writing Nothing (poem)

[MelancholicMemory 2,025]

I was having some weird feelings, coupled with some philosophical issues a while back, and I wrote this. I know that it may be confusing, but it is how I felt. I don't know if I've lost these thoughts or just supressed them, but I don't feel this way much anymore.

 

"Nothing"

 

I'm still in my youth,
Yet I'm older than dust.
Here is the truth:
I'm neither "me" nor "us."

You see, I have grown
Oh so sick and alone.
I've ventured into darkness,
And I've made it my home.

And somewhere along the way
My soul's gone astray
Now, here is the message thatI have come to convey:

My life has been dimmed
And the dream here has died;
I'm living on Earth,
Yet I'm not alive.

Everything in the world that used to mean something
Has been shown to me now,
And revealed to be nothing.

Oh, I'm not depressed, though that's what it seems
For all of this nothing also includes me.

Now I know you're confused, but please don't get irate.
Perhaps to my feelings, none can ever relate.

Within loss I've gained peace;
A solemn black dove
But peace can mean nothing
Without hope and love.

Oh, I know,
I could try to escape,
But it seems this dark fate
Is within me, innate.

My mind is not yours;
A blessing, a curse,
And as time goes on
My thoughts do grow worse.

My soul screams out, not joining others
And as much as I try, no man is my brother.

So it seems that I'm here,
Stuck in this void
Until I breathe my last breath,
And my black heart is destroyed.

So I'll just sit around, killing my time
And enjoy empty pleasures up here on cloud nine.

For now, I just want to fade into sleep
Oh, a sleep so deep and also so sweet…

Edited February 7, 2013 by MelancholicMemory

[The Stranger 812]

I can relate to this poem. I reminds me of my poem Inky Heart because some of the issues discussed here can relate to what I've written. 

 

I felt the emotion and sadness in this poem. I could just imagine the man in this poem watching the world around him darken as he shrugs his shoulders and moves on. 

Edited January 10, 2013 by Twisted-Bone

[biscuit (smyl3r) 65]

This was quite emotional, MelancholicMemory. Very well written too. Im not sure if I can relate to this well but some verses I really liked.

 

 

You see, I have grown

Oh so sick and alone.

I've ventured into darkness,

And I've made it my home.

 

 

This. This right here. I love it. So sad but at the same time, contempt.

 

You deserve a brohoof

[Twilight Circuits 603]

I wish I could say that wasn't how I feel but it is... more then you know... however, my mind is yours as we are all pon1's. a Pony that is One and the 1 (same) in that we, are as one.

[MelancholicMemory 2,025]

I can relate to this poem. I reminds me of my poem Inky Heart because some of the issues discussed here can relate to what I've written. 

 

I felt the emotion and sadness in this poem. I could just imagine the man in this poem watching the world around him darken as he shrugs his shoulders and moves on. 

As unfortunate as it is that you understand what it' s like to feel like this, it does make me feel better that people can relate to me. Though much of the time I use a narrator seperate from myself in my work, in this case I am the narrator, which is why the emotion is so genuine. I was in a slump, feeling this way from September, all the way into November, and I framed how I expressed my feelings based on this song, which I was listening to a lot at the time. The fact that you compared this to "Inky Heart" is a big compliment to me, by the way, because I thought that poem was absolutely wonderful

 

 

This was quite emotional, MelancholicMemory. Very well written too. Im not sure if I can relate to this well but some verses I really liked.

 

 

 

 

This. This right here. I love it. So sad but at the same time, contempt.

 

You deserve a brohoof

Thank you, Biscuit! I like that verse too 

 

 

I wish I could say that wasn't how I feel but it is... more then you know... however, my mind is yours as we are all pon1's. a Pony that is One and the 1 (same) in that we, are as one.

Just like I said to Twisted- Bone, the knowledge that people can relate to this is comforting, but it is tragic that you too have to feel this way. I hope things get better TwilightCircuits.  As for us all being one, I think I've written a poem about precisely that. I'll try to find it and post it soon    I also am thinking about writing one dedicated to you Scripture of TwilightCircuits

[The Stranger 812]

You're welcome MelancholicMemory. I meant everything I wrote about your poem. I too was effected by a song when I wrote Inky Heart. The night before I wrote the poem I was listening to this song:

 

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FvvHLTacLsU&feature=share&list=FLZQu-AwYJTgLxzP3P6VkUoA

 

The next morning I woke up emotional because a lot of things about my life that went wrong hit me at once. That's how Inky Heart came to be.

