15 Years- A Hardcore Punk Song

[StealingShad3Z 52]

I watched the mini movie "My Little Dashie" based on the popular fanfic. The story was so heartbreaking and touching that I teamed up with SrightryAmiss and we wrote this!!! This is the second song for our debut albmum!!!

 

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XbJuCXgzJNQ

 

https://soundcloud.com/lakejones/15years

 

Since my screamo lyrics or not always the clearest, heres the lyrics:

 

The first day that i saw you

My world was coming down

The same old life in the same old town

 

I wondered where you came from

I’ve watched you live and grow

Cause you were just a filly on the street with nowhere to go

 

So do you have to go 

and leave me here by my self 

 

Before i found you 

my life was  a living  hell

 

You were always my little girl

(You were my crutch, you were my world)

 

 

so dont believe

that this is goodbye 

because of you 

these past few years

have been the best of my life

 

So can fly through the skies and be free

but in my heart you will be my little dashie to me

 

I refuse to let this day end  

 

i call up the stairs

but you never comedown

 

I know you fear the truth

but i know youll come around

 

Just remember theres an open door

(you can come in, just tell me when)

 

so dont believe

that this is goodbye 

because of you 

these past few years

have been the best of my life

 

So you can fly through the skies and be free

but in my heart you will be my little dashie to me

 

Well can you blame her

She finnaly with her kind

But dont forget me 

for this will always be your sky

and i will never forget you

 

so dont believe

that this is goodbye 

because of you 

these past few years

have been the best of my life

 

So you can fly through the skies and be free

but in my heart you will be my little dashie to me

 

so dont believe

that this is goodbye 

because of you 

these past few years

have been the best of my life

 

So you can fly through the skies and be free

but in my heart you will be my little dashie to me

 

The first day that i saw you

My world was coming down

The same old life in the same old town

 

I wondered where you came from

I’ve watched you live and grow

Cause you were just a filly on the street with nowhere to go

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

   

 

[Slug Village 318]

Nice song I suppose.  Two things I notice:  The higher notes of the vocals feel a little painful, and the drums sound like wet cardboard (they go flip-flap instead of thump-thwack).

[StealingShad3Z 52]

well we cant please everypony, we worked hard on this, and this is our sound, we go, well, Against the Herd. 

Edited September 15, 2015 by StealingShad3Z

[StealingShad3Z 52]

SAY WHAT YALL WANT THIS SONG STILL MADE EquestriaDaily'S MUSIC OF THE DAY!!

[Stallionslaughter 393]

I'm not really into punk rock, and this doesn't make me any more inclined toward it. I can't really hear the snare drum and the cymbals are very loud, but the bass drum sounds awesome.

 

I also really like the guitar tone and the busy riff. My main complaint is that the build and drop of the chorus is quick and lackluster. The individual parts are fun, fast, and heavy but the interludes are too short. I found myself unprepared for the next part of the song.

 

I'm not trying to act an ass here. I think your mastering has a few volume problems but the tone of the bass, guitar, drums and vocals are all very good.