A friend in need Fanfic Ch. 1

[BloodOathHooves 2]

Hey guys,

 

I'm new to the writing of fanfics

Pony fanfics anyways,

just wanted to post the first chapter of my project here to see what every pony thinks 

I appreciate any feed back ^-^

 

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/67296/1/A-Friend-In-Need/Meeting

[SongBrony 419]

First thing I notice when I opened it up. You need to indent each paragraph. I find it much easier to identify new paragraphs when they are indented and not stuck on the left. I'll post when I read it. Kinda busy right now though.