writing I had to.

[Finesthour 7,287]

This is a monologue I wrote for my Theater Pro class. I am preparing to get into a play in a few months about a suicidal boy who writes poems, and ends up killing himself at the end when everything seems better. So sit back, relax, and get freaked out.

 

Bold = Great amount of emotion

 

Setting: Psychiatrists' office.

 

*Enter stage left and sits in chair*

(Audience is the Psychiatrist)

 

So, tell me something Doc. How exactly are you supposed to help me? By saying everything is alright? Come on, who are we kidding? That only gives false hope to those who are already lost. And another thing, don't tell me that "I understand" bullcrap. You don't understand anything about the world. What made you think you have the right to say that you understand me? Unless, of course, we are the same. Like, we were both put through the exact same emotional torture, correct? Oh Doc, you and I are like, brothers! Oh for so long I needed someone who understood me!

 

Enough joking. Although, it feels great to just smile, eh? Haven't done so in months. For that, I guess I'll follow mothers advice and see if you really just do "Understand",

 

Where to begin. Oh yes, my father. Unlike your conventional family man, my father was a very bad guy. I do not say this lightly, either. He hit us, rather hard. Whenever he felt angry, he decided to take it out on us. For years, I thought his abuse was my fault. I took it out on my friends. Soon enough, I was alone. No one wanted to be around me. I then found out what loneliness feels like. Would you like to find out Doc? Well, imagine you woke one morning, and everyone was dead. Not just dead. Mutilated. Gore spread out everywhere. And deep down, you knew it was all your fault. You caused their deaths. And you must live with the guilt. Imagine that kind of pain. That is how it feels to drive everyone away.

 

Stop saying you understand! You don't know what it feels like!

 

When you're alone, it seems like no one cares. You have to tend to yourself. You learn to... create your own friends. It's better than nothing, right? Well, it worked at first. I wasn't alone anymore. Charlie always had my back. He told me that I was special, that I had worth. And I believed him. I took his word for it, and actually became happy for a while.

 

But like everything else in my life, it reversed directions quite quickly. You see, Charlie gained a mind of his own. Instead of me calling out to him, he began to whisper to me when I didn't expect it. He talked on his own. And he... turned. Instead of his big grin, his mouth was always a scowl. His eyes... god his eyes. They were always bloodshot. Whenever he appeared, he would always scare me. This... it angered him. To the point that he called me named. He would put me down every second he could. My depression grew to such an extent, that I began to believe him once more, What made it even worse was...

 

It was...

 

I was in love with him. So I listened to every word he said. I had to make him happy again.. I had to do whatever he said.

 

No! You don't understand at all! You don't know what he made me do! You don't know!

 

I... Charlie... I killed the source of my issues. The person responsible for everything. I...

 

I killed Father.

 

But now... Charlie is pleased. He's happy now. I see him... He's so happy...

 

Who are you to call me crazy? I've never been more sane in my entire life. Charlie and I are in love. We're together. No one will ever be able to tear us apart.

 

*silence*

 

Hey Doc, guess what Charlie wants now?

 

(Takes out knife)

 

Anything for Charlie. Anything.

Edited September 18, 2012 by CronaTheCritic

[Psych Ward 377]

O.o Okay. I'm freaked. Very good though. I wish this was a book! XD Have fun with the play. This is a a really good piece of work. Keep on it.

[Finesthour 7,287]

O.o Okay. I'm freaked. Very good though. I wish this was a book! XD Have fun with the play. This is a a really good piece of work. Keep on it.

 

Wait, you wish this was a book?

 

How so, what do you mean?

 

The character, or this exact scene? Because I do write literature as well xD

[Psych Ward 377]

Wait, you wish this was a book?

 

How so, what do you mean?

 

The character, or this exact scene? Because I do write literature as well xD

 

I don't know. I just think that if it continued on, it would be a really good story. This scene was really good, but I do think the character could be really fascinating.

[Finesthour 7,287]

I don't know. I just think that if it continued on, it would be a really good story. This scene was really good, but I do think the character could be really fascinating.

 

You do realize that the character is literally me, right?

The beginning is true, but then I took a twist when I thought of something that could really scare people.

 

What is scarier than an enemy who is in your head, and you can't stop them?

[Psych Ward 377]

You do realize that the character is literally me, right?

