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Hello everbody! I have decided to look at some OC's that you guys are uncertain about, and fix mistakes if i encounter any :) i'm not the best at making OC, but i can tell wether or not someone has made a good OC :)

 

See you!

 

I'll give your OC stamps depending on their quality. This is the seals i judge with, the highest is the best

 

Blazing seal of aprooval

Diamond seal of aprooval

Slashing seal of aprooval

Potential seal of potentiality

Meh seal of disaprooval

 

 

Keep in mind that i only do this to make YOUR OC better, so if i think that your character isn't good. Then please don't be mad at me :)

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Alright Flamestreak. This was an overall good OC, you only have some grammar issues here and there, but i understood what you meant His Backstory is long and detailed, but it doesn't have detail on ho

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Sallie. color me impressed! A very unique character, that's both original and interesting Her cutiemark is also interesting and... You know what? Your character is just flat out original. :)I did enc

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I'll look at them will take a bit of time thoughEDIT: Will look at them tomorrow have some stuff to do irl     Alright, Ravedarkmane is a pretty solid character. You have a good backstory, awesom

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This looks like fun :). 

 

Could you look at my OC Rave Darkmane :)? https://mlpforums.com/page/roleplay-characters/_/rave-darkmane-r7416

 

And if you can, perhaps my other two OCs, Dyna and Tacet  :please:?

 

https://mlpforums.com/page/roleplay-characters/_/dyna-mite-r7938
 

https://mlpforums.com/page/roleplay-characters/_/tacet-diamond-r8249

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This looks like fun :).

 

Could you look at my OC Rave Darkmane :)? https://mlpforums.com/page/roleplay-characters/_/rave-darkmane-r7416

 

And if you can, perhaps my other two OCs, Dyna and Tacet :please:?

 

https://mlpforums.com/page/roleplay-characters/_/dyna-mite-r7938

 

https://mlpforums.com/page/roleplay-characters/_/tacet-diamond-r8249

I'll look at them :) will take a bit of time though

EDIT: Will look at them tomorrow have some stuff to do irl :)

 

 

Alright, Ravedarkmane is a pretty solid character. You have a good backstory, awesome character desing and an interesting concept of him being evil and all. The only thing that bugs me is his cutiemark. it's a cool and fitting cutiemark, but i feel like you could have described his talent more :)

 

So he'll get a Blazing seal of aprooval! (Insert awesome seal here)

 

(I'll do your other OC's later :)

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I expect a meh but my ocs flamestreak and blue diamond please. There both in my signature

Alright Flamestreak. This was an overall good OC, you only have some grammar issues here and there, but i understood what you meant :)

His Backstory is long and detailed, but it doesn't have detail on how he got his cutiemark. Flames cutiemark is pretty cool, and it's fitting. So like i said a good character :)

 

You get the Diamond seal of aprooval! (Insert awesome seal here)

 

I'll look at your other oc later :)

 

I'd love to hear your thoughts two of my OCs: Autumn and Blue Moon. Improving them would be nice. :)

 

Both their character profiles' links can be found below in my signature. Thanks! :D

Autumn. She was a very interesting and original character :) The only improvement that you can make (in my opinion) is a bit more detail on Autumn and Bluemoons relationship. While it's cool and that they married, and i get the point. But it still feels rushed at the end

 

You'll get the Blazing seal of aprooval! (Insert awesome seal here!

 

I'll look at your other OC later :)

 

I only have the one OC whom is linked in my sig as the top link.

 

I only have the one OC whom is linked in my sig as the top link.

Ok mate, i see that you have a problem with backstories, so i'll try to help you out when i have more time :)

 

But the other things were pretty solid, and i love the creativity you had with his cutiemark.

 

You'll get a potential seal of potentiality (Insert potential seal here)

 

Hope that OC will be a cool one in the future :)

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Ok mate, i see that you have a problem with backstories, so i'll try to help you out when i have more time :)

 

But the other things were pretty solid, and i love the creativity you had with his cutiemark.

