I need an opinion on this OC I made

[Noazark 67]

So I decided to make an OC. I never made one before, and I can't draw very well, so I used pony creator. I want your opinions on how he looks and his persona.

Here are the images I have of him:

 

His name is Shocker, he is a pegasus who loves playing with lightning, mainly to play tricks on people, and his cutie mark is a storm cloud (though it doesn't appear in the pony creator images). Shocker grew up an orphan, he has never seen his parents, he doesn't know who they are. During his younger years he was in an orphanage, and he hated it, he wanted to live on his own to be independent, but he had no way to do so, as it is illegal to let a pony under the age of 18 to live on their own in Cloudsdale. He had very little friends, since he rejected most of other ponies' company. When he finally did turn 18, he decided to fly off and live his dream, be independent, so he left behind his past, and he came to live in Ponyville, where he resides to this day. He still does not have many friends, and he only communicates with the other pegasi who work at the weather facility. Right now he's just getting through life, trying his best not to sink into depression out of lack of interest in living his mundane activities. The only thing that keeps him going is his collection of storm clouds, kept at a secret location only he knows. The collection gives him passion, for now at least.

 

So, what do you think? Is it good enough to call my OC?

Edited October 21, 2013 by Noazark

[Skylar 1,641]

In my person opinion I quite like simple OC's, don't really like the color scheme, I think he would look cool with a darked colored body, just my opinion !  

 

I love the personality / story, i like his eyes / face to just work on the colors a little perhaps  

[Malinter 3,064]

It looks very similar to Rainbow Blitz in terms of his spikiness, and Shocker would imply colours like blues, yellows, and colours that go well with them.

[Noazark 67]

In my person opinion I quite like simple OC's, don't really like the color scheme, I think he would look cool with a darked colored body, just my opinion !

 

I love the personality / story, i like his eyes / face to just work on the colors a little perhaps

The thing is I wanted to symbolize his sort of relaxed-but-still-likes-to-play personallity, and going with something more dark would make him more fierce than he actually is in my eyes, so with that in mind, what do you think? Still change it?

 

It looks very similar to Rainbow Blitz in terms of his spikiness, and Shocker would imply colours like blues, yellows, and colours that go well with them.

That's what I thought, that he looks like Rainbow Blitz, which is why i went with the red/green/orange color scheme, I didn't want him to be the same as Rainbow Blitz Thanks for the feedback though!

Edited October 21, 2013 by Noazark

[Skylar 1,641]

At the end of the day whats great about an OC is that it's truly yours. People may think mine sucks, some people love it, I don't care because it represents who I am As long as YOU are happy with it thats all that matters  

 

If I were making it I would make it darker, but thats just me, if you want it lighter then make it lighter

[Frosty Fire 12]

I like it, well for the most part. The thing that seperates a good OC and a great one, really has to do with the flow of it all.

And personally, the color scheme here just doesn't fit well.

 

Your mane colors are great, they work well together, but the color of your fur and eyes, just doesn't match well with your mane.

 

But all in all, it's a good concept, those are just my two cents

[Gale Force 6]

Now, the biggest complaint I see here from others is the colors. Honestly, I think the colors are great. Popular colors schemes are getting rather overused and it is nice to see a fresh pony that looks good.

 

(says the colt with the red and gray scheme...)

 

ANYWAYS! I too have to give accolades on the backstory. The whole parents thing might be a little off... for some reason... I cant explain... which is fairly new to me since I am a writer that helps many people create back stories...

 

Yet I love the fact he is not into friends. Most ponies go the whole "super friendly" or "loves making friends". No. You are "loves being alone" and "fights depression". Great. Gives you plenty of room for character developement for, oh I dont know, a story if you so choose to write one.

 

Who knows? A pony from the weather department is noticing that storms seem to be disperssing a little too quickly. Sends a pony to look for a reason why. That pony has trouble making friends, but wants one. What's this? Somepony is collecting the storm clouds. BAM! Character developement oppertunity on making a friend against your will in exchange of your collection being a secret.

 

That was me rambling. Now to the things I think you could change. The spikey teeth and slit pupils. Trying for evil? The tail and hair show untidiness. If that is what you are shooting for, that is great. Just noticed he keeps a neat little collection that I assume he keeps tabs on. He doesn't have to be neat, but that was just a wonder of mine.

 

Bam! Nutshell....  Hope I helped. ^^

Edited October 21, 2013 by Gale Force

[Noazark 67]

Now, the biggest complaint I see here from others is the colors. Honestly, I think the colors are great. Popular colors schemes are getting rather overused and it is nice to see a fresh pony that looks good.

 

(says the colt with the red and gray scheme...)

 

ANYWAYS! I too have to give accolades on the backstory. The whole parents thing might be a little off... for some reason... I cant explain... which is fairly new to me since I am a writer that helps many people create back stories...

 

Yet I love the fact he is not into friends. Most ponies go the whole "super friendly" or "loves making friends". No. You are "loves being alone" and "fights depression". Great. Gives you plenty of room for character developement for, oh I dont know, a story if you so choose to write one.

 

Who knows? A pony from the weather department is noticing that storms seem to be disperssing a little too quickly. Sends a pony to look for a reason why. That pony has trouble making friends, but wants one. What's this? Somepony is collecting the storm clouds. BAM! Character developement oppertunity on making a friend against your will in exchange of your collection being a secret.

