writing Movie plot that I made

[spas-ticShotty 3,587]

I'm pretty sure this would be under the "Writing" prefix since it is technically the plot of a movie if I were to make one (I really want to create a TV show or movie when I get older, or at least have a script for a producer to make and give credit to me ). I've been developing this since I was in 1st grade, and I've been trying to fill up every plothole (No one make a "that's what she said", please ) but try to give it some imagination, since I'm pretty good with that. Anyways, here's how it would go....

 

WARNING: It is veeery long so please don't ask for a TL:DR version

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10 years ago, two planets, Emverstad and Gydrid, were pitted against each other. Two supernations from Gydrid are at war with the planet Emverstad, which is one giant meganation, over Emverstad's invasion of the supernation Frailhols, on Gydrid. Emverstad claims that Frailhols is still rightfully theirs and was taken from them in a previous war 100 years previous.

 

The war rages on for 7 years, though activity has been dying down, and Emverstad is losing. Their leader refuses to give up though, and is secretly building a space station that can easily win the war in their favor and take over Frailhols. Emverstad doesn't have the suitable power source to power up their main weapon, which is crucial if they are to win against Frailhols and its sister supernation. Eventually, they uncover the secret of a compund that can produce so much power at such an efficient level, it would be able to destroy the Frailhols army. The military of Emverstad launches a mission, consisting of their super weapon, dubbed "the Juggernaut", and some other space-cruisers called Pentagons to retrieve the compound and win the war.

 

Little did they know that the compound had been long since ejected into outer space, and was set course to land on a choice of 3 solar systems; our solar system being one of them. It chose ours (Of course) and landed on Mars before a malfunction in the carrier (Which was holding the compound) caused it to instead crash-land on Earth on a small farm.

 

A mother, expecting twins, was the first to the crash site. She inadvertently contaminated herself with the chemicals emitting from the compound, but they had a strangely beneficial side-effect on her twins; increase in brain development. When the babies were born, their IQ's were so high, that they would be at least capable of reading at 5th grade level by one year. Their incredible knowledge and brain development led to the mother trying to keep custody of the compound, which was under government control for testing. She claimed that her babies were developing skills at a rate so fast that they would become smarter than any person in the world by a long shot, and would be able to do great things with the power the compound possessed. The US government agrees to let the mother have partial custody of the compound, but only if the babies could do something great with the compound within a 3 year limit. Her babies don't let her down, as they manage to create a vaccine that can eliminate the Rota virus from the face of the planet, using several of the new elements in the compound and some other elements on Earth. Their first creation proves successful, and from then on, they start creating invention after invention using funding from nations around the world to create inventions that would help in everyday life.

 

Now in the present, the babies have grown 14 years old; the first twin named Kevin, and the 2nd named Jacqueline. The funding from the nations have proved useful, creating inventions such as a cure for AIDS, a tablet design which would then be sold to Apple to create the iPad, and more. They also create some inventions for fun, which have some usefulness but are more or less for themselves and lucky individuals. The two are in the midst of creating an invention like no other; a station that can create a wormhole that will teleport an individual from one place to another in a mere ten seconds. The design is very complicated, taking a substantial amount of money and energy to make. The two are under some criticism which claims that "too much money is being put into a device that will probably won't see mass production for decades, along with using up so much power". The two manage to create a prototype, which beams them to Kansas, in a successful test-run.

 

Meanwhile, the fleet of Emverstad space ships is now in the solar system, searching for the compound using a highly-advanced element detector. Unknown to them, the fleet of Frailhols has been trailing them for the last 3 years, but decided to speed up and look for the compound themselves in order to make sure it never reaches Emverstad's custody. They land on Earth, where Kevin and Jacqueline are ecstatic to make contact with them. They introduce each other before the head general of the Frailhols military tells them of their mission. The twins are shocked to realize that their compound, which is used to power up much of their inventions, is what Emverstad seeks to destroy the Frailhols military and totally take it over.

