The Ponies in the Cupboard

[QueenMidas 3]

I was watching The Indian in the Cupboard and I thought this would be a nice little story. So, enjoy~ Not sure if I'll make it all just one part or do a bunch of different little parts. The story will be up a little later.

 

"Really?" my friend asked as I got a Happy Meal bag. "You're getting happy meals just to get the My Little Pony toys?"

 

I nodded as we sat down at a table, waiting for our other friends to join us. "Yes, yes, I know, I'm obsessed with a show for little girls," I replied, smiling a little. 

 

She shook her head, but she laughed a little. "Oh well, what kind of friend would I be if I didn't support your fandom?" she said, unwrapping her cheeseburger. "So how many of those do you have?"

 

"Only five, including this one," I said, motioning to my bag. "I was hoping to get all of the mane 6, but I didn't come to McDonald's for a couple of weeks. Still, I'm hoping this'll at least be another of the mane 6, one I don't have, so that I can at least have five of them."

 

"You can probably get them on ebay, you know, if you really want to," she told me.

 

I shrugged, pulling the toy bag out. I pouted a little and said, "I don't even know who Lily Blossom is, she's not one of the mane 6."

 

"At least she's a pony," my friend said, smiling a little.

 

"I suppose so, she's cute too, but I wanted Fluttershy or something," I replied.

 

"Like I said, ebay." 

 

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(I'll have to continue later TT^TT)

 

Upon arriving home later, I set my new pony toy on the shelf next to the other four. I smiled a little. "Oh well, at least I got most of you," I said quietly. I felt silly as soon as the words left my mouth. Why was I talking to inanimate objects? Ponies at that...

 

Shrugging, I headed into the living room. I could hear my mom talking to someone, but I couldn't quite hear who the other person was. 

 

"Riki! Grandma's here," my mom said as soon as I stepped  through the doorway.

 

Before I could greet her, my grandma wrapped me up in her arms and proceeded with pinching my cheeks and giving me kisses. 

 

When she finally let go, she looked at me excitedly. "I brought you a gift," she said. 

 

Great, I thought, assuming it would be some sort of knitted sweater or something along those lines. Not that I don't appreciate my grandma's gifts, but it's obvious she hardly knows about me... Or young people for that matter. 

 

That's just how some grandmas are though, I guess.

 

I was actually surprised when she revealed a cupboard from her magic bag of wonders. (Just kidding, it was sitting on the coffee table)

 

"I found it while I was going through the garage," my grandmother explained. 

 

I could tell it was old. It's white paint was scratched off and hardly white anymore, but it looked sturdy. Picking it up, I found that it wasn't actually that heavy. 

 

I smiled a little. The cupboard was pretty cool, a nice kind of vintage. "Sweet, thanks grandma," I said. 

 

"Of course sweetie," she replied. She pulled a small skeleton key from her pocket and handed it to me, "Here's the key. In case you put something super secret in it." She winked at me and I laughed a little. 

 

"You could put those little ponies of yours in there," my mom said, "They may be cheap little McDonald's toys, but they are cute and collectible."

 

I shrugged a little, turning red as she and my grandma started talking about how I still acted like a little kid. 

 

I took my mom up on her idea though. Setting the cupboard on my drawers, I opened it and set the five little ponies inside. "Lily Blossom, Pinkie Pie, Rainbow Dash, Rarity, Apple Jack," I muttered as I placed them in the cupboard. 

 

Oh well, who cared if it was kid-ish? They were cute and, unlike most other cartoons nowadays, had nice messages. Friendship is magic. No matter what happens, you're friends will always be there for you.

 

It was true, as far as I could tell. 

 

With a little smile, I closed the cupboard and put the key in the lock. "I hope it's the right key," I said as I jiggled it in the key hole, "Grandma's always forgetting things, she might've given me the wrong..."

 

I stopped mid-sentence as the key finally fit and I was able to turn it. I pulled at the small knob, testing it just in case. It was locked alright. 

 

~Later~

 

I was laying in bed, half-asleep, when I heard it. A little scratching sound and the sounds of someone knocking on wood. They were so light and quiet though, it couldn't be someone knocking at the front door. I tried to ignore it, guessing it was just my imagination since I was so sleepy. 

 

Then I heard the little voices and my eyes flew wide open. 

 

"Let us out! Who put us in here? Where are we?" someone was shouting. The voice was so small and faint, yet so familiar. It was defiant and demanding. It was real. Not my imagination.

 

It seemed like it was coming from... The cupboard? 

