Help and advice about design (Digitally drawn art) of OC for fanfiction story

[EquineWhoDoesStuff 49]

Hello there forum goers! I'm looking for some advice on the design of an OC I've created for my fanfic. Now since this OC is for a written story, her appearance isn't strictly that important. But I'm going to be doing the cover art and peripheral things like that, so I wanted to make sure her design wasn't off-putting in some way I didn't anticipate. 

 

While writing my story, I was having trouble deciding on the color scheme for the protagonist. So I made some sketches of her just to see how the colors would look. What do think of her? Does she seem like a pony that could somewhat plausibly be in the MLP universe? Would the design give you a positive impression of the character if you saw it on a site like fimfiction? The hardest part for me was trying to make the hair not look ridiculous or even worse, boring. I like to say I succeeded, but from a different perspective does her mane look like something out of a bad anime? I still sort of find it dangerously spiky, but I tried to tone it down with curls and rounder shapes and such.

 

 

And just for fun here's a partial sketch of what she would look like on the cover art of the story, most of it is still just barely outlined.

 

 

I'd ask for advice on naming, or what her cutie mark should be... but I think those are better left to me, since both of those are highly relevant to character and the events in the story. So for those I'll just have to go back to my thinking tree/dank thinking basement and wrack my brain some more to decide on those kinds of details.

 

Please leave any thoughts, ideas, or critiques of the character design. 

 

And in the unlikely event that you have a question about her character, or the story feel free to ask. Though I might not be able to answer completely due to spoilers or the information still being subject to change.

Edited February 2, 2014 by EquineWhoDoesStuff

[Waterfall 13]

I think you should leave her the way she is. You are a great drawer

[EquineWhoDoesStuff 49]

I think you should leave her the way she is. You are a great drawer

 

Thanks for responding, and thank you for the compliment! I didn't expect that any major changes would be needed, but I thought I might as well test the water. See if it's the kind of design that would give people a positive impression of my story.

[Waterfall 13]

I will read your story if you give me a link to it.

[EquineWhoDoesStuff 49]

I will read your story if you give me a link to it.

 

 

I'll be sure to give you a link once it's released! I only need to finish editing the first couple chapters and complete the cover art that you saw up there. 

 

I'll give you the link to my Fimfiction profile in the meantime, so if you're still interested when it come out you know where to find it.

 

http://www.fimfiction.net/user/EquineWhoDoesStuff