First fic, feedback greatly appreciated!

[scifi42 39]

Any advice would be greatly appreciated! Thanks all for your help!

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1G1qugWtta-Wi0biCzWOeg8uhY12hlGZlu2maXUQgITE/edit?usp=sharing

[reader8363 1,281]

It was pretty good, it sounded like you put a lot of effort into the story. it sounds like you went through the same thing. You don't have to say if you did or not. Keep up the good work

[Dapper Charmer 591]

Amazing story. I wish I could read more. Keep up the great work.