing that KH 1.5 Remix playthrough, but I thought it was in really poor taste to just relate to it.

 

I'm not bashing you. I'm just trying to point out a mistake, I believe, that you should be aware of so you don't repeat in future RPs. Like I said initially, this is criticism: "the act of expressing disapproval and of noting the problems or faults of a person or thing." according to Merriam-Webster. I can only recommend having basic original plot points thought out in advance and have the rest a bit free form, since there will be OC player participation which can sway the story left and right. And quoting/referencing from something isn't a bad thing, as long as the world is based on said quote or world the quote comes from, for example, or that you get inspiration or make a simpler idea from said quote.

 

I wish you the best of luck on your future RP endeavors, Arylett!

[Arylett Charnoa 4,919]

@@Wolfe,

 

I have to say that I don't quite agree with your criticism, to be honest. Well, I mean, I can understand somewhat how it'd be annoying to have that Kingdom Hearts quote in there. But I think it's silly to criticize me and make assumptions about my future actions based on a single quote that was just an off-hand reference for small humor purposes. Just because I directly quote ONCE, does not mean that I am going to directly quote again. I had plans to incorporate it into the RP in a more original fashion as well. The quote was vague enough to allow for a wide scenario of situations; there was no problem there.

 

I apologize that you disliked it so much. Klopp himself expressed a minor annoyance for it, but overall didn't really find it to be bothersome and was kind of amused by it. It was one tiny little quote in a sea of many non-KH related things that happened later on though, and I don't really need to be lectured on how to create original content. Something can be quoted directly and work out in a nice original fashion, if it is used sparingly. In fact, the character appeared again and said something that I wrote of my own origin. I used the quote as a springboard for other, more original things. Hell, even before that character appeared and even if I had decided not to use the quote, I probably would've created a similar mysterious character anyway.

 

Thank you for being honest though, even though I really don't agree with your assessment at all. And thanks for your good luck! :3

 

---

 

Once again all, I'm sorry it couldn't work out. Just feels bad to say I'd stick with it, but then just feel myself dwindling out. I probably won't create another Shifted incarnation after this as it just seems to keep failing for various circumstances.

Edited February 18, 2014 by Arylett Dawnsborough