[QueenMidas 3]

(Lulz, to anyone (IF anyone) who was reading this, sorry. This latest semester at school has been killing me. I've only now gotten some time to chill. The teacher's seem to have run out of projects to give. So I'll get back to this, because I think it's a fun little fan-fiction)

 

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I sat up in bed, thoroughly confused. "What is that?" I whispered gently, partially because I was too tired to talk louder.

 

It had to be my imagination, right? Who would be talking at this time of night?

 

"Let. Us. Out!" the voice shouted defiantly. There seemed to be other voices too, but much fainter than the first one.

 

Had I accidently left my laptop on? Was it playing videos or something? Because that sounded an awful lot like... Rainbow Dash. That wasn't possible though. Like... So impossible, it wasn't even fathomable.

 

I got up slowly, walking towards cupboard which was now on my dresser. I leaned in close, holding my ear up against it.

 

"Ow!" I half-shouted as the cupboard bumped my head. Something had hit it, from the inside, hard enough to make it tilt. "What in the world?" I wondered aloud. I turned the key and pulled it out, opening the cupboard door.

 

"Dear."

 

"Sweet."

 

"Celestia."

 

I backed away from the cupboard. "I'm dreaming, I have to be dreaming," I told myself, squeezing my eyes shut. Unfortunately, when I opened them, they were still there. It wasn't a dream.

 

There, in the cupboard, were the McDonald's Happy Meal ponies. Only... They weren't plastic figures anymore, no. They were still small, they were still ponies but... It's hard to explain, so I'll say it in the simplest way I can. They were alive.

 

Breathing, talking, angry, scared, confused, flying, walking...

 

You get the point!

 

They were just as stunned as me. All of them looking at me with their jaws dropped in their ever-familiar cartoonish way.

 

"What in Equestria are you?" Apple Jack asked, the first to recover and step forward on the small cupboard shelf.

 

"Wha--"

 

Before I could answer, Rainbow Dash flew out. Complete with a small rainbow flowing behind her. "Answer her!" she shouted.

 

"I... I'm a human," I stuttered.

 

"What's that?" Pinkie Pie asked, hopping forward.

 

"Me," I replied, still stunned.

 

"What have you done? Where are we? Why are you so big?" Dash demanded.

 

"I honestly don't know... And I'm average sized for my age," I said, getting a little defensive with the last part, though I wasn't sure why.

[DoctorWhovian1902 596]

Just so you know someone is reading this, I like it, and think you should post a few chapters on someplace like FiMfiction or something. Good concept for a story.

[Hazardus_Havard. 480]

Well... crap.  I was hoping to write a story based around this idea, but it seems you beat me to the punch.  I may still do it though, with my own spin on it.

 

I felt it was a bit short on details and you moved too fast here, but I'm guessing this is only a rough draft of what you'll be writing.  I always liked the idea of crossovers, but people always want to go with adding characters to their stories with no rhyme or reason.  This idea though, it has so much potential for a really good ponies in Earth story.  I actually know a group that write those types of stories that would love to see this kind of stuff, but seeing as what else is on that site, I can not tell you where it is without being warned from doing so.

 

I hope you improve this so I can see where it goes, and to give you better criticism on your writing.  I'm enjoying it so far, I just wish it was fleshed out more.

[QueenMidas 3]

Thanks so much

 

You're right, this is more of a rough draft. I've read it over a few times and am writing it in a notebook, trying to improve it. I'm glad you guys liked the concept!

 

And I may just post it on FiMfiction, when I'm a bit less busy with school and such

[Hazardus_Havard. 480]

Thanks so much

 

You're right, this is more of a rough draft. I've read it over a few times and am writing it in a notebook, trying to improve it. I'm glad you guys liked the concept!

 

And I may just post it on FiMfiction, when I'm a bit less busy with school and such

 

Next time, could you please quote whoever you're talking to?  It would make it easier so those people will know they were responded to instead of never knowing.

 

Also, I'd advise trying to make sure that your story is more fleshed out.  Make it a good story that people will want to recommend and really enjoy.  You could just post as it is and possibly get a good amount of people interested.  But there will be people that would have wanted more. 

 

Let me say it like this:

 

There are people that usually write small little bits at a time, never writing more than is ever needed to get their story across as hors d'oeuvres.  That only leaves the reader with a small bite size snack that their eyes can feast upon which helps feed their minds.  But they're never fully fed, always wanting more to satiate their reading hunger.  If you're willing to write in the first place, why not go for a full course meal instead?

Edited March 4, 2013 by Hazardus_Havard