Edited January 10, 2013 by Twisted-Bone

[Twilight Circuits 603]

As unfortunate as it is that you understand what it' s like to feel like this, it does make me feel better that people can relate to me. Though much of the time I use a narrator seperate from myself in my work, in this case I am the narrator, which is why the emotion is so genuine. I was in a slump, feeling this way from September, all the way into November, and I framed how I expressed my feelings based on this song, which I was listening to a lot at the time. The fact that you compared this to "Inky Heart" is a big compliment to me, by the way, because I thought that poem was absolutely wonderful

 

 

Thank you, Biscuit! I like that verse too 

 

 

Just like I said to Twisted- Bone, the knowledge that people can relate to this is comforting, but it is tragic that you too have to feel this way. I hope things get better TwilightCircuits.  As for us all being one, I think I've written a poem about precisely that. I'll try to find it and post it soon    I also am thinking about writing one dedicated to you Scripture of TwilightCircuits

Well technically I don't always feel like that but when i do... yeah... it's tears time...

I look forward to reading it when you find it.

A poem dedicated to my scripture eh? I have to say that makes me feel... honored... I have to admit i was kinda beginning to feel that no one really read it or cared for it that much... I alone could actually shed a tear of joy on your thought of doing that.

[MelancholicMemory 2,025]

Well technically I don't always feel like that but when i do... yeah... it's tears time...

I look forward to reading it when you find it.

A poem dedicated to my scripture eh? I have to say that makes me feel... honored... I have to admit i was kinda beginning to feel that no one really read it or cared for it that much... I alone could actually shed a tear of joy on your thought of doing that.

I'm glad it means so much to you. I find your scripture to be very inspiring.   It confuses me sometimes, but I think that it is great. I'm going to finish reading through your blogs to give  me more to work with before I start working on the poem.

[Twilight Circuits 603]

I'm glad it means so much to you. I find your scripture to be very inspiring.   It confuses me sometimes, but I think that it is great. I'm going to finish reading through your blogs to give  me more to work with before I start working on the poem.

If you ever have a question about the scripture don't hesitate to ask. I might surprise you or anypony that actually overcomes the fear to ask me something. As for my blog... the real secret to my blog is Emotion, asking yourself "what does this mean to me?" and whom is actually doing the reading. You? or your soul? It's one of the reasons even I say I read it  now and again. When I feel I need encouragement or to validate how I feel... I got my blog to remind myself of the choices i made and the direction I wish to choose whether it's for me or everypony else.

[MelancholicMemory 2,025]

If you ever have a question about the scripture don't hesitate to ask. I might surprise you or anypony that actually overcomes the fear to ask me something. As for my blog... the real secret to my blog is Emotion, asking yourself "what does this mean to me?" and whom is actually doing the reading. You? or your soul? It's one of the reasons even I say I read it  now and again. When I feel I need encouragement or to validate how I feel... I got my blog to remind myself of the choices i made and the direction I wish to choose whether it's for me or everypony else.

I do the same thing with my poetry. Sometimes I go back and read my older work. That's a good thing about posting my poems here because it brings me back to different times in my life and helps me better understand my inner emotions. Perhaps I should make a blog like yours to share my thoughts in a similar way.

 

I'll be sure to ask you any questions I may have.

[pegasister101 39]

once again, well, you know the rest! I can really relate to this one here and i really like the way its worded. Would you mind if i showed this to a few of my friends? I just love your work!!!

[MelancholicMemory 2,025]

once again, well, you know the rest! I can really relate to this one here and i really like the way its worded. Would you mind if i showed this to a few of my friends? I just love your work!!!

Thank you! I'm glad you like it.  I wouldn't mind if you shared this with some of your friends. In fact I would love that . The more, the merrier!

[ApexHunter 166]

yaaay lots of replies to your awesome poem :3 I'm gonna share it too if you don't mind Everyone must see this masterpiece (the last part might sound like a joke but it's not )

[MelancholicMemory 2,025]

yaaay lots of replies to your awesome poem :3 I'm gonna share it too if you don't mind Everyone must see this masterpiece (the last part might sound like a joke but it's not )

Thanks again for your support, LUkAa! I know I say this a lot, but your encouraging comments mean a lot to me. I would love it if you shared my poem.