 

You'll get a potential seal of potentiality (Insert potential seal here)

 

Hope that OC will be a cool one in the future :)

 

I would appreciate any help you could offer and I'm glad you like the cutiemark

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Now I would like to say i'm going to remaster this OC once my writing gets better.... But recently I've found that writing is a fun past time for me and have decided to take it up as a hobby of course being a new writer i'm looking for all the critique I can get so of course i'm going to let you review my latest work which is extremely old and I know it'll probably only get a meh rating but the critique is good regardless   https://mlpforums.com/page/roleplay-characters/_/isaac-swiftheart-r8638

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Well, I don't expect a good review for my only OC, Will Guide, but I still want to see how you would rank him. His link is in my signature.

A pretty damn solid character if i have to say so myself. Interesting idea with him being a human, and a very descriptive backstory. His cutiemark is unique and well described. There is not really much i can help with there :) you have created an amazing character

 

So i think you know my rating. I give him a Blazing seal of aprooval (insert awesome seal here)

Can you check my oc Serenity crescent and ethan crescent?

Alright Serenity. First off you need to remember to describe what her cutiemark is. I didn't excactly understand what she could really do other then fight and be caring. You should also work more on her backstory. Don't focus on what she can accomplish, but focus more on WHAT happened to the character. Remember these factors, and you should have a decent character. The only other error i encountered was your grammar. It didn't impact your OC but the error is there if you want to fix it :)

 

Because your character isn't a mary sue or a ridicilously OP character. She gets a potential seal of potentiality!!

Now I would like to say i'm going to remaster this OC once my writing gets better.... But recently I've found that writing is a fun past time for me and have decided to take it up as a hobby of course being a new writer i'm looking for all the critique I can get so of course i'm going to let you review my latest work which is extremely old and I know it'll probably only get a meh rating but the critique is good regardless   https://mlpforums.com/page/roleplay-characters/_/isaac-swiftheart-r8638

Isaac. To be honest i had a hard time understanding your character. The only thing i got, was that he had lost every family member at a young age, and that he wanted to be a wizzard. So let's break things down!

Cutiemark. While your cutiemark looked cool, it lagged a description of what his talent actually was.

Personality was also very vague, and it didn't really give him a... Character. I mean you didn't add depth to his personality.

Backstory was pretty off, he could really use a more detailed backstory, and he has the potential to become an interesting character. :)

 

You get a meh seal of disaprooval. But keep in mind that i'm trying to help you. If you want a more detailed review of your character then i can provide it if you want. But that'll be when I have the time :) hope that this review helped you out :)

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A pretty damn solid character if i have to say so myself. Interesting idea with him being a human, and a very descriptive backstory. His cutiemark is unique and well described. There is not really much i can help with there :) you have created an amazing character

 

So i think you know my rating. I give him a Blazing seal of aprooval (insert awesome seal here)

 

Alright Serenity. First off you need to remember to describe what her cutiemark is. I didn't excactly understand what she could really do other then fight and be caring. You should also work more on her backstory. Don't focus on what she can accomplish, but focus more on WHAT happened to the character. Remember these factors, and you should have a decent character. The only other error i encountered was your grammar. It didn't impact your OC but the error is there if you want to fix it :)

 

Because your character isn't a mary sue or a ridicilously OP character. She gets a potential seal of potentiality!!

 

Isaac. To be honest i had a hard time understanding your character. The only thing i got, was that he had lost every family member at a young age, and that he wanted to be a wizzard. So let's break things down!

Cutiemark. While your cutiemark looked cool, it lagged a description of what his talent actually was.

Personality was also very vague, and it didn't really give him a... Character. I mean you didn't add depth to his personality.

Backstory was pretty off, he could really use a more detailed backstory, and he has the potential to become an interesting character. :)

 

You get a meh seal of disaprooval. But keep in mind that i'm trying to help you. If you want a more detailed review of your character then i can provide it if you want. But that'll be when I have the time :) hope that this review helped you out :)

no its perfectly fine now to take this critique and actually use it to help my new writing hobby now about the more detailed review i would like that as it would help even more to know the nitty gritty of what i need to improve on on that note realize if this takes to much time don't stress it

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Ivy winds. Her apperance isn't that long but gives you enough of a picture to imagine the character, which i can respect.

Cutiemark was short and simple, nothing going on there.

Her personality is too simple though. You could really use some more sentences instead of words there.

