critique wanted Odd Pairings Next Gen OCS: Critique Wanted

[Tao 7,756]

So I've been working these ponies out over the summer and I love odd-ball pairings which is why I made these ocs!  Right now,  all six of them is just the bare bones while I work out stories and rework out a few odd things.   I just need some basic feedback based on what I have so far on the six of them and trying to think on doing a seventh on Luna and Discord idea...:,

 

I just made outline cards for them for now and no profiles.

 

Feedback wanted:

Design

Personality

Talents

Cutie Marks

Pairings of the Parents

Anything you want to add

 

 

 

[Memory Lane 131]

Sure... why not? I'll give you a little feedback.

 

Wishvow

 

 

Design: She has a rather soft color scheme. It's calming. For me, all I would do is add more gradience to her wings.

 

Personality: She certainly sounds like someone worth knowing, but can she really be self-confident and self loathing?

 

Talent: Hearing the music from the stars? That's the most poetic talent I've heard in a awhile.

 

Cutie Mark: I see what you did there with the star and music staff. That makes good sense to me.

 

Parents: Starlight Glimmer and Twilight Sparkle hmm? Could you imagine a more powerful couple?

 

Comments: I have to say, I like her name.

 

 

 

Aquarius

 

 

 

Design: Okay. Aquarius makes me imagine water, and water reminds me of blue, so my expectations have already been fulfilled on that level. If you give him a longer mane and tail, you can really play on the water theme.

 

Personality: He sure sounds like an agreeable fellow. If he wasn't so indecisive, he could settle disputes in court.

 

Talent: Finding balance? I'm not sure what that's referring to, but...

 

Cutie Mark: I do see he has a sort of Yin-Yang thing going on. That's cool.

 

Parents: Hmm. Did you mean to say Soarin and Lightning Dust? If so, then I can see where Aquarius get's his passive personality.

 

Comments: Wait, he dislikes pies!? Oh no... maybe he doesn't take after Soarin after all...

 

 

 

Calla

 

 

Design: Too bad she isn't available in crystal form. She probably would have shone so brightly. I do kind of like those star shaped earrings she has though.

 

Personality: She seems to have a good side and a bad side. That's a little scary. How easily does she shift moods?

 

Talent: N'aww... this talent is sweet. How could she still be pessimistic? 

 

Cutie Mark: Butterflies are so nice and gentle. I think it speaks to her affectionate side.

 

Parents: Big Mac is one thing, but I'm not familiar with Jewel Joy.

 

Comments: She has a pet bat named Dusk? That's an interesting choice. I guess Calla would be able to see beauty in them huh?

 

 

 

Primthorn

 

 

Design: I've always been a fan of mellow color schemes. Is that a four leaf clover necklace? Must be lucky.

 

Personality: Complimentary of her color scheme. Nice and mellow. I think we'd get along.

 

Talent: I don't think I'm following you on this one. Dream Walking? Isn't that what Luna does? If so... how? Or is she good at lucid dreaming? If that's the case, then she really is lucky. I wish I could do that.

 

Cutie Mark: It's relevant to her presumed talent, to say something. The moon represents nighttime, and the cloud represents dreams, right?

 

Parents: Rose and Breaburn... hmm... no comment?

 

 

 

Dusky Sun

 

 

Design: Am I looking too much into this? Or does his coat represent a cloud? And his mane & tail represent the sun? Because that would be pretty clever. In either case, I don't really feel the brightness of it all. Going down a few shades darker could make all the difference.

 

Personality: These traits sort of contradict each other... both each other and his other information.

 

Talent: Finding balance again? I'm still not sure what this really applies too.

 

Cutie Mark: Oh it's going to be partly cloudy tomorrow? (I had too) I see the sun in Dusky Sun, but you know, I'd probably go with a setting sun cutie mark instead. Then you would capture both halves of his name.

 

Parents: You had me going there for a minute. I thought I read Blueblood and our Derpy. Wait... that color scheme...

 

Comments: Like father, like son?

 

 

 

Lockette

 

 

Design: So cool it's cold. I think short manes and tails are back in style.

 

Personality: So she loves assembling her wealth and then gives it all away?

 

Talent: A master of lost and found then. And no magic involved? She must be quite the detective.

 

Cutie Mark: Jingle keys are amazing, but I'm not sure what they represent. Could it be... finding the key to a mystery?

 

Parents: Coloratura and Coco Pommel? I'd never see that one coming.

 

Comments: If being a Royal Guard doesn't work out, I'm sure the Detective Agency would love to have her.