I need help with a song

[Berrycicle 66]

This is a song in progress called I've been thinking

 

I've been thinking on haw the days have passed

Making memories that won't me sad

Thanks to Twilight and her friends

Theese happy memories will never end

The past thousand years

Been full of tears

How can I have been so bitter

Towards my one and only sister

 

Can anypony help me write it?

[Sugar Pea 2,682]

These lyrics sound really good so far!
I kinda suck at writing lyrics....but here goes nothing.
~

I'm sorry for the way I was
I want these years to last because-
I have no way to make it up to you
Tis true.

~
That's all I have....but if you wanna add that somewheres, feel free. XD
(Spur of dah moment)

 

[Courageous Thunder Dash 7,824]

I think I work with this. I've been writing and composing songs for 3 years now. 

 

Here goes:

 

Verse 2

 

I'm sorry for my arrogance

I couldn't control myself

I just wanted to be like you

But I made the wrong decision

Which cost me all I had

How could I be so selfish

As to want to have a kingdom of my own

 

Chorus

 

We were meant to be together

You and I as sisters

Nothing can tear us apart

Except our atitudes towards each other

We were meant to be together

A duo at heart

This is what we were meant to do

A calling greater than it seems

 

Hopefully it's not too cheesy. 

[Berrycicle 66]

Nature of Fluttershy I realy like that I am going to use that and Thunder Dash I am going to use you Chores. You did verry well I sill Gonna add to it.

[Jamesblorg39welsh 125]

Nice job you guys I can really imagine this sounding like the song walk by foo fighters I would give it a shot the words sound great to that beat

[Berrycicle 66]

I suppose you can give it a try when I have at least two, three or more verses. I never heard that song but I will see how it turns out

 

(Bonus Points if you can animate or something)