offering critique Silky's Beauty Spa (OC creation and re-designing)

[ZiggWheelsManning 10,297]

@ZiggWheelsManning wondered if a bird or one of the ponies could offer her assurance that everything will be alright.  

[Auroraderp 627]

*Knocks on door* Ello? @Princess Silky? Anypony home?

[ZiggWheelsManning 10,297]

@ZiggWheelsManning opened the entrance door to @Princess Silky's spa.  

"Greetings @Aurora876"  

A falcon and several other birds were also inside the spa.  @ZiggWheelsManning then continued.  

"@Princess Silky will be with you to tend to your needs shortly."  

[Shiny Silvermoon 3,803]

@Aurora876 "Hi! My name is Shiny Silvermoon! Nice to meet you! It's your first time at the spa, isn't it? Well, why don't you take a seat and tell me about the reasons that lead you here!"

[Auroraderp 627]

1 hour ago, ZiggWheelsManning said:

@ZiggWheelsManning opened the entrance door to @Princess Silky's spa.  

"Greetings @Aurora876"  

A falcon and several other birds were also inside the spa.  @ZiggWheelsManning then continued.  

"@Princess Silky will be with you to tend to your needs shortly."  

Oh hey. *Steps in*

All right, thank you! *Sits down in a chair and pulls out a book to read*

[Ice Princess Silky <3 13,895]

1 hour ago, Aurora876 said:

*Knocks on door* Ello? @Princess Silky? Anypony home?

Ohai! Step inside, step inside! 
Come meet the lovely @Shiny Silvermoon and @ZiggWheelsManning ! Take a seat and look into the mirror! Tell me! What do you see? *she'd smile*

[Auroraderp 627]

19 minutes ago, Shiny Silvermoon said:

@Aurora876 "Hi! My name is Shiny Silvermoon! Nice to meet you! It's your first time at the spa, isn't it?

Hi, nice to meet ya! *Grins*

Yeah, it is my first time, actually. 

20 minutes ago, Shiny Silvermoon said:

Well, why don't you take a seat and tell me about the reasons that lead you here!"

(Just so we're 100% clear, I'm talking OOC below.) 

Well, I've got an OC that's been kinda drifting around in my head for a while now, but I've only just recently started to solidify him and what he's like in my mind. I've got most of his character design and personality figured out, basically all I need for him is just figuring out a few finishing touches. And the last part of his name. 

[Ice Princess Silky <3 13,895]

24 minutes ago, Shiny Silvermoon said:

@Aurora876 "Hi! My name is Shiny Silvermoon! Nice to meet you! It's your first time at the spa, isn't it? Well, why don't you take a seat and tell me about the reasons that lead you here!"

*hearts melts* Gosh, my beautiful assistant. You're always SO helpful! (ooc: I literally needed to step away. But I trust you with this. RP a little, find creative ways for @Aurora876to discover what their character looks like. The room is loaded with potions, mirrors and shenanigans. So get creative and have fun. I shall return later and by the time you two are done, and I come back, I shall do the art <3  ty!! )

[Saturn Ring]

@Aurora876 Saturn would swoop in from seemingly nowhere, perhaps she teleported? "Hello there! I'm Saturn Ring! I see you've met my bud, Shiny! Oooh, sorry if I startled you... I have a little TOO much joy..." she said, with her horn glowing. 

 

(As Sugar Blossom) Sugar Blossom would wave a hoof, "Sorry about her, she's a little much sometimes, but she can be fun once you get to know her!" she said flapping her crystal-y pink, blue tipped wings. 

"Oh! I almost forgot! Welcome to the spa! I'm Sugar Blossom!" she added, trying to keep herself from singing ecstatically. 

[Auroraderp 627]

1 minute ago, Saturn Ring said:

@Aurora876 Saturn would swoop in from seemingly nowhere, perhaps she teleported? "Hello there! I'm Saturn Ring! I see you've met my bud, Shiny! Oooh, sorry if I startled you... I have a little TOO much joy..." she said, with her horn glowing. 

