Of Cyborgs and Augmentation

[MetalBrony 44]

I have started to write a story, which I have published the first chapter of. I was wondering if anyone would mine taking a look at it a give there opinion of it (note the first chapter has not much ponies in it at all, it is mostly there to set up the story, put it into context and to have some exposition)

Link to post on FIMFiction http://www.fimfiction.net/story/319195/of-cyborgs-and-augmentation

It has not been approved yet, so here is a link to deviantart http://eddie-shadows.deviantart.com/art/Of-Cyborgs-and-Augmentation-Chapter-1-MLP-Fanfic-595064403?ga_submit_new=10%253A1457299595&ga_type=edit&ga_changes=1&ga_recent=1

Edited March 6, 2016 by MetalBrony

[Idris 241]

It's looking good I read all three chapters. How big will it be?

[MetalBrony 44]

It will be quite long, around 8-9 chapter. I have not done anything recently, as I have the flu and can't concentrate much.

[DaringDo-While 47]

I read the first chapter, will read the other two later, but looking good so far.

[MetalBrony 44]

Posted a few new chapters of it recently, as I have not really wanted to play video games in free time where I am not doing revision.

Edited April 15, 2016 by MetalBrony