South Park x Mlp

[Moaning Myrtle 196]

^{_{I recently published the first chapter of my south park x mlp fanfiction and I want feedback on how the writing is and such.Tell me what I can improve on,how it was,things that can make the story better,etc.This was based off the first episode of South Park "Cartman Gets An Anal Probe"}}

 

^{_{Here it is:}}

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/178366/south-ponies

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So what would it be called, Dashie gets an anal probe?

Upon reading I learn that Pinkie is Kenny.

Oh no I have to see best pony die.

[Moaning Myrtle 196]

So what would it be called, Dashie gets an anal probe?

 

Upon reading I learn that Pinkie is Kenny.

Oh no I have to see best pony die.

Yep and Yep."Oh my god,they killed pinkie!YOU BASTARDS".Anyways...what did you think?

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Yep and Yep."Oh my god,they killed pinkie!YOU BASTARDS".Anyways...what did you think?

Pretty good at replicating the episode.

[Moaning Myrtle 196]

Bump Bump Sugarlump Rump

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Yep and Yep."Oh my god,they killed pinkie!YOU BASTARDS".Anyways...what did you think?

MY POOR WAIFU!!!.......

 

Lol it's kinda funny actually.... Can't wait to read the rest.!!

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MY POOR WAIFU!!!.......

 

Lol it's kinda funny actually.... Can't wait to read the rest.!!

No no no you mean MY poor waifu lol

[Moaning Myrtle 196]

MY POOR WAIFU!!!.......

 

Lol it's kinda funny actually.... Can't wait to read the rest.!!

I'll probably make a sequel x300.

[Moaning Myrtle 196]

Should I make a sequel remaking the South Park movie?

[Moaning Myrtle 196]

Bumpity Bump?I just realized i'm terrible at writing...eh.