critique wanted My OC (I need some tips,critique,etc-etc)

[HackTune 177]

So This is my OC , I'm a really beginner at drawing so this picture might be ugly(depends on your opinion) and o need critique cause i can't pinpoint my fault (i'l fix the hooves later) 

 

 

 

 

 

Edit : Go thru the pages to see updated versions XD

Edited December 12, 2015 by HackTune

[Catpone Cerberus 23,645]

Well... I don't really have any critique about look.   I would love to see backstory, what he is interested in etc.

[HackTune 177]

Well... I don't really have any critique about look.   I would love to see backstory, what he is interested in etc.

 

 

This drawing isn't ugly. You did a nice job on this

 

As for a critque...

- Your OC's color scheme is a tad cliche. Red and black is an incredibly common choice for mane colors.

- Your OC's cutie mark could be more unique.

- Perhaps give him an original back story.

thanks,can you suggest for an improvement tot he cutiemark?

and what mane/tail colour would u suggest?

and i do have a backstory. im gonna post the backstory once im done designing my oc

[Sir Xarthas VI 470]

Go for some colors that most people haven't used. Like Green and Orange are a bit of an odd combo, and I don't think many ponies/people have used it. But it's your OC so you should design him and his colors however you want. Just don't be afraid to think outside the box.

As for his cutie mark, you should relate it to his backstory. Whatever the biggest even is in his backstory, base it somewhat off of that, and somewhat off the rest.

[HackTune 177]

I've recoloured the mane and tail and eyes, so it now look like this

 

 

is it better or worse? @~ Akatsuki ~
im thinking both XD

 

edit : could you tell me what improvement should i make to the cutie mark?

 

Edited October 23, 2015 by HackTune

[HackTune 177]

This actually looks really nice. (Then again, blue and black are my favorite combined colors)

I personally like this color choice better. But remember, that's just my opinion and you have the right to choose whatever colors you wish.

 

As for the cutie mark, perhaps add 1 or 2 other different musical note

if you look really close the cutie mark is acctually a biner musical note

so is that meh?

[DormantAccount 308]

He seems to be a musician or DJ of sorts. What does he do? Why does he have a knife? The look is good, but a backstory would be helpful.

[HackTune 177]

He seems to be a musician or DJ of sorts. What does he do? Why does he have a knife? The look is good, but a backstory would be helpful.

based from me..

a musician who loves programming and a big fan/ geek of assassins creed

 

http://skycraftdie.deviantart.com/art/Hacktune-564843118?ga_submit_new=10%253A1444783527&ga_type=edit&ga_changes=1

 

 

That's the backstory

 

 

 

 

This is how i look when trying to draw thebackground

Edited October 14, 2015 by HackTune

[HackTune 177]

So? are there anything else that i could improve?

[El Duderino 879]

Honestly, either loose the assassins creed part, or show it in another way than a hidden blade. I get it, but it is a little confusing because with the blade, it looks like you want him to BE an assassin. That, combined with the cutie mark, makes it look like you want a musician or an assassin, but can't decide which one. Don't make him TOO complicated. Other than that, I like it. The colors are much better than the original. 

[HackTune 177]

Honestly, either loose the assassins creed part, or show it in another way than a hidden blade. I get it, but it is a little confusing because with the blade, it looks like you want him to BE an assassin. That, combined with the cutie mark, makes it look like you want a musician or an assassin, but can't decide which one. Don't make him TOO complicated. Other than that, I like it. The colors are much better than the original. 

i don't think assasins show off their hidden blades XD

i was just a really big fan/geek of assassins creed, so my oc is the same

but not all of the drawing of him have him wearing hidden blades. it's also makeshift.

anyway what do you think of the backstory ? is it gary sue?

i was going to draw a workshop for the background. but i'm really busy atm.like the one of the comment above

thanks for the reply

 

Smile attack

:D  

[El Duderino 879]

i don't think assasins show off their hidden blades XD

i was just a really big fan/geek of assassins creed, so my oc is the same

but not all of the drawing of him have him wearing hidden blades. it's also makeshift.

anyway what do you think of the backstory ? is it gary sue?

i was going to draw a workshop for the background. but i'm really busy atm.like the one of the comment above

thanks for the reply

 

Smile attack

:D

The backstory is good. The grammar made it a little hard to read, but the content is good.

[HackTune 177]

The backstory is good. The grammar made it a little hard to read, but the content is good.

sorry it was like 3 am in the morning when  i made the story

and im like half asleep and half woken up.

if u can,please pinpoint all my loose screws

[PROJECT: Simon 3,955]

Beginner? Looks great What program do you use? I think you can improve on his legs, head, and neck ^^ Perhaps looking at some MLP pictures might help you? ^^;;

[HackTune 177]

Beginner? Looks great What program do you use? I think you can improve on his legs, head, and neck ^^ Perhaps looking at some MLP pictures might help you? ^^;;

i used paint to draw the base (color schemes,body,mane,hiddenblade,etcetc) and i use inkscape to vector 

[El Duderino 879]

sorry it was like 3 am in the morning when  i made the story

and im like half asleep and half woken up.

if u can,please pinpoint all my loose screws

Well, it's mainly stuff like not putting a space where it should be, or a period where there should be a comma (looks like some of that was probably just your finger slipping). There are a lot of things like that so it would be hard to point out every one for you. I recommend just reading it again and fixing those small things. The one other thing, but this is not necessary, would be to vary the length of your sentenced a little bit. But that is just a way to make it more interesting to read, not necessarily bad grammar. 

[HackTune 177]

any1 got any tips for a background
i got nothing

[HackTune 177]

So, ah made my oc version of FOE that look like

 

And ah'm trying to do shading/shadowing/lighting
but i've never done shading b4 and needed help
so is this good enough?need halp 

 

lets just say this is a costume for nightmare night XD

Edited the image,again

Edited October 23, 2015 by HackTune

[Mez 244]

Can I suggest a video? It should help.

 

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qPPCeMNaN_c

[TheLegoBrony 383]

i suggested looking on youtube too

[Mez 244]

Yeah, but this guy has the better information he'll need.

[HackTune 177]

Yeah, but this guy has the better information he'll need.

i kinda watched a lot of tutorial about oc's (tyandaga,madmunchkin,etc-etc) i made the backstory etc - etc. "this guy has the information he'll need".what more information i need?explanation please 

[Mez 244]

Never mind that, I thought you hadn't, my bad.

[HackTune 177]

Never mind that, I thought you hadn't, my bad.

XD

its fine.do you have any critique/suggestion to mah oc?

really needed somepony to pinpoint my faults

[Mez 244]

I'm not good at critique, just helping with and creating backstories. I had helped ooBrony with Anna Lasi(OC or persona, not sure which).

Edited October 21, 2015 by Mezcass