 

(As Sugar Blossom) Sugar Blossom would wave a hoof, "Sorry about her, she's a little much sometimes, but she can be fun once you get to know her!" she said flapping her crystal-y pink, blue tipped wings. 

"Oh! I almost forgot! Welcome to the spa! I'm Sugar Blossom!" she added, trying to keep herself from singing ecstatically. 

Hello!

(Guys, it's gonna be kinda awkward for me to do this IC if my OC isn't all put together yet, so maybe we could do this OOC? Pleeeeeaaaase?)

[Nightmare Saturn 815]

@Aurora876 No problem! some of my time spent on this site is in character, so it's nice to take a break!

[Auroraderp 627]

12 minutes ago, Saturn Ring said:

@Aurora876 No problem! some of my time spent on this site is in character, so it's nice to take a break!

Thank you!

So anyway, my OC's name is Aurora [...?] (Still working on a good last name, preferably having something to do with the cold climate he lives in/the night sky/both??).

I've pretty much got his physical appearance nailed down, as you can see below. Kinda want to work out his personality a little bit more and he also needs a solid backstory, something he currently lacks at the moment.

(Quoted from a PM)

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Aurora is an average-sized, but robust young adult male unicorn. His body color is entirely a smooth, medium/light gray and his mane and tail are pure white. Dark blue eyes. His horn's about average length, maybe ever so slightly longer than normal. His cutie mark is, you guessed it, an aurora! It symbolizes not only his special magical ability to light up the northern sky with beautiful, whispy, ethereal colors, but also to the light and hope he loves bringing into other ponies' lives. But we'll get to personality stuff later.

Anything else I should mention? Oh yes, his mane and tail are very thick and full, as he lives in a rather cold climate.

PS. Forgot to mention this above, but the color of his magic is a light, minty green (Think Starlight Glimmer).

[Nightmare Saturn 815]

@Aurora876 Hmm, would you like me to try and make a sketch? I'm not very good but I can try!  

[Auroraderp 627]

2 minutes ago, Saturn Ring said:

@Aurora876 Hmm, would you like me to try and make a sketch? I'm not very good but I can try!  

I mean, if you want to that would be cool! But absolutely zero pressure of course. The art can come later, right now I just want to get all the details about him figured out.

[Nightmare Saturn 815]

@Aurora876 Ok!  I'm totally fine with doing so! It's nice to do things for others, that and it's fun to draw someone else's characters for once.  

Now about the last name thing, that part might be a little hard for me, since my OCs usually end up having names come up with on a whim, especially Sugar Blossom!  

[Auroraderp 627]

Moments ago, Saturn Ring said:

@Aurora876 Ok!  I'm totally fine with doing so! It's nice to do things for others, that and it's fun to draw someone else's characters for once.  

Now about the last name thing, that part might be a little hard for me, since my OCs usually end up having names come up with on a whim, especially Sugar Blossom!  

That's fine! I'll probably come up with a list and we can see what sounds the best.

BTW- Let me get a description of his personality up here. Gimme a minute.

[Auroraderp 627]

So-- personality-wise:

Aurora is quiet, cool, and collected, with a sharp mind and quick reflexes. Can seem a bit distant before you get to know him, but he's not at all unfriendly, just shy. Dislikes being the center of attention to an extreme and prefers to be in the background of things, carefully observing everything going on around him. 

He's very practical and down-to-earth, and likes to use his five senses to explore the world around him. Loves the natural world and knows a good deal about plants, animals, the weather and geology. 

Even though he doesn't always show it, he cares immensely for all those around him, especially close friends. Always likes to lend a helping hoof to anypony who needs it. Aurora has always had a ready smile and a good sense of humor as well.

