writing Procrastinating from writing this book

[Lost 1,411]

I've wanted to try and write a book for years but never got around to it, for my 18th birthday i was given an iPad, something i have little use of, so i started writing my book in it.

 

The book i'm writing is based on the League of Legends character Vayne, its her back story. Please note that this is only my rough copy and has been written on an iPad, which is not easy at all to write on, therefore there are spelling an grammar mistakes throughout.

 

What i'm looking for is general feedback, is this good enough for me to continue with or shall i just spend my time elsewhere.

 

 

It is quite a lot to read though.

 

https://www.evernote.com/shard/s156/sh/d08fc9a6-3442-4e17-86d8-41584818cfd5/c6638938bb9ff70410b11c17aa7a42aa - Chapter 1

 

https://www.evernote.com/shard/s156/sh/df93a258-9ece-45b6-809e-c1781439785b/82d7b1bb011f47882a7ef6ac48361ba6 - Chapter 2

 

Please also note that i stopped writing mid way though Chapter 2, so it does just abruptly end.

[Retro*Derpy 3,582]

I think its pretty good, and as you stated there are some grammar mistakes but I didn't notice that many. So yeah I would go ahead and continue with it. Two things that bothered me(which you might of had but I didn't notice it) is what happen to the dead servents? Did they bury them? And they used magicians to warm the water,so the story has magic related things in it?

[Lost 1,411]

I think its pretty good, and as you stated there are some grammar mistakes but I didn't notice that many. So yeah I would go ahead and continue with it. Two things that bothered me(which you might of had but I didn't notice it) is what happen to the dead servents? Did they bury them? And they used magicians to warm the water,so the story has magic related things in it?

 

Good point, i should address that and yes, the book has magic related into it, although none of the main characters (besides the main villain early on) use magic.