critique wanted Mythos Gray, My Mane OC

[GreyScholar 1,584]

I'm curious to see how well my main OC holds up, after all these years, as well see if there is anything to be improved.
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Name: Mythos Gray
Sex: Male
Species: Unicorn
Age: Adult
Coat/Body Colour: A soft gray color.
Mane and Tail Colour and Style: Pure white.
Eye Colour: Purple
Physique: Fit yet lean, because of his travels and generally keeping an active lifestyle. Cutie Mark: An open book with a fire breathing dragon's head coming out from within, symbolizing Mythos' special talent for taking stories he finds and retells to 'come to life' as it were with his magic.
Unique Traits: Illusion magic or magical illustrations as he sometimes calls it. Which he uses to “bring to life a story” or otherwise make some appear real when it is not. Creating visuals and even auditory effects, even to a certain extent the sensation of touch, yet with no solidarity or physicality to such illusions. Even create an illusionary disguise for himself or others.
Residence: Canterlot, Equestria
Occupation: An entertainer, musician, and storyteller publicly, yet secretly also a freelancer who offers his skills as something of an information gatherer and infiltrator.

Personality: Mythos likes to enjoy himself, even if there is risk involved. Being friendly and charismatic, the unicorn has a gift for getting ponies to like him using his good manners and respectful speech, as well compliments. In some ways he can be manipulative, and is not above playing with the emotions of other ponies. Yet he is a stallion of his word, always keeping at least the letter of a promise, and will try to defend a mare or foal if able. He also has a great dislike for any that show rudeness towards or insults a mare, and will not allow a mare to be hit in his presence.

Motivation: Always out for finding a good story and to have fun as well as to meet new ponies, as well an adventurous spirit who wants to explore every corner of Equestria and beyond. More then this though, he wishes to seek out the truth behind different Equestrian myths and legend, as well to learn that which history does not tell... Like for example the origins and past of Equestria beloved rulers, the Princesses Celestia and Luna. Where so little is known.

Likes: Those with a pretty face. As well a love of reading, in good stories and books, meeting others, as well discovering and exploring old ruins or forgotten places.

Dislikes: Those that are too serious, violence against fillies and mares or especially foals. As well those that show rudeness or disrespect, especially to fillies and mares, and those that speak without thought or sense. Any filly or mare shows disrespect to themselves or puts themselves down to harshly, especially when undeserved. With finally senseless cruelty and those willing to abuse others for their own pleasure, caring not for the harm they cause.

Full Biography
Mythos was born in a well to do Canterlot family who always seemed to be busy being involved in some social function or event. His father Brightstrings being an extremely skilled violinist and his mother Autumnheart a well respected private teacher of the history of Equestria. As a foal Mythos had plenty of time to himself, where he learned how to read as well as play music on the piano and violin. Yet while reading came easy to him, the musical arts were much harder. Yet Mythos was even at this young age a determinant lad and he actually did become fairly good at these instruments.

As time went on Mythos expand his studies to not only the basics he needed to know but more, learning all he could on Equestrian history, myths, legends, and even tails from other lands. While leaving piano playing mostly behind he did continue practicing his violin, wanting his father to be proud of how well he could play. Yet he still hadn't discovered his Talent, which frustrated him and pushed him to try new things. Now like all self respecting unicorn he learned to use magic, and from youth he studied what he could on it. Yet that to seemed slowing going, but eventually he found he seemed to have an affinity to illusionist based magic and spells more then any other type. Surprisingly for some he started to become quite skilled at illusions or as he called it illustrations.

When Mythos gained his cutie mark was interesting, as it was during a family party that his parents had prepared him for so that he would act the way he should. While looking around young Mythos noticed a young filly that seemed to not be enjoying herself and took it upon himself to cheer her up. Walking of to the filly Mythos smiles and introduced himself as he had been told to do by his father and asked what was wrong. Founding out she was his cousin as well as that her name Sundipple and explain that she hadn't wanted to go to the party in the first place. Calling her Sunny Mythos asked if she would like to hear a story he had read. Interested the filly nodded as Mythos started, concentrating his magic so that he could created the illustrations he had been practicing though they were like rough drawings.