Some of his hobbies include reading (Especially books about nature and magic), practicing magic, cooking, and his favorite pastime-- secret random acts of kindness. As I mentioned previously, he loves doing good things for others, but doesn't like the recognition and attention that often comes with it, so he does ponies favors in secret. Often a pony will come home to find that their windows have been washed or a full hot supper has been spread out on their table. 

As for his connection with his cutie mark-- He has a unique aspect of his magic that allows him to light up the sky with beautiful Auroras, bringing a touch of beauty and radiance into the lives of all those that see them. He also just really enjoys doing it, as they're fun to make and each one is different and special.

Where he's from-- I was thinking the Crystal Empire would be the perfect place for him. But definitely somewhere in the arctic north. 

 

Sorry for writing a whole friggin book lol, I didn't realize it was gonna be that long. 

Edited May 11, 2023 by Aurora876

[Nightmare Saturn 815]

10 minutes ago, Aurora876 said:

Sorry for writing a whole friggin book lol, I didn't realize it was gonna be that long. 

It's okay!  That happens to me all the time, I try to write something small, and then the idea gets bigger and then I can't stop! 

I'm gonna try to draw Aurora now, here's an example of my artstyle with Saturn's ref  

Spoiler

If you wondering what's around her neck and stomach, it's fluff, I like drawing ponies all fluffy  

[Nightmare Saturn 815]

@Aurora876 Finished! I hope I did him justice! (also, I can't draw stallion body builds, so please forgive me ) 

Also the cutie mark is so bad, I'm sorry  

[Shiny Silvermoon 3,803]

@Aurora876 "Sorry for making you wait like this! I'd love to help you with your OC! Just tell what you want to start with and we will begin working on it together, does that sound good to you?"

[Auroraderp 627]

2 hours ago, Saturn Ring said:

@Aurora876 Finished! I hope I did him justice! (also, I can't draw stallion body builds, so please forgive me ) 

Also the cutie mark is so bad, I'm sorry  

This is awesome!! Thank you! 

[Nightmare Saturn 815]

@Aurora876 Aww, thank you!   

[Auroraderp 627]

2 hours ago, Shiny Silvermoon said:

@Aurora876 "Sorry for making you wait like this! I'd love to help you with your OC! Just tell what you want to start with and we will begin working on it together, does that sound good to you?"

No problem and thank you! Yes, that sounds great.

Hmmm, I don't really know what else about him I really need to put down. Obviously excited to see how @Princess Silky draws him but that'll be a bit before that happens, probably.

Not too much of a backstory needed, But I guess a unicorn living in the Crystal Empire is a little odd and should be explained. His family probably just moved there or something when he was a colt. Or maybe his grandparents before he was born. IDK. 

And of course, I still need a good last name....

[Ice Princess Silky <3 13,895]

*As Silky would listen to him describe himself, she'd sit him on the chair and spin him in place a little bit until he was facing a mirror. The image was not quite visible just yet but she would show him a catalogue of clothing, hairstyles and hair dye* Which ones attract you the most, lovely? 
 

Spoiler

Essentially, use Google to see what kind of clothing, hairstyle, fashion or personality archetype you can place in a spoiler for me to get inspired and come up with something. Your description is VERY inspiring, btw! But the more details you add, the better it helps <3

 

[Shiny Silvermoon 3,803]

15 minutes ago, Aurora876 said:

No problem and thank you! Yes, that sounds great.

Hmmm, I don't really know what else about him I really need to put down. Obviously excited to see how @Princess Silky draws him but that'll be a bit before that happens, probably.

Not too much of a backstory needed, But I guess a unicorn living in the Crystal Empire is a little odd and should be explained. His family probably just moved there or something when he was a colt. Or maybe his grandparents before he was born. IDK. 

And of course, I still need a good last name....

Let's start by the name after Silky is done with your style, if you don't mind! After all, it's the first thing that the ponies you are going to meet will learn about you!

Edited May 12, 2023 by Shiny Silvermoon