writing Eternal Night

[Doctor Derpy 164]

Doesn't have to be about ponies, yeah? Yeah, I'm in the right place..... Anyways you can criticize this or tell me how to improve it because it was done in sort of a quicky, the way right involves getting the basic plot written out then add details and other things later. And some foreshadowing.

 

Description: A military leader misinformed, brought his best squad to something that should of never have been thought of again. James, John, Nick, and Carver find themselves in a whole different world filled with mystery and evil. Can they stop the uprising? Stop the denizens of that world from passing through the portal? No. That's not what they should be worried about. It's a bigger power that should have them running for their lives.

 

Chapter 1: The Tale of Unforgivable Choices

“You know I’m on break Chavez?” A brown hair colored man said whilst sitting at one of the tables at a local coffee shop, the sun shined through the window he sat next to. It was a beautiful afternoon in the fantastic state of Washington.

“It’s important, I can’t tell you everything, not even on a secure line. We have to chat in my office” A Spanish accented man said through the phone.

“Interrupting a wonderful cup of coffee for some business talk? I’ll be there in 20 minutes.” The man ended the call and waved for a check. The sun was more bright than he expected, he checked his pants pockets and grabbed that Aviators that hung, he put them on and smiled.Not even a single cloud in sight and yet the place had a dark vibe floating around. The man got in his military colored Jeep, turned the ignition, the engine roared to life. He switched gears into reverse and backed out of the tightly squeezed area and continued to switch gears into drive mode. The Jeep lept off with extreme horsepower and headed North.

“Hello James, Chavez called you in again? Haven’t you ever had one interrupted break?” A man in a camoflaged military gear, he had a M16  strapped to his back with 3 clips on his belt. The place was heavily guarded place. James rolled down the window

“Thinking about it, I’ve had one, which was only for four days” He smirked and waited for the Military personnel to open that gate.

“Well, better hurry, we just received word he gathered your squad back together” The man added and waved his hand through

“Well, have a good day Smith, seems like you guys are being fortified ever since this call” James added back and drove into the Washington state special services Headquarters.

“Yeah, I bet, how about a side of insanity?” Said a familiar voice, I walked around the corner to find Carver making a smartass remark to Chavez

“Started the party without me?” I said and walked out of the shadows up to the steel table with a couple of file folders marked Classified.

“Glad you joined us, I was just doing a early brief of why I called you in here, but couldn’t finish because Carver here had something to say” Chavez said looking at Carver with that kind of face you see in those movies where you should just bail.

“Okay, so that we’re all here we can finally begin. Without any interruptions” He stared at Carver and went back to the rest of us “Doctor Alex, one of the greatest minds of the 21st century, this kid is even smarter than 100 thousand combined copies of Einstein. He cracked the code to the universe, well that’s what he likes to say, I just call it the end of us all. He created a portal without any permission from the U.S. Government, the project was named Eternal Night for some odd reason. He finally sent in a request, a request to have it activated since that thing takes up a shitload of electrical power and releases radiation whilst activated. I read over it and denied for the good of all of us. He ignored it and activated, he’s been gone ever since”

Chavez looked down at the files on the table and spread across the photos that laid inside. “Well, he isn’t your natural stereotypical nerd” Remarked John while looking at one of his pictures.

“Here’s the good part, you guys get to experience first hand what went down in that lab. The officers that briefed me said that the lab, what am I saying? Its in the middle of nowhere in the Atlantic ocean with a base hanging on some islands. Well the place hasn’t been searched ever since and you guys get to be the first” Chavez finished what he was saying and waited for one of us to respond, none of us spoke due to our thoughts being collected also with our blank stares. “A VTOL is waiting outside to deliver you to the base, it’s a three hour flight, so get packed up tight, you’re in for a surprise tonight.

The VTOL made a loud humming noise as we walked closer to it all in our black kevlar vests with standard military M16s and Berettas including night vision goggles. Chavez told us to bring the firepower since he didn’t know what will be waiting for us. The pilot was positioned outside the cockpit waiting our our arrival, the breeze of the propellers were colder than usual, something was going down tonight.

“You guys Delta Team?” The pilot said as we gathered near him “Yeah” I responded “It’s going to be a rough night, the flight is going to be a bumpy ride due to windstorms” The pilot informed us and jump in the cockpit and sat in the pilot seat

We all gathered in and made ourselves comfy and strapped our gear in tight and sat down and tightened up. The interior was cold and dark, the hull vibrated to the engines. The sound of the propellers went faster indicating we were taking off, there was a bump and we were of the ground. The intercom turned on “Be prepared for any wind turbulence in flight to the island, Delta, you’ll be parachuting in since we can’t take the chance of lifting this baby off the ground again. Parachutes are located under your seats, and remember, stay safe” The intercom shut off, I dozed off.