Smiling he told his story with all the emotion he could and started to catch the attention of others. By the end of the story there were ponies laughing and nodding at Mythos before he was hugged by Sunny as she thanked him. It was at this time that Sunny noticed Mythos cutie mark, which was an open book and a dragon that seemed to fly out of the pages and breath fire at the reader. With all the commotion Mythos parents walked over to see what was going on and grew excited when they saw his cutie mark. The rest of the party seemed to end even better then expected, and Mythos got to talk with a few of the adults because of what had happened as well as spend more time with Sundipple.

As time went on Mythos grew into a young colt, and requested that he could go traveling around Equestria, wanting to see all the cities and town in Equestria. His parents were unsure, but agreed after a bit of discussion. Allowing Mythos to go off on his own as long as he promise to write weekly and tell his parents about his travels. Once he grew tire on traveling, though her greatly enjoyed doing so, he returned home to tell his parents what he had found and discovered as well as others that would listen.

After about a week from when Mythos returned to Canterlot, deciding it was time to put his travel on pause and decided to step into the Canterlot elite as an entertainer and storyteller, showing himself gifted as such and finding use for all the skills he had learned when young and during his travels. Using his magic and his knowledge he weaved impressive stories as well as even played his violin at times. Yet it was during this time that he took up other work as well, finding himself with offers to find information or to learn about this pony or another. It didn't take long for him to realize he could earn more as a freelancer then for entertaining.

It was around this time Mythos met a certain dark blue pegasus, who quickly caught his interest because of how pretty and nervous she was. It didn't take long for him to find out her name was Stardream and that she was with an assistant to an astrologer. After this meeting came many more and Mythos became quite close to to Stardream, fond even though he wouldn't admit to being in love with her. After dating for a time Mythos even consider being with just Star Dream, to actually have a relationship but it would seem that wasn't to be.

Now Mythos had not gone out of his way to hide his activities from Star Dream but neither did he ever go into details on them. Partly because even he knew he was at times working for ponies who were not of good character. Who wanted him to give them the means to cause trouble for others and bring themselves up. He was not proud of this but at the same time he did not see a reason to stop. It was his policy to be available to any that have need of him as long as they paid his price of bit as well as good stories... and as long as he wasn't the cause of harm a filly, mare, or foal.

Star Dream found out about this and was not pleased, trying to get Mythos to stop what he was doing as she was upset he would help ponies that would hurt others. Mythos tried to make it seem it was no big deal, that he wasn't the one actually doing anything wrong. Star Dream was not happy about this and eventually left Mythos in tears, later he found out she had left to another city and he was without a means to contact her. He was left in Canterlot, understanding he had made a grave mistake but with no way to fix it.

All Art Commissioned Work - I can provide artist credit.

 

Edited September 6, 2020 by EquestrianScholar

[Emerald Heart 24,588]

@EquestrianScholar

Wow.

Now that I've read this, I really think that Mythos and my OC, Fable would be great friends. 

She's a storyteller and an expert on magical creatures, (both real and mythical).

 

[GreyScholar 1,584]

7 minutes ago, Emerald Heart said:

@EquestrianScholar

Wow.
Now that I've read this, I really think that Mythos and my OC, Fable would be great friends. 
She's a storyteller and an expert on magical creatures, (both real and mythical).

Well it could very much be a possibility! I was hoping to start roleplaying with Mythos again on here.

[Emerald Heart 24,588]

Just now, EquestrianScholar said:

Well it could very much be a possibility! I was hoping to start roleplaying with Mythos again on here.

Sounds fun! I'll follow you, so maybe we could get to that sometime.

[Props Valroa 26,043]

I would also be interested in roleplaying with him. My character here.
 

 

[GreyScholar 1,584]

I find it amusing I am getting roleplay requests instead of critiques like I asked. Haha

4 hours ago, Scar said:

I would also be interested in roleplaying with him. My character here.

