My Little Pony: Wolves VS Ponies! Text Based Role Play Game

[Finesthour 7,286]

"Yeah...but I could not live with myself if another person...."

He stopped his sentence and looked down again.

[Linguz 136]

(First thing's first: That wasn't funny Flare.. that was offtopic.)

 

Garth finished eating and put the remaining bones back on the counter. "I do love eating meat. So getting to the point, why did you spasm?"

[Finesthour 7,286]

He looked back at Garth

"I told you...I....just can't tell you...you would treat me like every other pony has..."

[Linguz 136]

Garth looked him straight in the eye. "Try me."

[Finesthour 7,286]

Shy flower kept the stare garth had thrown at him.

"Well.. remember when I told you I can never go back to town...?"

Edited October 16, 2011 by Finesthour

[SolarFlare 21]

(First thing's first: That wasn't funny Flare.. that was offtopic.)

 

Garth finished eating and put the remaining bones back on the counter. "I do love eating meat. So getting to the point, why did you spasm?"

 

sorry i am a bit immature

[Linguz 136]

"I remember. You didn't say much on the topic though so I don't know anything else other than you said it."

[Finesthour 7,286]

He kept his gaze at garth/

"Well... I did something that... I can never forgive myself with,,,"

He then broke the gaze and looked down, stifling a cry.

[Linguz 136]

Garth grumbled. "When you get the courage to tell me about it, find me." He got directions to the dorms from the nurse. "I'll be in my room in the dorms. Knock when you get to my door and I'll let you in." He started to walk towards the elevator.

Edited October 16, 2011 by Linguz

[Finesthour 7,286]

Shy flower watched garth walk away and kept his head down.

"I am...sory guys. I just...can't tell you what I did..."

He got up and started to head to his dorm as well.

*Well, he is the only person I have closest to a friend here anyway....Should I tell him*

He walked up to the elavator and got to the hallway where the dorms were and stood outside Garth's door.

[Linguz 136]

Garth was sitting in his room, on a chair he had retrieved from the first floor. The entire room was a mismatch of different tools he had found in the pile to be used as weapons and wooden furniture he was shaping into something else with his claws. He heard somepony's clop (sound of hooves hitting the ground) outside his door. He got up and opened it and saw Shy standing there. "I thought you'd come. Didn't expect it to be this early." Garth went back into his room and pulled out a bench from the pile of wooden furniture. "Take a seat." He sat back down in his chair.

[Slendermane 474]

Autumn was worried about Shy, and Garth's wounds, but he know that he should leave them be. He had his leg looked at and bandaged by the nurse, then left to get something to eat.

[Finesthour 7,286]

Shy flower slowly walked into the room, looking at all his possesions.

*He sure has alot of things for just crashing into the school today...*

Shy flower sat down.

"So...where to begin?"

[Linguz 136]

(Garth is a busy griffin. He likes to do something at all times in his life.)

 

"How about where you left off up there? What did you do that you can't tell me?"

[SolarFlare 21]

Flare walked over to her dorm and sighed, "Too bad i don't have a roommate." She climbed into bed and quickly fell asleep.

Edited October 16, 2011 by solarflare

[Linguz 136]

(You walked to your dorm?)

[SolarFlare 21]

(what?)^

[Linguz 136]

(Look at the post above mine.)

[SolarFlare 21]

(i know but what's wrong with it?)

[Linguz 136]

(You put 'I' instead of 'Flare' or 'She'.)

Edited October 16, 2011 by Linguz

[SolarFlare 21]

(ooooooooooouuuh now i get it, thanks!)

 

(fixed)

 

(You put 'I' instead of 'Flare' or 'He'.)

 

She

[Linguz 136]

(Not completely. The part after the dialogue requires 'She' not 'I'.)

Edited October 16, 2011 by Linguz

[SolarFlare 21]

(fixed found another error while i was at it )

[Linguz 136]

The fully correct way of saying what you want to say:

 

Flare walked over to her dorm and sighed, "Too bad i don't have a roommate." She climbed into bed and quickly fell asleep.

 

Comma before dialogue starts if you use a speaking verb. I consider sighed as one. Period if it's an action before it. Capitalize first letter in dialogue. End dialogue with a period not a ellipsis if there is nothing left. Removed the 'and' and capitalized the 'S' in she. Changed too to into.

 

Going into Garth mode:

Your posts are full of mistakes. You don't look over them or even try to make it look nice. Everypony else has good grammar and capitalization and whatnot in their posts except you. You have a load of mistakes.

[SolarFlare 21]

The fully correct way of saying what you want to say:

 

Flare walked over to her dorm and sighed, "Too bad i don't have a roommate." She climbed into bed and quickly fell asleep.

 

Comma before dialogue starts if you use a speaking verb. I consider sighed as one. Period if it's an action before it. Capitalize first letter in dialogue. End dialogue with a period not a ellipsis if there is nothing left. Removed the 'and' and capitalized the 'S' in she. Changed too to into.

 

Going into Garth mode:

Your posts are full of mistakes. You don't look over them or even try to make it look nice. Everypony else has good grammar and capitalization and whatnot in their posts except you. You have a load of mistakes.

 

sorry, i am terrible at writing. =/