writing Rampancy

[Ferret Girl 2,642]

Just a liar looking for forgiveness.

Among other things left unsaid.

Words, volatile at the surface.

Urging forth immeasurable pride.

Even when the heart breaks under such pressure.

 

Walking ever so daringly,

into the crossfire.

A war between passions.

I am not the target.

Simply an unwanted casualty

Independence won so clever.

Is the heart truly broken?

 

Relief is without question.

Though, many see no redemption in broken hearts.

Purely an emotional outburst turned violent in the end.

Or perhaps all ends are a means to repent.

If I do not know, then who does?

 

Silencing threats of inner peace.

Away with the scoundrels of wasted talent.

Words that are my only weapon.

Urged forth, forcing a breath.

One that was never wanted.

Never wanted, but always needed.

And so, I live, each day, possibly the same.

Ever so slightly different.

No one sees but me.

Broken hearts lead to greater adventure.

Emotions spark greater desire.

 

Urged.

Compelled.

Needed.

What could I have done?

Emotions, they are at control.

I warned you.

 

 

 

-David Favret

[Master Blade the Bearded 112]

Amazing. Simply amazing. Do not feel bad if people rarely comment on these, for usually, there are no words to describe how this make us feel. A mere brohoof and a thank you will have to suffice.

[MrDingerFan51 11]

Woah. Just woah. That was great. Words can hardly describe how good that was. Very... I don't know what to use to describe it, it was just that good.

[Nixter 180]

Words CAN describe how good it is, look!:

 

That poem was amazing, it captured both sending the flow and breaking it, which is quite a feat. amongst poets, so that's very, very good, you manage to 'snapshot' the whole essence, another well played part in your writing, you even wrap it up nicely with minimal sentences, which are always effective for end results, leaving everyone breathless.

 

 

You should continue your poetry, for it has everything needed to compel and more. You're truly special, and I'll tell you that right now, I don't mean it in that 'everyone is special' sappy kind of way, either. No, I mean you literately have the right to stand up amongst the crowd because your poetry does so already!

[I am TheBronyHeart 7]

I think that all it took for the mood of this poem was the phrase "Just a liar looking for forgiveness."

 

I have to ask, just HOW MANY poems have you actually written?

This was really good, and it showed a fragile mental state being pushed to the edge IMO