Hmm... Cali could be an interesting prospect. Though very much for a more long term roleplay, especially since she does look like she'd fill more of an antagonistic role in such.

Though I can see a couple of way she and Mythos could find themselves interaction. One being that they are both seeking the same magical artifact, where the sly and charming unicorn uses his wits and cunning to possibly outsmart the mare at times, or annoy her to the point of losing her cool, even distract her with his tricks and illusions, though power-wise it does look like she would win in a straight up fight. Especially with what you have for her background... Another idea being that she basically hires Mythos, perhaps learning of his skills and considering how the unicorn might be useful to her. Where the stallion agrees, in part because he'd be interested in learning more about the mysterious mare. Curious of what her story was.

Edited September 7, 2020 by EquestrianScholar

[Props Valroa 26,043]

4 minutes ago, EquestrianScholar said:

I find it amusing I am getting roleplay requests instead of critiques like I asked. Haha

Hmm... Cali could be an interesting prospect. Though very much for a more long term roleplay, especially since she does look like she'd feel more of an antagonistic role in such.

Though I can see a couple of way she and Mythos could find themselves interaction. One being that they are both seeking the same magical artifact, where the sly and charming unicorn uses his wits and cunning to possibly outsmart the mare at times, or annoy her to the point of losing her cool, even distract her with his tricks and illusions, though power-wise it does look like she would win in a straight up fight. Especially with what you have for her background... Another idea being that she basically hires Mythos, perhaps learning of his skills and considering how the unicorn might be useful to her. Where the stallion agrees, in part because he'd be interested in learning more about the mysterious mare. Curious of what her story was.

Sounds very interesting. I haven't roleplayed on these forums in several years. Perhaps we could roleplay here at some point or make our own roleplay. I would be interested in roleplaying with Mythos. Cali herself, the pony version you see there is not her original form. I have other versions of her for human roleplays.

Cali is the idea of cutting yourself off from creation to create your own reality. You experience everything in your point of view, so you are correct in every manner and form. You are the embodiement of existence and freedom because you are alive, you are conscious, and aware of your consciousness and choice to be indepedent from the rest of reality. The others are just challenges to your will and your plans, it's all a challenge of your mind to improve yourself to reach complete salvation and independence from creation which is observed from your own eyes, so you see what you want to see and block out what you don't. Essence of delusion.

She laughs in the face of the evil, and of those higher in power. They are figures of her own delusions and internal conflict. She sees everyone as equal no matter what. Authority is just an attempt at hiding from the fact that all conscious beings are out for themselves. Greed, lust, it's all people live for. Everything is in self interest, no exceptions. It's how she sees the world.
Unlike them though, she is completely honest to what she is. She has zero shame in admitting the truth about herself. Most would hide it, she doesn't. She expresses it with joy and ego, but this one would be more slick / sly, quiet.

Credit to one of my friends for drawing her normal form.

[GreyScholar 1,584]

So do I need to do anything else for my Mythos? Not seeing a section to submit characters for approval.

Edited October 9, 2021 by EquestrianScholar

[North Star 4,540]

Hey Mythos - you may remember me from a very different forum where you played with Fawlkes  memebase bronies

 

Anyhoof - you submit characters here to the 'characters' tab above and then post in a OOC thread that is looking for players. I have a Gen 5 RP atm if you fancy a nibble with fluffy ponies.

[GreyScholar 1,584]

3 hours ago, abrony-mouse said:

Hey Mythos - you may remember me from a very different forum where you played with Fawlkes  memebase bronies

Anyhoof - you submit characters here to the 'characters' tab above and then post in a OOC thread that is looking for players. I have a Gen 5 RP atm if you fancy a nibble with fluffy ponies.

Yes! I do remember you, hello old friend. How is Memebase Bronies going? How is Fawlkes doing?

Also, thank you I will see about getting my characters submitted.

[North Star 4,540]

Yay Haven't seen Fawlkes in a while but he's doing good in his inimitable way

Look forward to seeing your char trotting the forums