The beginning is true, but then I took a twist when I thought of something that could really scare people.

 

What is scarier than an enemy who is in your head, and you can't stop them?

 

Okay, I didn't but okay. XD

 

I honestly don't think anything is. Except maybe zombies. Those things are PRETTY DARN scary. Actually, I think what's really even scarier is that this could really happen to someone.

[null123456 759]

This is like something you would find out of some kind of manga book.

A really, really, good manga book. I loved the end. Can you put the play on youtube? I would love to see it.

The end really got me. It's like those movies with plot twists. When the characters on screen are about to die, I begin screaming useful advice to the screen.

[Finesthour 7,287]

Well, here is kind of what I will be preforming this as. This was MONTHS ago now, and I have learned from the mistakes I made in this video. And I will be sure to record this when I do it.

 

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=l8nlIXDlwNg&feature=plcp

[Hazardus_Havard. 479]

Was it wrong of me that the entire time reading this I kept thinking this was really Crona from the show?

 

Besides the point I don't see the suicidal feel to it with the character, especially since the main character went after the doctor in the end. Felt more like the inane mumblings of a loony. Though I guess appropriately you didn't say this monologue WAS about it, only you were going to be in a play about that.

 

I personally have been writing for a while and have only begun actually doing stuff myself, it's actually quite fun once you get into it though difficult.

[Finesthour 7,287]

 

Besides the point I don't see the suicidal feel to it with the character, especially since the main character went after the doctor in the end. Felt more like the inane mumblings of a loony. Though I guess appropriately you didn't say this monologue WAS about it, only you were going to be in a play about that.

 

This monologue has nothing to do with suicide. Our director just needs to see we can express the emotions that is required from an emotional disturbed individual.

[Hazardus_Havard. 479]

This monologue has nothing to do with suicide. Our director just needs to see we can express the emotions that is required from an emotional disturbed individual.

 

Okay, that makes more sense now. You should've posted that in the original post to better understand what we are reading.

 

As for disturbing, I've always found using things that make people squeamish and uncomfortable to do the trick there.

[Twiliscael 3,960]

This monologue has nothing to do with suicide. Our director just needs to see we can express the emotions that is required from an emotional disturbed individual.

 

I think that this fits what you're trying to accomplish really well. For a second, I really thought of you as insane. Kudos to you, I can't act for shit.

 

My only problem is that I feel like the whole bit with the knife at the end is a bit too sudden. Like, it just sort of pops up "Hey I'm gonna kill you now!" (though that may have been what you were going for, I dunno)

[One 498]

That was...interesting... Well wrote I must say, and a little creepy. So kudos...and you creep me out a little now... But I'm sure it's gonna be a great play.

[Flicker 141]

Creepypasta! And very well written at the same time. I love the breaks where he says, "Stop saying you understand! You don't!" That was a great touch, especially the part at the very end.

[Finesthour 7,287]

Creepypasta! And very well written at the same time. I love the breaks where he says, "Stop saying you understand! You don't!" That was a great touch, especially the part at the very end.

 

Late reply, ftw.

 

>Creepypasta

 

This isn't a creepy pasta, it's a monologue for theater xD

 

And yeah, those are where I will have my emotion spikes.

[Flicker 141]

Late reply, ftw.

 

>Creepypasta

 

This isn't a creepy pasta, it's a monologue for theater xD

 

And yeah, those are where I will have my emotion spikes.

 

Well, I know it's not Creepy pasta per say, I just like saying it. And scaring people. That's always fun. Once I told my friend a horror story and there was the one zombie saying, "Satie. I want my liver back." And there was a staircase in the house where I could be right behind it without being seen, so I decided to scare her and whispered, "I want my liver back." When the next person came around the bend, and I spooked the wrong person XD That was so fun

[John Smith 6]

Well, I know it's not Creepy pasta per say, I just like saying it. And scaring people. That's always fun. Once I told my friend a horror story and there was the one zombie saying, "Satie. I want my liver back." And there was a staircase in the house where I could be right behind it without being seen, so I decided to scare her and whispered, "I want my liver back." When the next person came around the bend, and I spooked the wrong person XD That was so fun

 

Creepy pastas always find some way to murder me from the inside out and starting with my childhood... i don't know why but they always want to kill me in my sleep...

 

Yes... Mercs's sleep.. i know its hard to believe!