visual art What do you think of my Prologue.

[RaphLuna 305]

Prologue

Prologue
Earth, once a warm tropical planet teaming with a variety of creatures. Struck by a large mystic space rock, shattering to a blue powder dust. Spreading upon the lands and sea, ascending the planet into pure darkness. The temperature of the planet began to drop. Food became scarce. Devastating most of the creatures to Extinction.

The Clydesdales, one of the lucky surviving species. First to experience the side effects of the mystic blue dust. Their mare's giving birth to furrier foal's. The newborns development stages spanning out taking much longer to grow from foal to adult. Their bodies sender, coats thicker. Manes and tails growing much longer. Severing from their ancestors, evolving into a new breed called the clyonies...

 

The new species quickly advanced from their primitive state. Developing the ability to speak, and think. Forming tribes, setting rules.  Yet the effects continued further down their gene pool. Some of the clyony mare’s giving birth to foals with strange deformities. A single horn sticking out of their head, ( Unidale ), or bird-like wings a little below the shoulder ( Clyasus ).

Fearing the deformed foals to be an omen of bad luck. They were abandoned into the wild. Some chose to conceal their foals birth defects. Few years later, some discovered their offspring to wield magical powers. Fearing their foals tainted with evil witchcraft. Luring them into the woods, only to put an end to their lives.

Some clyonies grew curious. Wondering, what became of the outcast. Eager for answers, leaving their tribes. Never to be heard of, or seen again.  It was unknown if any other creatures  began to evolve into a more advanced species. However, one thing is for sure. Life on the planet will always find a way to adapt and survive.

Author and Artist : Laurie Ann Garland

Edited October 3, 2019 by RaphLuna

[Brony Number 42 9,928]

Kind of short? It leaves a lot of questions.

[McFlurryMaddie 268]

Overall good. There are a few places where the periods and commas are misplaced, though I bet those were just minor typos. 

[RaphLuna 305]

On 10/7/2019 at 2:15 AM, Spooky Brony 42 said:

Kind of short? It leaves a lot of questions.

Its a work in progress.