Give me feedback on a song I wrote?

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So my Cowboy bebop OC, is named Lucy Jones, she likes to play the sax and her father doesn't have the best relationship with her when she's a teenager- or so she thinks- and then she leaves her home planet when she's a teenager and then her father is heartbroken and actually before he dies he writes a song about her.

 

This is the song I wrote/he wrote: 

 

 

Lucy

Why did you leave me?

Was it something I said?

Was it the way I dressed?

Lucy.

I think I understand it now.

While writing this song, I understand it, why you had to go. 

You had to leave because- every little birdie spreads their wings and flys away. 

They fly, fly, fly, until they cant fly no more. 

They fly, fly, fly until they crash to the ground. 

And Lucy, when you read this, I betcha, girl, you've crashed, and cant fly no more? 

Isn't that right? 

Well, I wont be here anymore, to face the world- you and me- like we promised on that day- Lucy- dontcha remember? On that day, you and I, 

Promised...

We'd face the world...

We'd embrace it... 

We'd defeat it... 

With...

Love... 

 

And on the back of the card it says:

 

From dad- I love you Lucy, my little wingless birdie. <3

 

So yeah, even if you don't know about cowboy bebop, can you still give me some feedback? I don't play any musical instruments and I don't write lyrics often... I've tried several times before, but I wanna know if I can keep writing lyrics. T_T