[Fanfic] Crepusculum ad Futurum

[Ashbad 969]

Made my first fanfic at my Brony friends' requests!

 

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/25848/Crepusculum-Ad-Futurum

 

As for a basic description: Twilight writes a Shakesmarean Sonnet for Princess Luna in celebration of her 1200th birthday, but it is returned to her with negative criticism. Luna subsequently offers to introduce Twilight to more modern writing styles and philosophies. During her lessons with Luna, Twilight discovers the philosophy of realism to be depressingly fascinating, and decides to start writing realist-styled prose. She soon begins pondering the point of her existence. She comes to believe that ponykind has no purpose at all, driving her to become depressed at her insignificance. Can her faithful friends stop her feelings of uselessness before she's driven into doing something radical?

 

Would love any input on the first small chapter, and any advice on how to improve it