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Well, if this is how we're going to play then so be it! *cackles quietly*

Dangit Batbrony stop bribing the voters! That isn't very sportsmanlike of you :okiedokielokie:

There was a group song for last year's MCM, but I don't know where I'd find it now, and even if I did there would only be a few eligible singers in it, so you wouldn't be able to hear most of your options

Oh gosh, I'm getting votes. I'm getting lots of votes. I feel so loved <3 Thank you all. For the record, I think I'd make a good Fluttershy

In case anyone on this forum wasn’t aware of it, I love roleplaying. I dedicate a lot of time to it, because it’s fun and creative and helps me work on my writing skills. As something that I love, I want to share the joys of roleplaying with other people, but I know all too well that sometimes that can be a difficult thing to do. Navigating the world of roleplaying can be challenging, and new roleplayers often find themselves facing a steep learning curve. How do you create an original character? What’s the proper etiquette in a roleplay? And what does OOC stand for anyways? To help you all on your journey from newbie to RP expert, we at MLPForums have gathered a team of roleplayers to answer questions, give advice and critiques, and generally help you improve your skills as a roleplayer. We are here to offer advice on everything from character creation to setting up a roleplay to writing posts. Now, let me introduce you to our team of roleplayers. They are ~ [member=Taialin] @Randimaxis @Quill Waver You’re probably wondering at this point how this whole mentor thing is supposed to work. Well, I’m glad you asked, hypothetical readers. All you have to do is post in this thread with a brief explanation of what you need help with (it’s okay if that explanation is “I want to roleplay but I have no idea what I’m doing"). From there, I will match you up with a mentor based on your needs, and you will receive a PM from the chosen mentor who will work with you from there. Simple, right? So what are you waiting for? Post your questions, I promise we don’t bite Note: At this time, we are not accepting applications for the RolePlay Mentor position. This may change in the future if we find that more people are needed to handle the number of requests.

Copper Strikes looks good to me as well. I'm happy to say that he is now approved

First of all, those leggings are really cool, and they look great on you. Second, of course guys can wear leggings! Everyone can wear whatever they want, pieces of cloth don't have genders and as long as you cover what you need to to be warm and sanitary modesty is just a social concept, a choice that you should be allowed to make for yourself, though some people seem to think otherwise. I've always found it so odd that we're the only animals who feel ashamed of our bodies, but I suppose that's a discussion for another day, in another place. Point being, you do you friend, you look fabulous and you should keep looking fabulous in your awesome leggings!

Eeeee yes please! Not that I would be unhappy with any pony song but I've always liked that one in particular <3

Not at all, I've never been one to turn down a brohoof Drakk looks good to me, you've taken care of everything I asked you to do, therefore I see no reason not to send you along at this point. That said, Drakk is moving on to second approval

First off, this information seems like it would make a good addition to Copper's profile Now, I've re-read your character, and have a few more notes for you. First, the part of Copper's personality section that says "He doesn't care for shopping, as long as it isn't long ones" is a bit oddly worded. I think what you meant was something more along the lines of "He dislikes shopping, but will tolerate it if it doesn't take too long". Second, and most importantly, Copper's special talent still needs a bit of work. Like Randi said, his ability will need to be defined, and I would suggest doing so by clearly laying out what his "spin dash" is capable of in the "other" section. Beyond that though, he is still missing a purpose to his cutie mark. Clearly it symbolizes his unique ability, but what of it? What does his cutie mark say about him beyond "he can do this cool thing"? Is it symbolic of a passion for speed, or perhaps a desire to rush to the aid of somepony who needs it, like he did to earn his cutie mark when he helped clear the snow (hint hint hint)? This is a question that will need to be answered for you to really understand what makes your pony tick. In addition, his cutie mark story is improved, but still seems a bit odd. The inspiration works, but the fact that he never had to work on or practice at this ability strikes me as odd. I would have him practice this at least a bit by himself first.

Given that I participated in this contest last year, it only seems fitting that I should do so again. I just hope I'll have the time and determination to get something done, after I deal with my schoolwork of course. I was considering writing a sequel to last year's submission, but now I'm not so certain about that idea, especially since I'm not sure how I'd relate it to charity. I'll have to give this some thought...

Since you said you like Kill La Kill, and that happens to be my favorite anime, who's your favorite character from that show?

Aww, thank you... I do not expect to catch up in the polls but if I did I would do my best not to let you down as a not-entirely-terrible singer

Hello Dwhite After taking a look at Copper myself, I have a few of my own notes to share with you, to help move your character along. In his appearance section, he should be described as having blue fur and a blue mane and tail, rather than being described as having skin or hair like a person. Copper’s personality section still needs to be expanded upon a bit. Each EqE-approved character needs to have a personality section of at least two paragraphs. The part of your “likes” section that says “He's a friendly competitor who has raced for a few months, takes losing well and has good sportsmanship” would fit better within the personality section. The story of Copper getting his cutie mark seems a bit random. His talent seems to come out of nowhere, like the idea just popped into his head to do something that most ponies are unable to do. Had he tried to do this before? Had he seen somepony else do it, or read about somepony else doing it? Did he need to practice this talent? More to the point, a cutie mark is meant to symbolize a pony’s calling, what they’re meant to do with the rest of their life. How does this moment define them in that way? Consider that question, and use it to expand upon Copper’s cutie mark story. This is a question, rather than a note. What made you decide on the name Copper Strikes for your character? The Strikes part I understand, but I don’t really see how “Copper” relates to your pony.

Now now you two. Protesting a chance to work together is hardly in the spirit of friendship. What would Princess Twilight Sparkle think watching the two of you say such things?

If Jonas and Hypno tie can we force them to sing a duet? (Are there even any duets in EG?)

Awww shucks. You get a pass for your flattery

You can't take us all down Lightwing! In fact only one of us is going down this time

It looks like you’ve taken care of what I asked you to. There are just a couple more things, then you should be all set While I notice that his eyes are no longer described as slitted, they are still shown that way in the image for him. I realize that changing the image may be overly difficult, so I just ask that you make a note in the appearance section that the pony has normally shaped pupils rather than the slitted ones shown. I like the new spell you added, it suits your character really well! I do have a few adjustments to the spells though, just ways to further define exactly what he is capable of. For the invisibility, I would say that he is only able to use telekinesis (what you refer to as levitation) while invisible, and that he can’t do too much “heavy lifting” with his magic while invisible. For the unlocking, I would note that his spell works on regular locks, not necessarily on enchanted locks.

The chosen staff member will be banished to the Moon

Guys, I know we all love Lightwing but it's no fun if the same person wins everything. Don't be team Lightwing in this particular instance *realizes as she says this that she's only drawing attention to herself...* eep!