fan fiction How I learned to stop hating and love the pony

[Skullbuster 1,906]

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/5567/How-I-learned-to-stop-hating-and-love-the-pony

 

Here I the link, this is my fanfic

[Anonymous~ 591]

Hm... it's still being made? because it's a little bit "short" to say the least.

[Skullbuster 1,906]

Yes, that was just the intro, I'll be writing the first chapter latter today, also keep in mind this is my first attempt at some thing like this

[Anonymous~ 591]

Yes, that was just the intro, I'll be writing the first chapter latter today, also keep in mind this is my first attempt at some thing like this

 

Oh, ok ok, can't wait to read it when it's finished. Good luck. I can remember my first fanfic... LOOOL... good ol' days. xD

[pondus30 152]

The start was nice! now give me the rest >

[Finesthour 7,287]

Hmm...

 

Honestly, you should of written more before you published.

 

Published is for finished chapters c:

[L-PinkVsD-Pink327 177]

Are you basing the story on your life? If so please know I mean no offense at all.

 

Now what I think already: The person at the beggining is leading a fanfic cliche life. It's made to where there's very minimal chance there's anything good going on for him, which could irritate readers thats at least read a 'Human in Equestria' story. (This is no problem for very new readers)

 

However the evidence it was done by someone with much sense (No painstaking sentences with no detected errors) balances out the desire to look for another story immedietly.

 

A good introduction if you ask me.

[Skullbuster 1,906]

Lol yeah I did base the character off of me, that cliche life was my life lol

[HanPolo 150]

Lol yeah I did base the character off of me, that cliche life was my life lol

Trust me, you arent alone on that cliche life thing...

 

I completly agree with the spongebob thing, my childhood ended there. I miss seeing Grim decapitated on Billy and Mandy. 'The music sucks? ...Just 'the music sucks'?

 

Great little intro Skullbuster! Cant wait for the rest!

[Skullbuster 1,906]

Chapter 1 is up

[Anonymous~ 591]

Not bad, Not bad at all, If I do say so myself. For a firts attempt it's quite good, though it's a bit to short for my taste. Anyways, can't wait to see the next chapters.

[Skullbuster 1,906]

Yeah, I'm working on makeig these thins longer

[Fizz. 1,078]

RANDOM UZI

 

 

Because of the random Uzi, I give you 10/10. Well played.

 

 

But other than that, it could use a few tone ups of grammar. And a bit more descriptive. Also: *you're *your *there *their *they're, watch for the differences in these homonyms.

[Finesthour 7,287]

Skull, if you want, I can try to get you an editor.

 

I know a few people that could help you out.

[Ezynell 2,037]

I agree with Finest, these are quite short