Her Backstory was a bit weird. You described her saving madness from some bullies. But what about her adult life? What does she do in her spare time? Stuff like that needs answers. If i remember correctly she was 28 years old. But there is only her school life, and building the factory which is not something you accomplish in 28 years. So i highly recommend you to add more detail :)

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Sallie. color me impressed! A very unique character, that's both original and interesting :) Her cutiemark is also interesting and... You know what? Your character is just flat out original. :)I did encounter some grammar errors, but they didn't really bother me at all :)

So i'll give your character a Blazing seal of aprooval!!!

How about giving my OC a go? Link is in my signature :) I would love to see your response :squee:

 

Stormlight. A very well made OC :) I really like her design overall, and i'm a sucker for shy OC's  :wub:

Her cutiemark is also well made, and has more then one meaning which i really like :)

Her apperance while not as creative as her character, still looks good :D

Her Backstory is detailed, long and interesting which i also like, and there were no grammar errors :pinkie:

 

All in all i wil give you character a Blazing seal of aprooval :D well done!

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Alright Eggshell needs some more detail on her backstory. The onlt information we get is when she was born and what she is doing now. Which leaves a 16 years time gap with unexplained events. Her cutiemark is good, short and simple. Her personality needs some more description as well. I don't really understand how the character is except for socially awkward. Here is a link to my chracter if you are interested in seeing someone elses OC. https://mlpforums.com/page/eqw-characters/_/unapproved/crescendo-star-r342

 

I'll give your character a cross between meh, and potenital. Hope that this helps you out a bit :)

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This looks like fun :). 

 

Could you look at my OC Rave Darkmane :)? https://mlpforums.com/page/roleplay-characters/_/rave-darkmane-r7416

 

And if you can, perhaps my other two OCs, Dyna and Tacet  :please:?

 

https://mlpforums.com/page/roleplay-characters/_/dyna-mite-r7938

 

https://mlpforums.com/page/roleplay-characters/_/tacet-diamond-r8249

 

Dyna mite. A cute character, i really enjoy her simple design. But as far as i know she is a character for a special RP, which means i can't properly review her. But she could use a description on what her cutiemark means. While i understood the cutiemark, it would still be a good idea to add that :).

Her personality is pretty good because it descripes her pretty well, and her backstory is too short for my taste, but i don't know if it was on purpose you made a short backstory.

 

She get's my Slashing seal of aprooval.

 

Tacet Diamond. Were do i start with her... She looks like an interesting character. But what i like the most is that you explained WHY she is the way she is. Most people don't do that. Cutiemark is short, simple and cool. Personality has enough detail for me to understand what kind of character she is. While your backstory explains alot about why she acts the way she acts. It stil lags more information on what happened to her. Your backstory has information about her whole life, but these informations were pretty vague. What i mean is that she could use more detail on every stage of her life. :)

 

She'll get my Slashing seal of aprooval.

I expect a meh but my ocs flamestreak and blue diamond please. There both in my signature 

 

Blue Diamond. What is her cutiemark? You descriped what her cutiemarks MEANS but now what it looks like :)

Personality is good. Gives me a good impression of her character :)

Your backstory was a bit odd to me... It descriped what has happened through out her life, but then you went on a ponified videogame rant. What i think you should do is remove the last bit about all the games she plays, and give us an impression on what she does as an adult :)

 

Overall i'll give it a Slashing seal of aprooval

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I've already asked for ratings/help in a thread but I'm curious to what you think of the revised version :D

 

https://mlpforums.com/page/roleplay-characters/_/night-rain-r8785

 

Night rain. Nice description of cutiemartk, and you even added how he got it, which is good :)

His personality is also pretty good. Gives me an idea of the character behaviour

His backstory leaves me with some Why's though. Try to ask yourself why when you read his backstory. For example: Why was his life boring? Why did his parents split up? Stuff like that :)

 

I'll give him my slashing seal of aprooval :)

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Night rain. Nice description of cutiemartk, and you even added how he got it, which is good His personality is also pretty good. Gives me an idea of the character behaviour His backstory leaves me with some Why's though. Try to ask yourself why when you read his backstory. For example: Why was his life boring? Why did his parents split up? Stuff like that   I'll give him my slashing seal of aprooval

Thank you <3 However, the backstory was actually meant to be a little bit lacking in certain details but since some people have mentioned that I will probably fill the backstory some time ^w^

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