 

That was me rambling. Now to the things I think you could change. The spikey teeth and slit pupils. Trying for evil? The tail and hair show untidiness. If that is what you are shooting for, that is great. Just noticed he keeps a neat little collection that I assume he keeps tabs on. He doesn't have to be neat, but that was just a wonder of mine.

 

Bam! Nutshell....  Hope I helped. ^^

Wow, thank you so much That was amazing feedback, thanks man, means a lot to me.

 

In regards to the parents thing, I think it fits the fact that he doesn't like company. He never had any parents, and because of that he was all alone growing up, that's the only way he knows how to live.

 

Also I was trying to go for more of an "unfriendly" look than evil, and I just liked the eyes, no special reason for them

Edited October 21, 2013 by Noazark

[Gale Force 6]

Hmmm, I can see that. The eyelids give an aura of arrogance, maybe being cocky. Maybe change them out for a more horzontal one to show one showing the feeling of "meh". Like he is uncaring and just trudging through life. That is more for the pictures you posted. I dont know, maybe he just found a nice cloud. XD

Yeah, I like him. Great work. He does not have any mary sue characteristics which is a problem when making OCs. You dont know how many times I have to tell people that Sonic Rainbooms were LITERALLY A MYTH before dash did one, or not everypony can do twilight level magic.

 

You keep it real, I like that... kudos mate.

 

And sorry... by the way...

 

 

Scootaloo is best CMC

[Noazark 67]

Scootaloo is best CMC

Scootaloo is best CMC

SCOOTALOO IS BEST CMC

How dare you even say that omg you are not a person I'm not serious but holy shit I am so damn angry it's not even real it's actually not real.

 

Also I tried again with the facial expression, I think this fits him more, what do you think?

Edited October 21, 2013 by Noazark

[GeekBrony 85]

Your OC, huh... hmm.. Looking at it kinda makes me complain that the colors sorta clash a bit. Try going darker (and please refrain from red colors, as they make very bad color combinations). Anyway, the second thing is that the look is a bit too generic. Try getting another person (or yourself) to draw your OC instead of using the OC Creator, as that might help a lot with the generic look.

[Noazark 67]

Your OC, huh... hmm.. Looking at it kinda makes me complain that the colors sorta clash a bit. Try going darker (and please refrain from red colors, as they make very bad color combinations). Anyway, the second thing is that the look is a bit too generic. Try getting another person (or yourself) to draw your OC instead of using the OC Creator, as that might help a lot with the generic look.

Okay, thanks for the criticism, but I can't draw for the life of me, and I just made this guy yesterday, so there wasn't much time for anyone to draw him You're right though, the Pony Creator ponies do look generic, although there's not much I could do about that.

Edited October 21, 2013 by Noazark

[Stumppa 47]

I actually would step in to say that the coat color and eye color is fine but the mane is what clashes the most with me. Green and orange that have almost the same hues and saturation will clash and they will smudge into each other. I would personally do something about the mane and tail because they distract a lot and not necessarily in a bad way. 

 

But the coat and eyes are indeed good to go! Play around with colors, you should be bound to find some good combinations. 

Just so you know, clashing colors is not a bad thing, but some colors mixed together will create a certain muddy feel. For example, if you like the orange/brown on the mane, try a bluer hue! Or if you like the green, make the green a bit softer and make the orange browner. There are tons of combinations and a lot of room to experiment.

 

Keep in mind that an OC is still your and yours alone. If you like your character as is then don't mind us <3.

[Noazark 67]

I actually would step in to say that the coat color and eye color is fine but the mane is what clashes the most with me. Green and orange that have almost the same hues and saturation will clash and they will smudge into each other. I would personally do something about the mane and tail because they distract a lot and not necessarily in a bad way. 

 

But the coat and eyes are indeed good to go! Play around with colors, you should be bound to find some good combinations. 

Just so you know, clashing colors is not a bad thing, but some colors mixed together will create a certain muddy feel. For example, if you like the orange/brown on the mane, try a bluer hue! Or if you like the green, make the green a bit softer and make the orange browner. There are tons of combinations and a lot of room to experiment.

 

Keep in mind that an OC is still your and yours alone. If you like your character as is then don't mind us <3.

Thank you for the feedback, and if I thought he was perfect and wouldn't want anyone to change him, I wouldn't have made this thread I know he's mine, still I want some opinions

[Stumppa 47]

Thank you for the feedback, and if I thought he was perfect and wouldn't want anyone to change him, I wouldn't have made this thread I know he's mine, still I want some opinions

Brilliant ! The very best suggestion I can do is that you study the color wheel a little. As an artist I consult it a lot. Less than I used to which is a shame, should get right back into that. 

 

Good luck <3!

[Noazark 67]

Brilliant ! The very best suggestion I can do is that you study the color wheel a little. As an artist I consult it a lot. Less than I used to which is a shame, should get right back into that. 

 

Good luck <3!

The thing about the colors is that I tried making him darker or bluer but both options didn't stand out to me, they made him look much more generic or just didn't look good in my eyes. I tried a lot of color combinations since I started this thread, and I wasn't happy with any of them Thanks anyway, I think we can close this thread if a mod is reading this.

[LittleRawr 679]

As others have said, the color combinations are a bit... Off.

 

His name also doesn't quite suit his colors, it makes me think of a more yellow-white color scheme.

 

Let me give you an example of how you can use the color wheel to see what colors match.

 

 

The colors that are almost directly opposite each other are the ones that generally match, and look good.

 

I hope that this was helpful~