music a taste of my music "Fever Dream"

[Jora 164]

 

i'm looking for feedback  

 

possible fleshing out of the story of this song lyrically 

 

Flora found Fauna in the ruins of this midnight castle in the stone tower waiting to escape these narcoleptic dreams turning queens restless  and  moonless nights  as misty runes call to the twilight, as the dawn starts to sleep away Flora finds fauna in this fever dreams haze in this fever dream haze.

 

other chord idea's etc thanks

hello anyone? *chirp chirp*...

Edited January 10, 2015 by Jora