writing Winter

[Sepia-chan 496]

As the only red apple ever, since the red apple extinction, Winter gets made fun for being different from the green apples a lot. He's tried to run away, sure, but he always gets caught, a horrible reality of his existence. Cursed to live in his lonely basket forever, because apples can't die unless they're eaten. Winter has accepted that no one will eat him a long time ago. Winter can't leave. This is his life. Ridicule and bad memories.

 

But tonight is his chance.

 

The usual janitor's cleaned up the cafeteria, but something happened differently, and Winter noticed. The door was unlocked. The last person out left the cafeteria door open. Winter rolls out of his basket, past the sleeping green apples, until he falls off the table. He rolls out the door.

 

Meanwhile, the next day, the green apples noticed Winter's absence, but they didn't care enough to look for him. "Good riddance, I say."

 

Winter rolled through the parking lot led by the dim glow of the moon. He didn't know where he was going, but anywhere was better than back there. He rolled everywhere, but nowhere was a safe place. Eventually he rolled back. He rolled back at around lunch time the next day.

 

"Hey, look who's back!" shouted a green apple upon Winter's return. "Winter, the plainest apple!" Winter has had enough. He rolled to a lunch table and climbed up using his great acrobatics. He got on a kid's plate, and the kid picked him up. The kid put Winter to his lips. The ridicule, being plucked from his parent's apple tree when he was 3 months old... It had all led up to this! The kid took a bite.

For those last moments...

Winter was satisfied.

 

~ The End.

Edited August 10, 2012 by Dusk Eninama Ace Attorney

[False Perception 482]

Dafuq?

 

Ok, I honestly can't critique this. Why did you write about an apple? Why not the more magestic of fruits, the banana? A banana could have served his country. The apple just fed some nasty kid who ate a demonic apple that hopped off of the floor.

 

Actually, I think I see how this shows that we are all different and the government (the green apples) are keeping us from reaching our true potential, but by the time we break away, we have no direction, thus we go back to the oppressors, in time for our death.

[Mephala 2,635]

That...was beautiful....I feel tears coming to my eyes.

Those poor, poor red apples...poor winter...I WANT MOAR

[Sepia-chan 496]

Dafuq?

 

Ok, I honestly can't critique this. Why did you write about an apple? Why not the more magestic of fruits, the banana? A banana could have served his country. The apple just fed some nasty kid who ate a demonic apple that hopped off of the floor.

 

Actually, I think I see how this shows that we are all different and the government (the green apples) are keeping us from reaching our true potential, but by the time we break away, we have no direction, thus we go back to the oppressors, in time for our death.

 

Dude, I think you read way too deep into this....Lul.

Anyway, I wrote this because in Language Arts today our teacher told us to write a narrative..About an apple. Thus I wrote that.

Anyway

this is part 1 of a 4 part short story series.

1: Winter, about Winter the Apple trying to escape from misery.

2: Autumn, about Autumn the grape trying to discover where she is and why she is there. Prequel to Winter.

3: Summer, about a bannana. Named Summer. Not much has been planned thus far. Prequel to Autumn

4: Spring. Nothing has been planned thus far.

 

 

That...was beautiful....I feel tears coming to my eyes.

Those poor, poor red apples...poor winter...I WANT MOAR

 

W-wow, really? Uh yeah, if you want more, I'm the process of writing Autumn, the sequel. It expands on the brief mention of 'the red apple extinction', and a poor grape named Autumn is caught up in it all.

Edited August 10, 2012 by Dusk Eninama Ace Attorney

[bagelbass 29]

That was... interesting to say the least. There is probably some hidden message I missed, since I just skimmed through it. But good job? I don't know what to think.

[Mephala 2,635]

Dude, I think you read way too deep into this....Lul.

Anyway, I wrote this because in Language Arts today our teacher told us to write a narrative..About an apple. Thus I wrote that.

Anyway

this is part 1 of a 4 part short story series.

1: Winter, about Winter the Apple trying to escape from misery.

2: Autumn, about Autumn the grape trying to discover where she is and why she is there. Prequel to Winter.

3: Summer, about a bannana. Named Summer. Not much has been planned thus far. Prequel to Autumn

4: Spring. Nothing has been planned thus far.

 

 

 

 

W-wow, really? Uh yeah, if you want more, I'm the process of writing Autumn, the sequel. It expands on the brief mention of 'the red apple extinction', and a poor grape named Autumn is caught up in it all.

 

BRING IT TO ME FASTER

I NEED THIS STORY

I NEED IT NOW

PLEASE DEAR GOD

DON'T KEEP ME WAITING FOR AUTUMN

[Sepia-chan 496]

BRING IT TO ME FASTER

I NEED THIS STORY

I NEED IT NOW

PLEASE DEAR GOD

DON'T KEEP ME WAITING FOR AUTUMN

 

I honestly can't tell if you're being sarcastic or if you're actually excited, then awesome. I has a faaaaaan!

[Mephala 2,635]

I honestly can't tell if you're being sarcastic or if you're actually excited, then awesome. I has a faaaaaan!

 

I think it's a little bit of both.

Like, 2.5% sarcasm and 97.5% this is the best story I have ever read.

[Sepia-chan 496]

I think it's a little bit of both.

Like, 2.5% sarcasm and 97.5% this is the best story I have ever read.

 

http://mlpforums.com...c/28500-autumn/

Here you go, it's Autumn.

Be warned however, it's probably the most depressing thing I've ever wrote.

Edited August 10, 2012 by Dusk Eninama Ace Attorney