music Lonely Child

[Kyoshi Frost Wolf 41,693]

Kyoshi is back. With a song at least. Been a while since I have done one of these, but I have had random inspiration, motivation. So in a few hours, I produced this 'demo', titled 'Lonely Child'. 

 

So give it a listen, you may or may not like it. I don't know for sure. Let me know what you think if you wish. Tear it apart if you wish to do so, this was a random thing I did anyways. 

 

[Lunafur 17,929]

Very nice job my friend keep it up

[Shimmer Sparkle 4,101]

Ooh! Sounds awesome! Keep it up, my friend. Well done! 

[That One Techpriest You Used To Know 2,286]

I think that the melody's a bit too loud, and the harmony's too soft. If you effectively switch the volumes or, if you are working with a system that compiles music this way, the priority, of the deeper tone and the lighter tone, it would be a much more enjoyable piece.

 

However, I personally still love it. Great work, Kyoshi!

[Seamore Sandwich 471]

I like it a lot! I'm with Waffle on the slight adjustments. The end of the song feels like it wants to keep going but was cut short, making me want to hear more.

[Kyoshi Frost Wolf 41,693]

I think that the melody's a bit too loud, and the harmony's too soft. If you effectively switch the volumes or, if you are working with a system that compiles music this way, the priority, of the deeper tone and the lighter tone, it would be a much more enjoyable piece.

 

However, I personally still love it. Great work, Kyoshi!

 

I like it a lot! I'm with Waffle on the slight adjustments. The end of the song feels like it wants to keep going but was cut short, making me want to hear more.

 

Thank you both for the feedback. ^___^ I assume you are meaning the two basses in the background? Which I guess they aren't in the background as much. I actually did notice that myself, though I thought it gave the piece a more harsh ebm vibe, though that might not have the greatest effect in the end. Still, glad you both liked it. Quite surprised by that honestly. 

[Lunatic Cake 1,618]

Is it just me or does this song have a sorta boss fight vibe to it? I feel like reaching the final door, being ambushed by the "lonely child" wanting to defeat me.