 

They also realize the reason the compound landed on Earth was not only it was a danger to the safety of Frailhols, it was also an extreme health hazard (Ironically, it's effects are positive to those lucky humans who actually get to touch it, since the compound can't be exposed to oxygen for too long). At first reluctant to hand it over (With great care) to the Frailhols military, the twins decide to, for the sake of Frailhols' safety and future for democracy, since Emverstad had no reason to invade Earth yet. The head general of Frailhols' military then reveals that Earth's military powers shouldn't get involved, in order not to go into war with Emverstad also. The head general tells the twins that Earth is a planet they consider "of interest"; a foreign planet whose society has a great impact on Emverstad and Gydrid. Earth's main impact is that both Gydrid and Emverstad adopted English as their de facto language. They acknowledge that having Emverstad attack Earth would bring much political backlash from other nations on Gydrid, in which they would also join the war, which Frailhols desperately wants to put an end to.

 

The Frailhols military plan mainly consists of breaching holes in the side of the "Juggernaut" wide enough to plant explosives inside and bombard the supports of the station with firepower in order to destroy it. The only problem is that the Juggernaut is protected by an force-field. The twins then suggest to use a special type of EMP to take down the shield. The head general is at first very concerned, since EMP's are banned from production on both Emverstad and Gydrid since it is considered a weapon of mass destruction. Knowing that they have no other option, they launch the EMP at the Juggernaut. The EMP detonates, but isn't able to bring down the entire shield, since it absorbs too much of it. The hole in the shield is big enough for the Frailhols fleet to fly into, and they commence attack on the ship. Using the extra power from the compound, the Frailhols fleet's firepower is creating immense damage to the exposed portion of the Juggernaut.

 

The Juggernaut is still too large to be brought down, and then another threat becomes immediate; the Juggernaut has stolen an EMP from one of the Frailhols cruisers and is ready to use it against the fleet. The Frailhols fleet tries to land on the ground as fast as possible, since it would be impossible to get enough time to outrun the EMP, but some of it's ships are taken down as the EMP detonates. Luckily, the twin's group of Frailhols ships, which is outside of the EMP's blast radius, pursues the Juggernaut as it steals the compound from the hull of one of the Frailhols cruisers. The Juggernaut heads into outer space, as it starts up its main weapon, which is gonna be used to obliterate the fleet of ships, as its other weapons don't work after their generators are destroyed in the battle. The twins then make a very risky decision; waste all their explosives on a relatively small patch of the Juggernaut's giant pipes which are used to carry energy from the compound to fire up the main weapon; four super lasers which drill into the planet's core, blowing out a portion of it to generate a super-explosion enquivalent to Yellowstone erupting. The plan initially fails, as it doesn't produce enough damage to cripple the pipelines. The head general of Emverstad keeps increasing power though, which is starting to weaken the damaged pipelines. His advisor recommends to keep power at a lower level to prevent a system failure, but the general arrogantly continues with the increasing of power, which proves disastrous.

 

The pipelines succumb to the overwhelming stress from the damage and the high power combined, and explode in a massive blue fireball. The lasers shutdown and the blast pushes the Juggernaut into Earth's atmosphere. Blasting hot gas coming from re-entry fries the ship's inner components, causing it to damage it beyond recovery. It's main engines prevent it from slamming into the ground too fast, but the ship isn't able to keep itself afloat, and plows into the mountain K2. With the Juggernaut down and all hopes of Emverstad conquering crushed, all of Gydrid celebrates over their victory, while Emverstad reals from the loss of both the war and a large part of their military. Earth applauds the actions of the twins for effectively using their wit to help Frailhols in general and save democracy on Gydrid, which Frailhols commemorate as heroes, saying that if they never met them, they would've "not found the compound before it was too late". The twins form an alliance with Gydrid, who decide to put an establishment on Earth in order to provide some of their technically in hopes to help benefit Earth the same way it has, of course with the help of the twin's massive intellect and their compound. The twins of course mention that they will still goof around with their idea's, and continues to invent some of their own neat inventions. They then get some support from Frailhols and Gydrid in general to help with the development of their teleportation device, forming a good bond with Earth and Gydrid.

