writing Cold (Poem)

[Harmonic Revelations 8,835]

Cold

The rain patters on, endlessly

dropping down for all to see

The feel of the dampness on my skin

cannot compare to the depth of the pain within

 

You once were there, to help me see

you made me things that before I could not be

Why must you leave me now, in times of need

But your words, your teachings are my creed

 

The sky is dark, deep navy blue

why could I not have passed away too

You have left my presence, needlessly

and it holds truth that without you I cannot be

 

It is done now, the rain is gone

but light will not return until the crack of dawn

But without you by my side, it matters not

without you, I have no light, all I can do is rot

 

I sit now, here by your resting place

My heart beats, at a steady pace

I solemnly yearn for the day when

we can finally be together again

Edited February 28, 2013 by ☣Harmonic Revelations☣

[MelancholicMemory 2,025]

That was beautiful, Harmonic Revelations. It was so sad, and it felt so sincere. In terms of aesthetics, the rhyme scheme was simple, yet powerful, and it was overall, very well written. You are a wonderful poet, HR!

[Harmonic Revelations 8,835]

That was beautiful, Harmonic Revelations. It was so sad, and it felt so sincere. In terms of aesthetics, the rhyme scheme was simple, yet powerful, and it was overall, very well written. You are a wonderful poet, HR!

The incredible writing process I went through was well worth it then.

 

Here is what I did, step by step.

 

1.) Decided I was going to write something sad

 

2.) Clicked post new thread

 

3.) Thought of a basic plot and made it rhyme

 

That's basically all I did, I wrote it off hand.It should be noted it took me all of, say, five minutes to write it

 

 

Thank you for the compliment Melancholic.

Edited February 28, 2013 by ☣Harmonic Revelations☣

[MelancholicMemory 2,025]

The incredible writing process I went through was well worth it then.

 

Here is what I did, step by step.

 

1.) Decided I was going to write something sad

 

2.) Clicked post new thread

 

3.) Thought of a basic plot and made it rhyme

 

That's basically all I did, I wrote it off hand.

Yup, that's usually how it works

 

It's really good considering that you just wrote it off hand like that. Like I said before, great job!