General Chat Thread

[Ashbad 969]

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/44418/Down-in-the-Valley-of-Rot

 

go read, I am hoping someone enjoys my fucked up dream idea fanfic

 

The idea of the story aside:

 

- you change tenses in a few spots -- stick with one and don't budge it at all.

- some awkward places with a ton of commas, and some which really could use some commas, yet they're absent

 

Along with a few other things. It's a good draft, but I'd definitely run it through some editing again.

 

Not sure it's worth 4 downvotes on Fimfiction, that's a bit harsh of the voters..

[Princess_Molestia 1,460]

yeah the dream changes tenses a few times, its meant to feel strange but...normally people wouldn't understand that

the character Yokoshima appears in other stories I have written and they all do that, but that's a long story

 

I just want to know what people think of the story itself, of course it needs some editing and tweeking.

Everystory could use more of that, but its the story itself

[Typhoid Libby 1,265]

With all the bad content out there, everything needs fifty downvotes.

[Princess_Molestia 1,460]

but is mine pure shit, is what I want to know

my gen 3.5 fanfic got 5 likes and 0 dislikes

 

I think they liked it better then Gen 3,5 itself

[Ashbad 969]

With all the bad content out there, everything needs fifty downvotes.

 

Sometimes I wish these forums had "anti-brohooves" instead of just brohooves -- I think you deserve 50 of them yourself.

Edited August 12, 2012 by Ashbad

[Typhoid Libby 1,265]

Sometimes I wish these forums had "anti-brohooves" instead of just brohooves -- I think you deserve 50 of them yourself.

 

lul

[Starshine 16,334]

Some people are chatting here

 

 

This thread is usually a barren wasteland

 

but is mine pure shit, is what I want to know my gen 3.5 fanfic got 5 likes and 0 dislikes I think they liked it better then Gen 3,5 itself

Most of fimfiction readers already got their own favorite genres, very hard to get any readers if your story was outside the mainstream genre. Some will even downvote your story without reading it if they don't like the title

 

Don't think about it too much

[Princess_Molestia 1,460]

I just want to know if the idea is any good, I could care less how many thumbs up it gets or not

[Ashbad 969]

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=gbdRCLBBl0o

Video unrelated. Edited August 13, 2012 by Ashbad

[Starshine 16,334]

I'm not the reviewer type myself, can't help you there. Sorry :­(

 

It's rare to see any kind of reviews on fimfiction anyway. Most of them comments are "lol" or "you suck"

[Princess_Molestia 1,460]

read the story and say if its good or if it sucks

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/44418/1/Down-in-the-Valley-of-Rot/Downfall

[Typhoid Libby 1,265]

Just post it on the literary section already, jeez.

[Princess_Molestia 1,460]

obviously you don't know how to advertise something lol

Edited August 13, 2012 by Barkion

[Typhoid Libby 1,265]

Yeah, spamming is the way.

No wonder AdBlock is useless.

[Starshine 16,334]

0 comment and 4 downvotes? Damn that was harsh

 

I guess I'll try my hooves on that one, be right back

 

E: Holy shit they deleted the estimated words read... I already has 10 millions

Edited August 13, 2012 by Dreamwalker

[Princess_Molestia 1,460]

Yeah, spamming is the way.

No wonder AdBlock is useless.

 

exactly!

 

I still remember the mentos jingle from when I was a child...I still remember it

[Typhoid Libby 1,265]

...

And here comes the Block.

[Princess_Molestia 1,460]

I have a poem I just dug up... you'll never guess what its about

 

Do I hold this world in hand

wishing for it to die

burst like a muddy bubble

or crumble like a sun dried leaf

never is the mind clear

always clouded with confusion

sometimes there is a light

sometimes there is silence

 

not sure why the words are all tiny like that, sometimes I do that in the word program to make things look fun

 

Its about a basement, not sure how that came out...writting is weird

[Akemi Homura 7,680]

I have a poem I just dug up... you'll never guess what its about

 

Do I hold this world in hand

wishing for it to die

burst like a muddy bubble

or crumble like a sun dried leaf

never is the mind clear

always clouded with confusion

sometimes there is a light

sometimes there is silence

 

not sure why the words are all tiny like that, sometimes I do that in the word program to make things look fun

 

Its about a basement, not sure how that came out...writting is weird

 

Lovely.

 

[Princess_Molestia 1,460]

poetry takes no effort, least I don't think so

 

maybe it comes natural to me...though most of them are about the weather

[Starshine 16,334]

I hate poems

 

Anyway, what kind of program did you use to write the stories? There's quite a whole bunch of typo there

[Princess_Molestia 1,460]

I thought I corrected them all, and if you mean color and not colour, screw you its colour

I just wrote it on the site then hit submit, I don't get super serious with fanfics, these aren't my true idea's-things I have worked on for months even years

its just something I spit out in a day because I thought it was neat, so don't take it as seriously

nevermind the spelling errors I just want to know if the story is entertaining

Edited August 13, 2012 by Barkion

[Starshine 16,334]

it's good, but you need to slows it down for a bit.

 

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[Typhoid Libby 1,265]

Kill, destroy, murder.

 

There was a better time when it was at least considered a courtesy to have prim and proper spelling when presenting works.

All these fairy tales are turning to dust.

Last laughter to the fallen.

Welp, we have the humour to call it what it is.

Choler.

Fear and be killed.

 

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-pic-

 

Soulbinding, yo. Eyes get burned out by it.

Worst about that? He was not shown anything, he imagined it all.

Stinking Slaneeshbait.

[Starshine 16,334]

Soulbinding...

 

Necessary evil, yes, but they emphasized too much on the evil parts. The wiki image scares me