video I Made My First Movie Review - Looking for Criticism

[Literally Snails 2,307]

Hey guys! It's been a long, long time since I've posted on these forums because I've been busy with other aspects of life, but it seems I need some help. I've been wanting to make youtube movie reviews for years now (Most of my favorite youtube channels review movies) but never had the confidence to actually do it until now. This is strictly non pony related, at least right now, but I really need some constructive feedback from anyone who has the time. I want to know what I can improve on because this is my first attempt at something like this and it felt very awkward to do.

 

[trademark2 485]

You want a review of your movie review!? 

[Literally Snails 2,307]

You want a review of your movie review!? 

I mean, yeah, basically I do.

[FlitterFlutter 1,570]

Honestly, this is good it reminds me of if jontron did movie reviews.  It has that almost awkward comedy he is known for. In fact i would say if you keep this kind of stuff up you are sure to make a name for yourself. I love zoom in things you did, that reminds me of idubbs for some reason. The only real flaw was it ran a bit long for my taste. Then again I have some ADD stuff so who knows.

[Literally Snails 2,307]

Honestly, this is good it reminds me of if jontron did movie reviews.  It has that almost awkward comedy he is known for. In fact i would say if you keep this kind of stuff up you are sure to make a name for yourself. I love zoom in things you did, that reminds me of idubbs for some reason. The only real flaw was it ran a bit long for my taste. Then again I have some ADD stuff so who knows.

It's funny that you mention Idubbs, because I do parody arts and crafts videos that my friends say are too similar to his style. As for the length, I think the best thing I can do is avoid going so deep into the movie's back story before I start the actual review. That'd shave off a lot of time.

[Oddball 132]

          I enjoyed your review, however, certain areas felt desperate and awkward to me. It's 9:58 and 11:06, which I liked how you used a different show convey how mundane and emotionless she was acting, I just don't quite understand the purpose of acting like she is an alien, that put me off. You might find it better to put the epilepsy warning at the beginning of the video with a black background instead of in lower right corner on that mostly white background were it blends in. Keep up the good work boss.

[ScrewLoose 133]

It's a good review, well, it's certainly better than I could do!! However, it is a little awkward at times 

[Literally Snails 2,307]

          I enjoyed your review, however, certain areas felt desperate and awkward to me. It's 9:58 and 11:06, which I liked how you used a different show convey how mundane and emotionless she was acting, I just don't quite understand the purpose of acting like she is an alien, that put me off. You might find it better to put the epilepsy warning at the beginning of the video with a black background instead of in lower right corner on that mostly white background were it blends in. Keep up the good work boss.

Thanks for the critique. I really agree with the epilepsy warning thing, that's something I kind of need to get right. I also should have set up beforehand that I thought she sounded like an alien that didn't understand human emotion before making the joke, it would have been less confusing.

 

 

It's a good review, well, it's certainly better than I could do!! However, it is a little awkward at times 

Could you tell me what times seemed the most awkward? I'm assuming the intro was the worst part.