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I spent a LONG time typing this up, and around 7-8 years developing the story, so I'd appreciate if you took the time to read it all the way through.

 

For those who did, how was it ?

Edited June 8, 2012 by brokimbo deaglePower

[Legendary Emerald 622]

Dude, you shouldn't be putting this online for everyone to see. I haven't read it, but if it is any good, than what is to stop someone from coming in and stealing your idea, and making a movie with slightly changed events and different character names?

Edited June 8, 2012 by Legendary Emerald

[spas-ticShotty 3,587]

Dude, you shouldn't be putting this online for everyone to see. I haven't read it, but if it is any good, than what is to stop someone from coming in and stealing your idea, and making a movie with slightly changed events and different character names?

 

Damn, I never think these things through, and to think I had 7-8 years to do so

[Future Allie Way 185]

This.

I can't even... find the words... to describe how awesome that was.

It hasn't even been produced, but it deserves thirty Oscar awards.

It sounds like something Gene Roddenberry, George Lucas, J. R. R. Tolkien, and Arthur C. Clarke would team up to write

I still can't find any words. Awesome, cool, and amazing are nothing compared to this. I can't find a word to describe this awesomeness

[spas-ticShotty 3,587]

This.

I can't even... find the words... to describe how awesome that was.

It hasn't even been produced, but it deserves thirty Oscar awards.

It sounds like something Gene Roddenberry, George Lucas, J. R. R. Tolkien, and Arthur C. Clarke would team up to write

I still can't find any words. Awesome, cool, and amazing are nothing compared to this. I can't find a word to describe this awesomeness

 

Thank you . It's a shame that not a lot of people have seen this thread, or have replied to it, because it took a loooong time to type. Then again, no one ever checks this part of the forums, so I should've seen that coming

[NavelColt 22,883]

I'll be honest, I tl'dr'ed and only skimmed it, but I brohoof it and stand by your side as I know how to feels for someone to not look at your thread :3 From what I saw, it looks like a very cool movie idea.

[spas-ticShotty 3,587]

I'll be honest, I tl'dr'ed and only skimmed it, but I brohoof it and stand by your side as I know how to feels for someone to not look at your thread :3 From what I saw, it looks like a very cool movie idea.

 

Trust me, it used to be a WHOLE lot less original, basically a rip-off of Star Wars. That was 4 years ago, though, and I've been getting much more original, while using influences to help with it. It is an extremely long post, so I do see why you skimmed it

 

Well, this thread wasn't so much of a good idea to make. Then again, it's never smart to make a TL;DR-prone thread in the internet, unless it's actually meaningful . This was more or less to get some opinions on wheather it was a good plot or not, since I plan to use it in the future. You know, just in case I get lucky

Edited June 8, 2012 by brokimbo deaglePower

[Talemage 47]

I read the entire thing, and I wouldn't be surprised if some people actually do make a movie out of that.

[callmebrony 16]

dude someone can steal ur idea

[spas-ticShotty 3,587]

dude someone can steal ur idea

 

Yah, I noticed that yesterday. I keep thinking I got everything covered, but then karma comes back to slap me in the ass -_-

[callmebrony 16]

Yah, I noticed that yesterday. I keep thinking I got everything covered, but then karma comes back to slap me in the ass -_-

 

lol at least its a great story

[spas-ticShotty 3,587]

I saved the plot (Lol ) into mah computer, and will likely put it into a flash drive, so if some cheap bastard does steal this (Really doubtful anyone on these forums is that pathetic), I can show proof that I was the original creator.

 

Let's just hope for the best, and that doesn't happen

[Talemage 47]

Well, now that mostly everyone has seen this, you might want to remove it from the forums before anyone steals it(or steals it some more, I don't know).

 

 

SEND IT TO THE MOVIE PEOPLE

[spas-ticShotty 3,587]

Well, now that mostly everyone has seen this, you might want to remove it from the forums before anyone steals it(or steals it some more, I don't know).

 

 

SEND IT TO THE MOVIE PEOPLE

 

Who would listen to me, lol ?

[Arrow 236]

That was totally awesome!

 

Loved it! Can't you like, copyright it or something?