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All of my life I have suppressed my emotions and tears in the face of tragedy for the sake of others. This is a poem about finally facing these feelings. I think it's one of my best poems.

 

Coping

 

Today I saw
What I've always feared.
I looked in the mirror,
And my mind swiftly cleared.

Darkened circles
Below sunken-in eyes,
Red with fatigue,
And blackened with lies.

My hair spread 'bout wildly,
Face covered in stubble
I cupped my face in my hands,
Knowing I was in trouble.

My soul left to die,
Preserved only in words
Shared for attention.
Oh, it's all so absurd!

Today I must face it.
I know I must try.
So I thought of you, darling;
I sat down and cried.

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Two things,

 

1) It rhymed, BUT you have done somrthing that very few poets manatge to do these days with rhymed verses. You have a FLOW.

It is ever present and carries throughout the whole thing.  SO, in that resoect, VERY GOOD :)

 

2) :(

 

Why so sad?

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Two things,

 

1) It rhymed, BUT you have done somrthing that very few poets manatge to do these days with rhymed verses. You have a FLOW.

It is ever present and carries throughout the whole thing.  SO, in that resoect, VERY GOOD :)

 

2) :(

 

Why so sad?

1. Thanks! Yeah, I've found that that is the aspect of my poetry which has improved most over the years, and when I read this poem compared to one of my earlier ones, I just felt like I had to share it.

 

2. If I remember correctly, I wrote this when I was thinking about my grandmother who passed away a few years ago and how I never really dealt with it. That's why it is so sad.

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The dead are never gone, so long as they are in our hearts.

 

This, is actually the theme of "Never Gone", though it was hidden.

 

My condolances, if it means anything.

You really should write more, especially when emotional.

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The dead are never gone, so long as they are in our hearts.

 

This, is actually the theme of "Never Gone", though it was hidden.

 

My condolances, if it means anything.

You really should write more, especially when emotional.

I kind of got that vibe from "Never Gone," though I couldn't point to exactly why.

 

I actually do write a lot. I just usually don't get around to posting my poetry online, and when I do it's usually just on deviantART. I suppose I will try to post my poems here more. :)

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The dead are never gone, so long as they are in our hearts.

 

This, is actually the theme of "Never Gone", though it was hidden.

 

My condolances, if it means anything.

You really should write more, especially when emotional.

So once you and I die the ones in our hearts die with us? That's depressing, it's like you kill people by just dying. Thank you for ruining my day. (I was slightly joking)

 

The poem is very good and rhyming and flowing and most probably better then this sentence when it comes to rhyme, flow, structure, and being good.

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