writing My first shot at a short, non-contextual story!

[MrJK 399]

I had an idea today and i thought it was worth writing about. It doensn't have any context, just a short story. If you like it, i may make it into a full story....maybe....but i really don't think its that good plus i didn't even check it for spelling errors or grammar errors AND i didnt polish it. So please, give me all your critiques and praises (If those exist.)

 

But anyway, Here you go! http://mrjk14.devian...ite-D-296700277

Edited April 18, 2012 by DJ-JK

[Dragonshy 2,305]

Nice! It was pretty good. Is there going to be a sequel?

[MrJK 399]

Nice! It was pretty good. Is there going to be a sequel?

 

I don't know. It was just something i thought of kind of spur of the moment and i just wrote it down. I could if people wanted. ( and if i did i would polish it much better.)

[Whiteshade 1,426]

Es sind Fehler in der Grammatik.

 

The climax is also shorter and more abbreviated than the buildup, you also stopped characterizing like the earlier descriptions of Kacy.

 

That's objectively speaking, as an idea its very solid and would probably make a good fic.