Opinions on my fan fic: One Little Pony

[Bowser 50]

Well its about a mare who grew up in a village that was overrun by the changelings so they could expand their territory. His name is Maaron who was only just a filly during that time. His parents were drained out of their love and turned into changelings but before that happened they send him away to call for help. not knowing where he was going he ended up into the everfree forest looking for somebody to help his village out. Even if he did find someone it was too late his home was already done for as it is. So here he is lost,alone,saddened, and cold for he was only one little pony.

 

 

 

This is just the beginning of it and if it seems like a good fan fic to all of you then i will extended further. Thought this up from a dream i had,and i got the name from my gamertag on XBL.

Also if you want a song to fit the mood of the beginning here's the link:http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=KCsXNMfoxis

[Lord Pretty Pie 64]

I just have one note up front. Is the character a male or female? Because you said it was a "Mare" Which is a female, and you said "Filly" Which is a young female, yet you talked about the character using "He" And "His".

[Bowser 50]

oh fack im soo browning confused on those he is a he btw