drama The Bliss

[Red_Rain 25]

Obsidian awoke, head pounding, his body wracked with pain. The cold of the smooth stone surface relaxed him. The dark abyss of the cavern embraced him this made him want to shut his eyes and sleep. Pain the pain was all he felt, his armour was colder than the ground and colder than it should be, dulling the pain slightly but making him shiver. He didn't want to stay there, although the cold and dark were so comforting. He didn't want to stay on the hard ground. He attempted to turn himself upright, to find purchase on the stony floor that had comforted him. The dark pony's endeavor was met with him and his full silver armour clanking back to the hard stony floor. His body cold, and stiff, as though he had died there. In the cold, dark abyss of that cavern, it felt though he had rigor mortis. Shallow breaths were all that came from his muzzle, shallow, slow, sharp breaths. His lungs felt as though they were on fire, a single tear went down his face, not of sadness, or fear, just pain. The pain he felt was that of, the feeling of millions of tiny needles piercing his skin, pain that would drive a pony to madness. Weak and exhausted, Obsidian lay there, thinking, reflecting. He refused to give in, he had an objective, and that was to stand, to stand in this cold darkness. He tryed again, head pounding with every second he exerted strength. His mind and body fought against him, but his will would not let him lay down once more. At last, he stood there, in the cold cavern, clad with darkness. A few moments more of standing still in that cavern, he took a step forward, pain shooting through his leg like liquid fire. Obsidian shouted with pain, and fell to the floor again.

 This is a sample of the full text. also it's sort of dramatic.

Edited November 26, 2014 by Red_Rain

[Valencia 9,504]

Yes to this whole idea. I enjoy the mood set and your conveyance of Obsidian's struggle for understanding and control; now comes the grasping of said things 

[Wyzecat 350]

Not to detract anything, it should be said that you should consider putting these into a blog or something instead of making a ton of individual topics that clutter the sidebars and whatnot.

[Red_Rain 25]

yeah i'mma do that. cause well yeah. point's there.