Papercut's Epic Forest Adventure Part 1

[Bronium 512]

Hi, I recently wanted to write a story and thought I might start off with something that's pretty easy: Survival Adventure. I'm going to write the start of it

 

 

 

During the summer of 1035 AD(After Discord) a group of three foals ventured deep into the Everfree forest well past any mapped territories.They never returned and no there has been no sign of them since. The ponies' of Ponyville, scared out of their boots screamed to Celestia to restrict access ponies' have to the land of Equestria. Fearing an uprising, high ranking officials begged Princess Celestia to comply. Eventually Princess Celestia introduced The Pony Safety Act (PSA) in the winter of '35 AD which restricts pony access for dangerous regions such as the Everfree forest. It got hailed as the "Savior of the Foals" in addition to her normal title "God".

~The Equestrian Inquirer, 15^th of January, '36

Last night a young colt named Papercut, with an suddenly disappeared. Papercut is a small orange/brown pony. He has a long mane which is laid loosely over his neck.Mostly identifiable by his cutie mark of a Map. He left a note which only had 5 words written down in large,bold letters...There has been no information of his whereabouts as of yet. His parent plea for anypony out there to contact.

~ The Equestrian Inquirer, 27^th of January, '37

Papercut was bored out of his little mind. Canterlot wasn't exactly the most exiting place for a 13 year old pony, especially since The PSA. He explored every possible square inch in Canterlot and every interesting place had been off limits. It seemed like society was determined to stop fun. Life seemed pointless if it wasn't full of surprises. And since life isn't full of surprises, I might as well make my own surprises... " Wait if I make my surprises...is it a surprise?" said aloud. "What are you talking about?" asked Raisin, Paper's best friend since Kindergarten.

"Huh? Oh...umm...nothing."

"Oh come on, you always say that you suddenly do something interesting."

"Jeez,In Celestia's name shut!"

"Come onnnnnnnn"

Raisin was always like that, never the one to keep quiet, always talking Yap,yap yap.Even so, he was good company when he shuts his mouth.

"Come on Raisin, don't be a Nightmare Moon"

"Just tell me, I can keep a secret...if it is a secret." Raisin was getting to Papercut now. His incessant nagging was getting a tad bit annoying.

"SHUT UP" Papercut shouted, a bit too loudly.

"PAPERCUT!" shouted Mrs. Smokey, her breath reeking of cigarette smoke. Everyone was now looking at Papercut, finally getting some drama after a long boring lesson about the History of Celestia.

"Sorry Mrs. Smokey" said Papercut a bit humbled.

"Coward" said Raisin, giggling at Papercut.

"Buck you" whispered Papercut back. This is just awful.I can't believe this is happening to me. Papercut looked up at the clock. 1800 seconds to go.

 

As Papercut arrived home, he immediately rushed into his bedroom. He did not feel like talking right now. As we opened the door into his bedroom he immediately planted his face into his bed. "Ughhhhhh...ughhhhhh. My life is the worst!" complained in typical teen fashion. "I have to get away from here. School is without point considering I'll be good at something anyway and life in Canterlot is just...so...tedious"

"PAPER, COME AND EAT YOUR DINNER" called Paper's mum. Papercut was mentally exhausted by today's events, and could not even bother to call out to his mother or even murmur a word.

"GET OVER HERE RIGHT NOW"

"THREE...TWO...ON-" Gee I wonder what happens at one. Well better not risk it, thought Papercut.

"FINE, I'm coming, I'm coming"

Papercut sat down at the table.

"So Paper, how was school today," asked his dad, making the obligatory dinner conversation.

"It was meh" fulfilling his part of the contract.

"What's wrong with young ponies these days using words like meh and duh. Fell asleep in English as well as Mathematics?" his mum asked sarcastically, with a smirk on her face.

Apparently her sarcasm was lost upon Papercut. "Mum, ehhh, you just don't get it"Papercut ate his meal of hay and roots quickly and left for his bedroom.

"In Celestia's name what is wrong with that kid"

"Don't worry honey, it's just a phase" the middle-aged pony said, trying to reassure her.

As Paper entered his room, he made a decision in that moment, one that would change his life forever. It was a rash decision. Not well thought out but he was sticking to it. I'm making my own surprises.

The next day, a note with only five words was found in his room. "The Everfree Forest is Mine."

 

 

 

 

So this is my first chapter to my new survival story. If people like it I'll continue this on FIMFiction.

This as made for constructive criticism. Please don't destroy me.

"Like it or love it?"

~ Rarity

Edited April 19, 2012 by Scopes

[Dave247 568]

I believe there is potential in this story to be good an that people that like the CMC might enjoy this as well.

 

Also I believe there was something else written in the second newspaper article as it doesn't make sense.

"Last night a young colt named Papercut, with an suddenly disappeared."

[Flutter Pony 224]

This is pretty good I'd like to read more~

[jdor11 91]

it has indeed caught my attention but its missing something to it, work on it a little bit more and you got your self a good story